There was no denying that Rainbow Dash and Lightning Dust made the best middle school badminton team, so it surprises no one when they decide to switch gears to volleyball. But with tensions between them already at its peak, an incident at their new high school's girls volleyball tryouts gets them both removed from being able to play on the team. In order to claim back their stolen prides, the girls swear to beat each other at the beach volleyball doubles tournament at the end of the school year.
There's just one problem: Rainbow Dash needs a partner.
Enter Applejack, a hardworking farmer with natural athleticism that could prove very useful in a volleyball game. But with her family dangerously close to losing their apple farm to a pair of flashy supermarket-owning brothers, will she be able to take enough time off to play? And if so, will Rainbow Dash and Applejack be able to cooperate as a team long enough to pull off a win against Lightning Dust?
WARNING: Some AppleDash inferences. If you don't like the pairing, don't read stuff containing it. But there isn't that much and the story's not really about romance anyway. I guess that I just really wanted to write something about Applejack and Rainbow Dash working together instead of competing... They would be such a great team...
**THIS TAKES PLACE IN THE SAME UNIVERSE AS THE EQUESTRIA GIRLS MOVIE** (Just a few years earlier before the whole plot of the movie happened and at this time, Sunset Shimmer doesn't have any power over her classmates yet.)
Seems like a small little world in canterlot high. Nice intro here flowed real smooth. Although I'm a lil confounded that rd would admit to being just back up in badminton.doesn't seem her style.but whatever as long as I see some good old school pranks it seems good.
This story looks very promising. I really hope season 4 of MLP has more episodes centered in Rainbow and AJ cooperating, I've always believed it would be an amazing episode (they could use the Equestria Games for that!). Don't worry too much about likes and dislikes in your story, AppleDash and humanized fics tend to get a lot of hate, either good or bad, but this one looks very good so far. And you're right about the parents thing, in a human world it would be too weird for Rainbow to live alone while in high school, but given that her parents seem to be a little distant you could always use Applejack's family to help them bond.
I'll be expecting new chapters of your story; AppleDash is my favourite pairing (I actually can't even read a fic when one of them is paired with somepony else), but I like that you decided to cover their relationship focusing in a different aspect (in this case sports, which suits them both), for there is really a limit to how original you can be when your only focus is the fact that they like each other, so good choice.
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Thank you so much, this comment has made me feel a lot better. Upon posting this story, I knew that it would receive a lot of hate, simply for the subject matter and whatever else, but the fact that it has received at least some like makes writing such a piece worth it. I put a lot of hard work into my writing, so when I get a whole bunch of dislikes, it really disheartens me especially since I am relatively new to pony fanfics. But I won't stop writing this story no matter what people think, if they can't write a comment telling me explicitly why they don't like it, then I try to pay no attention to the number of dislikes.
I'm the same way with AppleDash, although I don't mind some other pairings, I usually won't read anything that ships them with somepony else. I really don't understand why this pairing gets so much hate, it's one of the few ships that actually makes sense to me.
Please give me more
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No problem, I enjoy commenting stories I think are better than the recognition they get.
I actually don't mind other shippings either, as long as it is a good story and Dash and AJ are either together or left alone. Doesn't mean I go around hating fics when that doesn't happen...
I think the reason of AppleDash hate is because it was one of the first (if not THE first) very popular couples, soon after Fall Weather Friends aired, so there was a time when too many fanfics of these two appeared, and not all of good quality. I also think is one of the few ships that make sense (nowadays TwiDash has considerable more popularity and no one seems to go through the website disliking it, even though I consider it much less likely than AppleDash), and they are my two favourite characters (RD fights the second place though, Applejack is the undisputed champion of all my rankings).
Anyway, I'm glad I was able to lift your spirits with my comment, just keep up the good work and don't mind the rest. The most important person that has to be satisfied with your stories is yourself.
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Well that was blunt.
Anyways, this image came to my mind as soon as I saw this fic:
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All righty. Here we go. First off, the errors I saw.
Tsk, tsk, two speakers in one paragraph? Silly, silly Crimson Mist!
Well, that was it. Now onto comments about the story itself.
I like it. Also the end of this chapter is D'aw worthy.
ONTO CHAPTA TWO!
Just as last time, here is my mini-edit.
Same as last time, two speakers in one paragraph. Easy fix.
As for the story itself, all I can think of right now is a wish that talking to a girl you like was that easy. *sigh*
Oh well. Keep up the good work; you now have my permission to post more!
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I've fixed all the mistakes.
Thanks for the editing
I'm glad you like it, I didn't think you would that much. This story is about as romantic as I get.
For a moment I thought you had abandoned the ship, I'm glad it's not the case and the story lives. That was a good chapter, even if a little short. I'm eagerly waiting to see more progress in this fic, specially when Dash and AJ start to hang out more and with the rest of the Main 6 (I can't say Mane 6 when they are humans).
Thanks for the update and good luck with the rest of the story.
Yes, I see a very big mistake... The next chapter is missing!
Oh hey! How did I not notice this yesterday?
Apart from the fact that I spent all day working and/or biking. Oh well, read it now.
This is getting very interesting. I love seeing Rainbow so unsure of herself, it is a nice contrast to what we normally see.
The only errors I can see would be that your indents seem... uneven, for lack of better word. Some seem shorter than others and some seem too long. It's not very noticeable and only a minuscule distraction. Just something to think about on future chapters.
I eagerly await more!
This is so something Dashie would do. hahahaha
I like Lightning Dust too :3 I love all the antagonists... Except for the Flim Flam brothers. God, they're so annoying.
Dakdkavkrbakrbakrbe I need to know what happens wih Dashie now!
Everytime you update I breath in relief, I really enjoy how this story is going. I was surprised by the way you described the Apple siblings hair color though, shouldn't Apple Bloom be red and Mac blonde?
I hope to see more interaction between these two in the next chapter, and hopefully to see all the Main 6 reunited at some point.
Great work so far.
When are you posting a new chapter? I love this story
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It's too bad your chapters are so short, simple as they are (you should try to spend a little more time with descriptions, not only of places and situations but of the things AJ and Rainbow think and feel) I really enjoy them.
Good to know you have not abandoned the story, I want to see where this is going.
I was starting to wonder what happened to this story. I feel the same. Life, school and Writer's Block are a pain in the flank to deal with, but I think it's important to finish our goals. I can't wait for more.
OH HI!
Uh, two days ago?
When did you update this?
Shut up, Twi. I'm not looking at silly things like release dates!
Anyway, glad to see you taking time to write. With exams coming up, I know I sure haven't. This chapter got a chuckle out of me when Rainbow smucked AJ with the vollyball, although the whole thing was a little short, just like Lammen_Gorthaur said. Still, short is better than nothing, right?
Right!
Anyway, I would write more but I really should be studying right now. I have a test in the morning, urg.
Talk to you later!
Daaaash, you just asked a girl for her number! Smooth.
This looks promising enough!
RainbowDash is awesome. And so is this fanfic ^^ I can only imagine how purdy Applejack is~
Oh i wish you'd continue
I'm gonna start reading this and then regret it b/c its unfinished xD oh well