I'd prefer sombreros over the crystals

so... Queen Sombra? I mean... the name is already kinda feminine

damn i read the coments befor the story agin and its reuind
edit: needs more clop
cant what fore the next chapter

Rule63 Sombra? This should be interesting.

Da fuq ur alive? Da fuq queen sombra¿ me gusta

and then the lord said "if you are board HAVE FAITH BRUVAS for those who are good and just will repay your devotion and patience with gifts to quell the boredom Amen!" -quote Me after seeing this and making up a scriptureish sounding verse.
so yeah..love you....and all this story symbolizes...we need moar were the mares take charge....wonder if there's a category for that :3

Dude seriously. No, Just no, don't make Sombra female. Please, at least keep the villains the same genders. The female Sombra-like mare could be his consort or his daughter or something... which with the way this story has been going would make perfect sense. Sombra gives up because his daughter falls in love with our "Hero"

Yeah that'd work that being his daughter is fine.

Crystal ponies? Cool.

I have only one thing to say ARRIBA.

This took a while,but it was worth the wait.

U did it...u picked Assassin's Creed. i could kiss u

So kidnapped near Zecora's hut and will be dragged up north?
One heck of a trek, I'd agree with the daughter or at least, descendant, idea rather than rule 63.

ERMEGERD!!!!! SERMBRE!!!!

This is a decent clop fic. There are afew issues, the only one I'm bringing up right now is the one I haiz a pictur furr.
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What happened to Discord? And his daughter?

nightmare Moo whispered

I laughed at that xD

2007587 Sorry XD

2007521 Eris like most reptiles guard there eggs until they hatch the males job is to collect food but due to her living in a palace she doesn't need Lachlan also Discord is still sulking about his daughter having eggs. Everything like Discord being reformed and Sombra happens earlier due to the natural chaos that humans have. he released Discord and sombra not including Nightmare Moon and Molestia being created

Whoa man, I'm constantly running in to Spelling and Gramma Errors, you need take your time and slow down to revise any errors you might run it, but anyway still ok chapter, and I just see you add a Queen Sombra, this will be interesting.

I did best I leapt though Zecora’s window scott pilgrim [youtube=http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=ZWms9WnyY40]

Conceptual sex... What a novel experience that must be . And I would mention somewhere Molestia and 'main character' walk so we can understand the transition from village to forest a little better. Maybe get some advice on the manticore scene. It seemed rushed and not nearly as desperate as it could have been. And the throat slashed? From the stinger tail? I'm just a little confused on this point, if he had a knife then maybe.

So Sombra makes an appearance as a female? Interesting. Lachlan is gonna end up with mare in his herd.

2007885 i second this motion :p

It me, or Lachan is becoming more and more strong? I mean, before if he confront Nightmare, Chrisalis or other strong mare, they will just pin down and rape him…now he not only win an argument, but he's left them crying, and despited being angry they didn't treat him like inferior. Either he is slowly gaining more respect and more rights or they he is becoming more strong. Men it will be awesome when he just beat King Sombra, claim his daughter and become king of the crystal empire where the first thing he will do is giving the males more power, and officially become the first male king an active defender of males rights.

That will be interesting

Oh by the way, his scars will only be temporally?

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Reminding the girls once again that on Earth having a pair of balls means something a little different than in Equestria.

Hmm why does the idea of a female, anthro sombra turn me on?

2008328 Don't know, but so far anything is possible, if you know what I mean.

2008110 That's awesome.

He needs to get attacked by a pony named Grammar Nazi who, like Pinkie often does in fanon worlds, can see misspelled words. That'd be funny.

And seriously, this guy needs backup. Like, a literal army of straight male soldiers on vacation that haven't seen women in two years.
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silliness aside, yay. new chapter. And yes, *Insert various complaints that have already been stated). But like you said earlier, you've got an editor, so I won't complain since I have enough to do without being a secondary editor.

2008328 because it's hot

What on earth are you gonna do with Sombra? All he did was growl and crave some crystals.

1677442 a booby trap.

2007743 Oh! Now I get it. Magic~

2008016 No one noticed that I added shinning armour in that chapter glimmer shield cadence future gay lover. But to awnser your question you are right in both respects Lachan is far stronger than he was when he first entered. But at the same time when he is attacked by a mare who wants to rape him he will fight but the fight or flight instinct doesn't flip. Only when his or a family member is in true pearl, will he go in for the kill. Nightmare Moon was because he was scared and tired as well as cold

2007806 Its alright mate I appreicate it but I wont go over them I am up to my hair in work uni new flat, two jobs kid and a girfriend leaves little time for spell correction.

I hope that my grammer nazi friend can soon correct these errors.

Thanks for the review = )

While you don't need to do this if it's not your thing (and it might break continuity since you already have so much written), don't you think that there would be a lot of lesbian relationships for the mares to get pleasure, since the stallions can't do it for them? It seems like a natural development that would make lesbians okay but gays bad in their society.

2010080 i need to change that bit thx for reminding me

2008686
And then the grammar nazi was fucked by lachlan for no reason.
Heh a bunch of men who haven't seen women in weeks would be funny.

Finally! An Update! And not one of those fake ones that get my hopes up and then dashes them against the rocks!

Seriously though.

I was wondering when you'd finally get around to having Zecora and Lachlan shack up. I would have preffered if it had lasted longer and had more detail, but I'll take what I can get.

On a completely different note, in Foalnapped, you have Lyra and Colgate as sisters. In this chapter, they're childhood best friends.

The background/world building with Tia was nice, and the fight against the manticore was a nice way to show he considers Pinchy to be part of his family, but Lachlan seems a lot more focused on his looks than he should be. He's a MAN, not some weepy emotional woman WUSSY STALLION WITH NO STAMINA. I think he could have handled it better, like "I have scars now, and I look like a bad ass, hopefully those mares will stop acting like they are."

Still, Good Job!

2010608 it was sarcasm he was being melodramatic for the sake of it he is an idiot and was purposely causing a fuss because men are like that

2010194 Ha no

Mares when they mate with a stallion they form a bond like going out. Until the stallion leaves them or dies the mares are loyal to him and him alone. It is a strange concept but it will have reason

.....okay here's how I reacted.

grammar Nazi/Author me: Blah blah rant rant Bad grammer blah blah Misspells rant rant
^don't mind him. He's only in the back of my head.

Male me: FUCK YEAH ZECORA CLOP!!!

2011187
Meh okay

2010608
That is true. Good eye for detail. There is one thing that I have wondered for a long time now. What would have happened if this fic was titled, "The Scent: Lust of Stallions"? I wonder how it would have turned out. It would have the potential to be an interesting read, with Big Mac as one of the main characters along with Lachlan.

For the love of all that is muffins....
"Queen" Sombra just kidnapped him.....
This might end very badly for him....

Update please
Reason: top fic

-reads through to the end- Glimmer Shield,? female sombra i can somewhat understand, but was there really a need to make shining armor rule63? then again the eventuality he'd do Cadance was there. So I guess to avoid the rage fueled husband scene, a genderswap was in order.

This bit is just my own thought. I see Glimmer Shield a lot as Shining Armor's r63 name, but think this. What is the female version of a knight in shining armor, someone loving and caring and always there to protect you? Guardian Angel. (in my opinion a better name and fits more with the guard/defender title she'd have)

2023398 Good idea thanks I may change her name yet

2024492 Is Glimmer Shield Shining Armor in r63 form?