Applejack and Maud may be like oil and water. But they'll have to work together to solve this friendship problem.
Originally written for Everfree Northwest's Iron Author competition.
Chapters (1)
- Member Since 1st Mar, 2016
- offline last seen Yesterday
Dreadnought
There is nothing as liberating, or terrifying, as a blank page.
Dreadnought
Joined 1st Mar, 2016 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Dreadnought · 1.6k words · 34 6 · 1.6k views
- Loyal2Luna · 119k words · 970 16 · 25k views
- Dusty the Royal Janitor · 80k words · 502 15 · 8.9k views
- spawnzillafinalwars · 52k words · 118 13 · 4.7k views
- R5h · 4.4k words · 73 1 · 561 views
- Time Reaper · 22k words · 27 1 · 822 views
- BSting · 14k words · 547 views
- Klamnei · 83k words · 103 6 · 2.1k views
Featured In1
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.105 seconds
Total duration
1,106 users online
1,797,755 hits today, 1,996,409 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
great story mate keep it up cant wait for the next story
11770469
Thanks for the feedback. I plan on publishing an EQG story next week. Check back soon!
Dreadnought
Well, you had a nice premise, if nothing else. Applejack and Maud solving a friendship problem is a good comedic setup, although I felt the execution was a bit poor. Firstly, the whole thing was much too fast-paced, with little time for character interactions or comedy. I understand that you had a time limit while writing this, but this story might have been too big to do justice in such a short time. I also think that the plot point about the islanders' ancestry was very odd, going against what we know about ponies, which made the conflict feel a bit contrived. All in all, I think this story really needed some more time and attention to make it solid.
11773797
Thank you for the feedback. I completely agree that more development was warranted. I really wanted to flesh this story out. However, two hours can be very short, especially under pressure. I've been known to spend an hour writing and re-writing half a page. I did realize when writing it that it was a bit ambitious for the allotted time, but it was the only premise that I could come up with.
Please check back next year for some stories that did not lack for time and editing.
In regards to the ancestry, I thought that was quite an interesting idea, as did the judging panel. I would like to explore the concept in a future story if inspiration strikes.