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Discord finds himself in a role he never suspected to have: that of a father. In the empty white space he was banished to by the Elements of Harmony he tries to raise his daughter. Soon the former prison becomes something else. But visions of things to come and demons from the past keep hunting him.

Please comment.

This is a tribute to the anniversary of a series of fanfiction by Alex Warlorn (http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Alex%20Warlorn). It is also a sequel to my very first story "Discord: Not one of a kind." Happy anniversary!

Many thanks to Godzillawolf/kendell2 for Beta Reading this story and giving me countless good suggestions and ideas for it. I wouldn't have been able to do it without you. Thank you!

The story even has its own page on TV Tropes: http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/PonyPOVSeriesChaosVerse

Chapters (10)
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Comments ( 33 )

Oh god...this is long. 11 PM is a GREEEAAAT time to start reading this...:rainbowkiss:

Good Story a bit disjointed and a bit jumpy in parts but a good story
you might want to edit it a bit then rewrite bits to make it amzing tho
i hope you write more

Complete?! No! It's not possible! I must be seeing things!

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Thank you but I have to admit that English is not my first language so I will not be able to find the jumpy or disjointed bits on my own.

But if you could tell me in the comments which parts need work, I could try to make them better.

Don't worry, there will be more. I had three big stories written. Fluttercruel: Chaos Theory was the first and there is a bonus chapter. I think I will post that next. It shows these events from a different perspective.

I think that the story will be easier to follow if I would add the other stories right here, instead of placing them each separately.

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There are two other stories almost ready. Originally I wanted to place them all separately but I think it will be easier to read if everything is right here. I have changed it to "incomplete."

To her it was the most fun to train her Chaos, when she turned it into a game. She created a paper plane and let it fly around herself. The small construct fired paper bullets at her while the young chimera acted like she was a giant monster, ready to squash it.

That would be me, so very much so:rainbowlaugh:

"The costumes looked like one pony on the hind legs was hiding in the front part and the backside was empty and just lazily dangled around."
This?:rainbowlaugh:

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Glad that you liked it!

And you are right. That part is a reference to the Live Show. It explains so much if Discord is the one behind that.

good method to use for a recap of the history of equestria however again the story is a bit jumpy and could use more description and elaboration possibly more emphasis on the thoughts of the person it is in the point of view of and their thought process.this would help as the motovations for some descions are a little wobbly.
There were quite a few oppertunitys for some what is the meaning of it all crisis that you could have added.
still a quite a good story

okay so the past three chapters have been good and all quite solid the description is there but

Where are you going with this:rainbowhuh:
please explain, the history of everything plus the part about nightmare phobia was good but I thought this was about fluttercruel? I really wanted to see where that could go.

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You will see. In the final story everything does (hopefully) come together.

Nightmare Phobia was the being that attacked Fluttershy and is now in the white space with Fluttercruel and Discord In the last story both need to confront her. And the story about Luna and Celestia will also play a role.

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you could have been more cyrptic but okay thanks:twilightsmile:

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You are welcome. There is no need to confuse others. And trust me, I didn't reveal half of it.

Epic end. Glad I finally got around to reading it.

Also, one comment I didn't notice before: Discord, Celestia and Luna have the elements light up in the same place where the elements alited during their use on nightmare whisper. Nice shout out.:pinkiehappy:

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Thanks, I simply had to reference that scene at least once. After all it still is my favourite moment of the Pony POV Series.

Ah, the constructs weren't 'real' until Fluttercruel came along. I guess it is true; it takes two people to create a world.

I gotta ask, as I recall, in the DeviantART version of the chapter list, this chapter comes right before the big final battle, not directly after Fluttercruel's two-parter. Was there any particular reason for that reassignment?

Well, that didn't take too long for the crap to start hitting the fans. Looks like someone is desperately trying to kill Fluttershy, but I wonder who?

Wow..............the revelation about these constructs as..........actual sapient and living beings was both a surprise and very heartwarming. I thought for a moment, things were about to get very sad, but Discord turned it around with a smile...........so Discord has been able to do something the other Discords never were able to acheive, create life from chaos..........what a wonderful accomplishement. :pinkiehappy:

............the loyalty and sacrifice of these living constructs was very tear-jerking. I actually cared about them. It was very hard to let them go.

And when Rarity, Applejack and Rainbow Dash died in their moment of awesomeness, it was both inspirational and very saddening. I cried at their loss. :fluttercry::ajsleepy:

Goodbye.........:raritycry:

First of all, the loss of Twilight, Pinkie, Rarity Rainbow Dash and Applejack and the rest hit me in the feels to the max. I tears leaked profusely from my eyes and my nose got filled up. They were fun to interact with and I will miss them...............I hope they are in the Father of the Alicorn. :pinkiesad2::fluttercry::ajsleepy::raritycry:

Second, that was a wonderful explosion. Wished I had a picture of it.

Third, OH C'MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU MEAN TO TELL ME THAT THAT B:yay:TCH SURVIVED?! DAMN HER!

Celestia, Luna, Discord and Fluttercruel fighting together sure was an awsome battle to fight.

As for the ending...........damn, just damn. :twilightoops:

Bravo. Absolutely wonderful. The battle was extremely awesome and unique.

I enjoyed how Fluttercruel turned the tide of the battle and earned her cutie mark.

I was very surprised that Discord, Luna and Celestia worked together to activate the elements of harmony against nightmare phobia. That sure was an epic moment.

The whole fight sequence was fun to read.

You have NO IDEA how happy I was that Discord's and Fluttercruel's friends, particularly the five brave heroes, will be able to enjoy heaven with the others. It brought me great joy.

And I enjoyed the resolution between Fluttercruel and Fluttershy.

Two thumbs way up for this story. :pinkiehappy:

rest in peace brave ponies.
I love fluttercruel.
P.S. OMG !! it's still alive !!
nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!

I feared for a bad ending but then the final was great, moving, and
especially happy ending.
I loved this story.
Ya wooooooooooooooooo!!!

Would have liked to have read more from you.

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How I never commented on this before I will never know but I agree with Alex's point above. You've earned your place on my Favorites of Favorites shelf with this wonderfully written work that hurts so good to read.

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