Everything will work out… He looked over his assembled friends and smiled, all of them smiling back. Yeah… everything will be fine.

Sound like not a ending. you better put a ending screen and moving far away like say something on the screen of nature and towns. and ending of a bad day to fish.

also...good jobs.

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Heh, thanks. We tried... It's something I've done and I wanted to try the slow approach.

5944204
Yeah, we may have went over the top... and I know a lot don't like it... but it wasn't even supposed to be an actual story to begin with. The beginning was my fault, I literally rushed through it like a few hours after we wrote it. Thanks for reading though

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That is us, the strongest in the Derps.

5937397
Hehehe, we is are the smartest!

5990532 I dunno, it's sorta what I do haha

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God, I hated stepping on Legos... which is why I gave mine away haha

5990145
Ah yesh, you see, we aren't the brightest people in the bunch... That didn't occur to us till after I published it haha

5990505 that's what you get when you look through the old comments.

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I know I'm being too critical about this, sorry its a habit.
But I'll keep an open mind on the rest, so far I'm entertained so I got give you props on that but like I said before if at any point they turn into ponies then that's bad and you should feel bad

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Haha it's okay, I'm just glad you enjoy it. And I always feel bad about this story xD