Applejack enjoys another day on the farm, lazying around.
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Oh ok
(Joke) Alt. Title: Just Another Perfect Day For Pairing Rainbow Dash And Applejack
Ah, yes, another Japplecrash fiction.
Ah, such perfect days
P.S. Screw all the downvotes! This story is great.
rows and rows of sweet, delicious apples
apple TREES
It is also home to six of Equestria's most famous ponies
You're referencing S.A.A. in the previous sentence which leads this one to indicate S.A.A. as well when you actually mean ponyville
been through thick and thin whether it be stopping
Captain Comma, we need youuuuuuuuuuuuuu!
chaotic and devilishly clever spirit of chaos
is there a non-chaotic spirit of chaos?
lives in a rustic, red house on Sweet Apple Acres that is home to her family that watch over the land of Sweet Apple Acres
argh, it hurts.
down to earth
down-to-earth
one of the most dependable ponies you'll ever meet
I'll never meet her oh god world why are you so crueeeeeeeeeel
cyan furred pegasus
Fur? FUR?! It's a coat. Coat!
Her favorite pegasus, Rainbow Dash.
Captain, our sentences need completion!
Applejack sighed in content,
contentment
slightly chuckled and her the same
heard?
The laziness of the pegasus
You know, I'm just a little offended at the idea of Dash as lazy. It's more like...more like...she's a bit of a procrastinator, but she'll whup the tar out any task she has to when the time comes
Well heck there, sugarcube, this here story went and got itself a little short! S'pose that's okay, but... aw hay, forget it.
Very, very well written. Seriously you done a really good job on this short, one-shot and I can't wait to see what else you have, the only error I notice is the elements of harmony should be caplized with the e and h of the words, you know? Other then that it was amazing.
2027543 Wow your pretty picky. And RD is pretty damn lazy. Lets not try and give her a pass when she hardly does a thing.
Coat? Coat of fur? Fur coat? I'll bet all the fur on my OC's coat that it really isn't a big deal.
2027689
Oh no! Someone is pointing out things that could be improved! better DOWNRATE!
2027703 Holy hell someone criticizing menial issues! Better uprate.
2027706
If you don't want a story to be the best it can be, why post it here at all? Sorry, I happen to think that just about everything can do with a little improvement. I consider everything I posted to be a valid, reasonable point (particularly the comma issues, of which the story needs several edits), and if you want to believe it's somehow perfect, well, go for it. /Shrug
2027713 That gets you an upvote. I like your stories by the way. They inspire me to be better than you
. How can I be condescending when I'm so far behind? JOKING.
2027719
NOT SURE IF SERIOUS.
No, but really, sure, it's picky, but it's not like it's being picky about things that are all that hard to change. Just a few comma insertions and a couple different word choices would eliminate most of those complaints. It's just some basic editing. Can't get all that angry about something like that.
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............Whenever people describe Applejack the way author did it makes me want to pull her out of a television set and choke her an apple. There I said it! Smug bastard.
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No
2027744
I do appreciate the feedback. Sorry for all the errors, I probably should of gone over it again to proofread it.
2027838
No need to apologize
I find one thing that helps is stepping back for 15+ minutes, reading through the whole thing in edit mode while actually speaking aloud every line. Helps point out things that sound odd
2027842
That was extremely helpful, thanks so much.
this is amazingly writin keep going please its wonderfull
Cute. This sorta reminds me of my own first attempts at shipping.
2027543
Actually, there was a non-chaotic spirit of Chaos. He thought it would be more unexpected that way. Fritz was never late for an appointment, but man was he ever a lousy poker player....
2028409
Thank you very much.
2028455
Wow, you commented on my story, that's awesome. Also, I don't know if that's a good or a bad thing.
2028697 Trust me, it's a very good thing. I mean, I'm famous on the internet now. That's, like, the equivalent of owning a Starbucks in real life.
2028785
Man, I was all wrong. I thought it was awesome because you're a great writer but now that I know you're the equivalent to a Starbucks owner, I feel honored.
Very nice story, short to the point but still left me with a grin and a need to sit under a tree.....to bad all the trees are empty because its the middle of winter...guess I just have to wait
why would one downvote this
short but good