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It is Applejack's first birthday since she and Rainbow Dash have been a couple, and the pegasus has done everything to make sure the party will be a smash hit. But due to her unrelenting focus on the event, she forgets to get Applejack a gift. Now, with only hours left, she scours Ponyville in an attempt to find something to give her fillyfriend for her very special day.

My Entry for the AppleXDash fanfic contest.

Cover Image by: http://fluttershy626.deviantart.com/
I'd also like to thank Garbo802 for inspiring the part of this story that involves Davenport (from his story "The Crystal Empire: Appendices")

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 46 )

1903994

Yeah it's for the AppleDash group competition.

1904012

Thanks, but don't count on it. Let's see how I do here first. :twilightsmile:

That was a good read, man. I enjoy reading a good romance every now and again, partially because I can't write it for shit, hahaha.

I wouldn't count yourself out of the competition yet.

Unless, of course, the judges are 'skins fans. :eeyup:

Thumbs up from this guy.:moustache:

1904032

Thanks :twilightsmile:

Also I'll be pulling for your Broncos in the AFC. Go Peyton!

1904064

Great, and thank you for the pointers :twilightsmile:

This is pretty good :ajsmug: Good luck in the contest! (I would've pre read, but I got too lazy) :ajsleepy: Heh, sorry about that :twilightblush:

Dash... I think you dont really have to look around town to find something awesome for her^^

“I may not know you personally, but I’ve seen you around town with that hick apple-selling mare that you’re dating. When I tell you I’m much better than her, I know what I’m talking about.”

Dude... before saying something like that.... you should listen to this....

You sure you wanna tell Dash that youre better than the mare she loves?

1904018 I'm pretty sure you'll win^^ This was a blast to read^^

Outstanding story! :raritystarry:
You really know how to right a fan fiction! :pinkiehappy:

I could feel myself about to cry and I could feel their emotions for each other! :raritydespair: :pinkiesad2:

1905137

Keep your fingers crossed. Still, I got 7 dislikes so obviously it isn't perfect.

I'll be happy just to be a finalist, honestly. Besides, I have another story I'm writing now and I am considering doing another chapter story centered on Rumble and his relationship with Thunderlane and Scootaloo.

Might be a one-shot or might not be, I'm not sure. I just know the chapter stories give me more time to flesh out characters than one-shots do. (that was the one big criticism I got for "Happy Hearth's Warming Eve, Squirt" (where there was criticism and on my EQD rejection) so it's something I need to work on.

1906059 1907135

Aw, now I feel bad. I'm glad it brought out some of your emotions but I don't like my readers to cry.

Unless you think it was a good cry lol

NOOOOOOOOOO!!! IT'S AN APPLEDASH FIC!!!!!!!! :twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

WHY!?!?!?!?!?

1907210 Nah^^ Those dislikers just dont know how to appreciate a good story^^ hehe^^
I loved Happy Hearts Warming Eve, Squirt^^ If I had anything to say anything in this contest, I'd totally vote for you^^ Youre a great writer and deserve some rewards for it^^

1907217 don't feel bad dude you did great :scootangel:

1907752

... Probably because he likes the characters and thought they make a good couple.

And he was right.

He was right, Luke... he was right. Now go, my s-son... :rainbowlaugh:

1914527
I have no doubt he wrote the story well; he's a good author- It's just appledash gets in the way of twidash... which is SOOO AWESOME:rainbowkiss:

1917266

You know... they have a group for that. Shipper's Anonymous.

It's a kinda 12 step program... you start out with "Celestia and Luna" (See Celestia. See Luna. See Luna revolt. Bad Luna! See Celestia banish Luna. Banish, Celestia, banish!) and work your way up from there.

1917399
I don't have a problem, I CAN STOP ANYTIME I WANT!

1917406

I'm sure you can. *patpat* Just, for a poor doubter like me, can you prove it by

READING THIS HORRIBLE HORRIBLE TROLLSERTFIC AND TOTALLY UNDENIABLY ENJOYING IT

Note: Do not read the fic. Please. If you accidentally click on it, please downvote it and then burn the electrons and photons used to carry the tainted image of that page to your eyes. I know, it'll be a lot of work, but trust me, it's necessary.

1919065
PSSSHHHT there's no way this fic could be that ba.... :rainbowderp::pinkiesick: KILL IT WITH FIRE!!!!!!!!
i2.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/157/835/ponies-stat.jpg
It's... too late... Hold me closer Ed, it's gett'n dark... *cough*
Tell Tiny Tim I won't be coming home this Christmas... *Cough*
Tell Auntie Em to let old Yeller out... *cough*
Tell Scarlet I do give a damn.
*dies*

1919168 :rainbowlaugh:

Aw, crap. Someone got a stick? I wanna see if he's still alive.

