After all the 'false alarms' of predicted world endings, barely anyone worth their salt worried in the slightest about the possibility their days on Earth may be numbered. A young British man flies to the States to see the sights, and a certain someone he met once before back home. One of his possessions is a journal, to record his 'adventures'. While at an 'End Of the World' Party, the world, as he knew it, ended.
A couple of years later, Luna brings news to Celestia that they have discovered the man's journal, one he used to record his time in Equestria.
Chapters (5)
So... British!
1827470 Well... yes
1827485 ~Hey, I loved it! It's a good story. You should feel good for writing this
Also, for the book title, you could use Paint or another program to draw the scribbles onto the writing, resize it using GIMP or PS, then use an image instead of the text. It's the long-arsed way around it, but it might help if you want to do it.
1827511 ugh, maybe later. I think I'mma do an hour or two of shooting virtual people. Tomorrow summons the next chapter, and possibly the one after for preemptive preperation! MWAHAHAHAHA
I would recommend only posting a story after you get to the events in the description. That way it doesn't seem like false advertising.
Don't switch tenses, especially not in the same sentence. Example:
but Celestia still felt the slightest hint of guilt whenever it is mentioned by name or description.
And I'm reading on...
The telltale light thumping of Princess Luna’s robotic leg
FAVORITED
1827797 ah, you have a point there.
And the leg... I almost didn't put that in, thinking it was a little too... eccentric
Great premise, interested in why Luna has a robotic leg.
Oh, and, you know, the End of Prophecy, the HiE, the "Precious," etc.
Aha. And now Character Development.
1837266 That sounds like a good thing. You just wait for the next chapter. It should hopefully be a doozy.
God knows I'm the wrong one to be telling someone to slow down but you aren't forced to update every day. If the chapter isn't finished, you can wait a bit.
1842090 thankfully, I have an excuse now. I just had to get the pony sighting and change of author out there
Happy holidays! Thank you for exclusively wishing me a good one, though I have idea why you did! That's very kind of you! Sorry if this comment is filled with errors, I've never used my phone to make a comment before! In fact, I've been typing this for the past half hour! It won't let me go back to edit something I've written! But it's awesome that I can be on Fimfiction at all! It's a Christmas miracle! Sheesh, now it's been a full hour! Better post this!
Hello, just got finished reading what you have. Now bear in mind, this is just the opinion of a normal guy, I'm no english major, or editor, or anything like that. My thoughts on this is just what immediately comes to mind, like an ink blot test.
Not gonna lie, I'm not particularly a fan of HiE stories. Not saying people shouldn't do them, it's just not my cup of tea. Although the story premise has a lot going for it, that much I can commend. As I was reading it, it felt kinda rough around the edges, like a few things should be more detailed here, or that line or whatnot should be more polished, stuff like that (I can't give proper examples
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Keep up the good work though. But I suggest going though your previous chapters eventually and giving them a real good once over. It's what I plan on doing with my work, personally.
2158924 thanks mate, i appreciate it. I sorta feel rough whenever I publish a new chapter anyway. My specialty is certainly not describing things. also, no idea what an ink blot test is
Loads don't like HiE, that's for sure.