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Crowley


I write second-person sensual fiction featuring you and your favourite ponies. If there's anything you'd like to know, just ask, I'm always happy to answer questions!

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When Fluttershy crawls into a cave in order to save a small rat, Angel runs off looking for somepony to help her. As luck would have it, a simple earth pony happens to be walking nearby. And that earth pony would be you.

Cover image by Kooner01

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 175 )

Love the story! Please make more; I love second-person romance stories, and I love Fluttershy, so this was perfect! :yay:

I love this story, and the art is great. Are they all vectors, or did you draw them? I know the tears aren't from the show, and they look fantastic.:yay:

I'm guessing he went out with :rainbowdetermined2:

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Some are edited stright from the show (I edited the pic with fluttershy covered in dirt myself, from an episode screenshot I took), while others are vectors from the free-to-all MLP Vectorclub on DeviantArt.

And no, the one who was with Rainbow Dash was a pegasus, remember? The room mate's a unicorn, and you'll see who he dates in a future fic!

This is the first fic I have read with pictures in it. Well done on the writing too. Onto the next chapter!:yay:

I switched it to dark. It was scary.

Fluttershy sad is the worst thing possible.:fluttercry:

Those sad pictures... my soul, it cries!:fluttercry:

D'AAAAAWWWWWWWWW that last picture! This is so cute!:yay:

So far I've read now, I don't like as much as your Dash story: That one really pulled me in. This one kinds of keeps me on the surface and like I'm actually watching another person/pony. It might have to do with the fact that I'm a girl and the protagonist is clearly male. The Dash story was completely ambiguous, with the exception of the mature part. And despite the mature part, I can really applaud and appreciate that. I might also not like it as much because Fluttershy is not really my favorite pony.

Still, it sure is another really good story. Keep it up! I'm looking forward to your next one X3

D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

SO MUCH D'AWW!

:fluttercry::twilightsmile::fluttercry:

My head is soon going to explode from the D'aww

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Thank you for your views on the story, I know it's hard to come across a 2nd person fic where "you" are female in it, but I'm glad you still think it's a good read either way!
By the way, I know someone called TheGentlemanCreeper (he's on my Watching list on my profile) and he made a female 2nd person fic with Applejack as the love interest. It's called Swing, I'd recommend it! :ajsmug:

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Read it all the way though now. Love the epilogue! Thanks for the recommendation! I'll read it!

...Wait a second...

How do you know that I like Applejack? DX

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Haha, I didn't! But something tells me you'll like it - I did!
Thanks again for reading!

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And the protagonist is also a pegasus...

Okay, if there is a boombox anywhere in the story, I'll get suspicious...

... I've been waiting for this, comrade, and you have not failed me! Love your writing style. Keep it up, comrade, for the Motherland? :fluttershysad:

The cuteness levels of this fic are dangerous. In fact- Wait, why are my brains over there noawkpadjwpwapo

end of it cooome ooooon :raritydespair:, also i see what you did there at the end. :trollestia:

Dude, I've wanted this kind of fanfic, with Fluttershy, for, like, EVER.

Thank you SO MUCH.

This is so incredibly good. *sniff* media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lueodvwzQN1qlem3u.gif
5 stars...

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Well my heart is nearly exploding...

I can't tell you how much I love this story. This makes me go really happy :D
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Im liking it so far. :pinkiehappy:

Oh god

OH GOD

HO DGO

One Of The Best Stories I Ever Read

great work, but I have a problem: ponies can't clean themselves, I'm pretty sure they either need help or go to the spa to do that:derpytongue2:

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Not quite, remember Feeling Pinkie Keen? Pinkie has a bath that I can assume she uses herself (I wouldn't imagine the Cakes helping her do something that private) and she claims to brush her teeth very often. The ponies can reach easily parts of their bodies that normal horses can't (See Rainbow Dash with her hooves behind her head when she relaxes/does stretches in Fall Weather Friends, among many other examples) so it's probably not that hard to rub some soap on your hooves and clean yourself that way.
TL;DR: dexterous hooves and there's examples in the show.

Very nice read! Not too fond of the way it just kinda ended like that, but it was very fun and interesting to read. Almost no mistakes that I can see, and the story is very good, I read it all the way through in one sitting. (Not that it was all that long) Keep up the good work! :ajsmug:

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Thanks, I try to keep them short and sweet, I doubt you'll ever see a fic that's over 10,000 words from me.

108098 h-uh. Didn't notice that before. Thanks for the explanation :D

Excellente, I think I have a couple of stars around here somewhere. Ah! I'm sure Mario won't mind! Here have 5 of his stars!

I find it interesting how you take an absolutely bland pony (male earth pony, that's it) and not only make him interesting, but believable. That takes some talent that I am truly envious of!

108048 Well it was a bath. Just dip in and let the bubbles degrade the dirt

125790 I got my stars from Luna! :derpytongue2:

129471 As long as you left both the Ursa alone, that would be fine... Oh and don't touch Draco, or Columba... I need those.

I just realized this chapter was connected to More Than Buddies. You, sir, have just become one of my favorite writers.:pinkiehappy:

Confound you author...

You make me feel emotion.

Cave Fetishes...

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Nope, no idea what yer talkin' about. :applejackunsure:

(Dang, no discorded applejack...)

If I say I have a Fluttershy fettish, it's a fettish that I've had before I read this. I have always thought that Fluttershy was the cutest of the Mane 6. And I wouldn't say I have a cave fettish of a crying fettish per se. However, I do have a "drama fettish". And I think that crying and I think that crying and trapped in the cave (and death) qualify as elements in the drama fettish.

Honestly, I don't know why I have a drama fettish. I think that maybe I just like how it feels to want to comfort someone who has been hurt somehow. Perhaps I just like feeling the emotion in general. Because if you knew me in person, you'd know that I don't often express my emotions...

...Or maybe it's just a simple drama fettish.

omg so much cute... need another story nao :flutterrage:

Fluttershy fetish? I have a pony fetish! :trollestia::rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy::fluttershyouch::heart::heart:

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Heh, it was actually ditzy. that's cool that the stories intersect like that.

I now have a cave fetish.

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