*prods*

Aw, crap. How do I explain THIS one? "Gee, Ossifer, I dunno what happened. I just suggested he read this story, and... hey, what're you doing? 'Assault with a deadly'... It's a story! Okay, it's a BAD story, but... Well, yes, he DID read it... "

1919288
fifth degree murder? Killing someone by sending them a horrible fanfic?

1919409

Hey, I warned you, but nooooo, you had to go click on the link. Then, you had to go and read the horrendous abomination. It's not even like I told you there was a TwiDash fic behind there... Anyway, my lawyer says my disclaimer is bulletproof. :rainbowwild:

Also, since you didn't enjoy it, i've signed you up for Shipper's Anonymous Accelerated Therapy- five fics a day of nothing but Mary Sue OCs being fawned over by your favorite character!

1920577

What story was this? I was curious and clicked the link but it doesn't exist anymore. What was the like/dislike ratio?

1920592

dang, they nuked it? Well, good. It was a horrible stupid 1004 word story with Regidar and someone else named in it, just... stupid stuff with no plot or anything. Last I saw, the up/down was 4/29, at least. It wasn't even a story, just trolling.

EDIT: I just tried to search for a cached page, no luck, and I closed the tab I had it in last night.

1920606

Oh it was THAT story. I didn't read it, but I saw it.

How does that even get past moderation :facehoof:

1920628

Scratch that, I just found the tab. Saved... for... well, never throw anything out.

Well, you probably saved five minutes of your life for something more useful, like picking your nose or standing in line at the DMV. I'm guessing it had the word count and "Pony" in it, and that was enough to get in. Lord knows enough bad stuff does... *shudders* I won't tell you about the other one I glanced at, that came up in The Writer's Group or somewhere... I try to look at one or two new fics from those groups each week.

Suffice to say... there are few things in life that make me want to really physically harm someone. That story is now one of them. It really makes me feel ill to think about just the bit I read. What really saddens me is there are people in this fandom who LIKE it, and are requesting more.

I wonder if there's a point at which stories get reviewed or automatically deleted due to downvotes.. I certainly hope so.

1920592
You didn't want to read it.... trust me...
Also, sorry for usurp ing your story in order to have banter with that other dude:twilightblush:

 "...She even spent an entire night writing out the invitations, a total of sixty-nine..."

Tee hee.:twilightsheepish:.. I mean, ahem. Nothing to see here.

Anyway, this looks like it's going to be a great story. Well written, interesting plot. 

One thing that I noticed was that your writing style is different to most I've seen. It feels like a...quirky documentation of events. Whereas most others just seem to tell the story. If you get what I mean.
But don't think that's a bad thing! It made the story very enjoyable to read between dialogue parts. I especially liked the opening few paragraphs.

I'm gonna hold back on reading the next  2 chapters because it's 1:17am here in Australia, but I have high hopes for the story to come!
(you've acquired a new follower, by the way)

1931854

Sixty-nine...oh my...

:rainbowderp:...that wasn't deliberate, I swear.

But wow, nice catch regardless. :rainbowlaugh:

Yeah my style I think is more screenplay-like (which is what I have an interest in writing), but also I'm sort of a beginner when it comes to writing (I just started writing regularly last year), but hopefully I can work on it. But I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.

And let me preemptively thank you for the follow. Thanks. :twilightsmile:

Really dude? Why did you have to go making the finals so I had to judge a friend and possibly make them lose? Gosh. I'll add more after I read it.

1904032
He shouldn't; he made the finals. Trust me, I'm one of the judges.

2005740

:pinkiehappy: Awesome! Thanks for the heads up man!

2005759>>2005740>>1914527

All three of you suck. I have no idea why, it's just a feeling I get...

2006175

Actually, my wife says variety is th OH HAY LOOK A MOOSE!!!

"It was like being trapped inside a bad romantic novel written by a sex-crazed stallion... or mare."

Hmm...this line almost seems like a tongue-in-cheek joke about her being in a fanfic. Would that be a fair assumption to make? :rainbowlaugh:

Of course, this isn't a bad romantic novel, it's quite good! :pinkiehappy:

It is very good, funny and beautiful story. :yay:

A great story I couldn't help but wanting to yell at Dash the whole time though. I guess we all det caught up in craziness sometimes and its hard to see the whole picture when you are so focused on one piece of it.
Nice job :ajsmug:

That was an entertaining, sweet little story. I almost expected Rainbow - by the end - to accuse AJ of getting her all sappy and mushy. :twilightsmile:
I would've liked to see some sort of... aftermath. AJ meeting up with Davenport, Aloe and her sister or something like that. At one point, I even saw AJ setting these events up and seeing Rainbows rejection of those offers as a birthday-gift, one of trust and reliability, but I suppose that would've gone to far. And way out of character for AJ. (Though the thought remains funny.)

Thank you.

This was a piece of art. So heart felt and loving. The ending couldn't have been better. It was exactly how I love my AppleDash. Thank you for this rare and beautiful gem. :heart:

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