we have heard of diamond dogs, griffons, dragons, hydra's. but what if there are two creatures so strong that even dragons fear them? there is fang the basilisk, then there is the one cursed to stone everyday until the curse is broken and his name is vatry, and they are searching for a way to cure vatry's curse and find a way to save the basilisk city. ({ I apologize for not continuing the story as frequently as i would have like, mostly due to writers block, school, and a host of other things, but be sure in the future i will attempt to update the story as frequently as i can })
the OC characters are mine, i may need a proof reader, and i do not own MLP:FiM, they belong to hasbro.
teen for slight swearing.
Chapters (8)
"and before anypony or creature could stop her she looked right into fang’s eyes."
Pretty good so far anyways, or at least in my opinion.
2048108 thank you.
Capitalization is magic.
Other then the part were none of them are sane, no, I see no difference.
Story needs some improvement, but still good.
2190470 tell me where and i'll improve it.
2193425 pacing seems fine for the most part. The only sore spots are the grammar and the character interactions.
The whole 'gaining several powers in one go' seems VERY OP for this kind of fic, especially since the main character is already strong.
So, ya. Those are my pet peeves for your story, otherwise still good.
2193887 dont worry, he will get very weak, very shortly. just think of this fight as jumping into a -20 degree bath, or sticking your fingher into a nuclear reactor socket. thanks for pointing out the "jumping 60 levels in a second" thing, i will refrane from using it in the future.
I like it
5848414 thank you, though this seems like my most successful story so far.
5849893 really well I mite look at some of your other fics
5850093 its been a long time, so is the others as bad as i think they are?
6335170 your other stories are alright but not as good as this one.
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my muse needs to learn how to focus