Bage, a young saiyan warrior is sent off Planet Vegeta moments before it's destruction. However, his pods original course is altered, and he crash lands an Planet Equis, over a decade before The 1000th Summer Sun Celebration. Princess Celestia believes she can help the young saiyan by taking him under her wing, and teaching him alongside her student, Twilight, hoping that the two can learn the magic of friendship together. However, Bage accidentally draws the attention of dark forces to the planet, forces that could very well threaten the balance of harmony itself. Will he be able to learn how to get along with Twilight, and defend Equis? Or will Equestria be decimated under the will of the tyrannical Lord Frieza?
Chapters (21)
I don’t even need to read it yet. It doesn’t have sex in it. 10/10 story
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I tried very hard not to include horny.
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Not bad, I'm interested. But question, how does a 12 year old saiyan have a power level of 2500? Seems awfully high when most saiyans his age have a power level around 120-150 or so.
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Its basically so that I can still have a sense of reasonable power scale, without de-powering most characters like Princess Celestia or Nightmare Moon. For canon purposes however he's an early bloomer. Besides, Prince Vegeta was born with a higher than average power level based on his blood line, and I took some creative liberty so that he doesn't get creamed by Celestia later on.
There is definitely some potential in this story, I'm curious to see how it will unfold
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I was also confused about that
Makes sense tho
Oh, so Celestia is Escanor now? Nice!
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I did take a bit of inspiration from The Lion Sin. However I'm going to give Luna the same treatment. Stronger at night than during the day.
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Remember from the Broly movie how the scouter exploded when scanning baby Broly?
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Now, that was an extremely rare situation, being as he was considered the saiyan of legend. I wouldn't compare Bage and Broly in that regard. Broly is in a whole other league compared to Bage and his measly 2500. I'd put Bages' birth power level at about 250.
Not bad, I like the dynamic between Sunset and Bage, and that Celestia gains power with the sun, good times.
Glad to see also that there's no romance tags, keep it clean.
Also, typo:
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Ah, that must have happened when I combined chapter 2 and 3 together. I'll take care of it. Edit: Fixed
Took me reading all of this to realize that this will blow up at some point. I can't wait to see where this story goes.
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Thanks, glad you enjoy it. I just hope I can keep the steam going and it doesn't go on hiatus for 8 years.
Now this is gonna be interesting. Sunset being trained to use Ki, and long before EqG happens, this is gonna be a fun story, I can tell.
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No EqG. It no longer exists.
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I'm just saying that the power levels are random which decides their placement in life.
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Fair enough.
Are all of the Dragon Ball OCs in this story going to be male?
master rochi could blow up the moon with a power level of 180, sunset has about 5ish give or take, so assuming the mass of equestria moon is about the same as earth, once sunset can fully use ki she would be able to blow up 0.1% of the volume of earth
whcih would kill every living being on the planet, yay!
dont ask why i just felt myself in a math mood, btw nice chap
Power level 2500? Or... about two Raditz?
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I haven't decided yet. I might bring in Bages' sister Shiso, but that's not set in stone.
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About 1 and a half Raditz, technically. 1 Raditz and 1 Raditz hair.
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Thanks. Also thank you for the unsettling thought!
Holy crap those chapter titles. Long winded much? Gonna give this a shot regardless.
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Sorry, I was trying to capture the style of the old DBZ episode titles.
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Ah, fair enough. Haven't watched them in over a decade, but now that you say it, it does seem like something DBZ would do lol
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Same, but I did some research. Hope you enjoy the story though.
Alright, this just got more interesting. Sunset learning ki control is awesome!
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Roshi powered up to a lot more than 180 when he blew up the moon.
Both Nightmare Moon and Chrysalis are in thin ice by this point. I hope both of them will regret messing with a Saiyan and get their asses kicked to near death.
BTW, I hope Bage gets his tail back. So he can get his Great Ape From, or find a way to use it with Wrathful, or even get SSJ4 in the far future.
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I have plans for both, and to be honest I wasn't planning on giving Bage his tail back. Wrathful seems to be intended only for Broly to use, and SSJ4 isn't canon in my eyes. It's a good form, but still.
So, If I were to do a small time skip, say about three years, would anyone feel that would ruin the progression? It would only be to skip pass the monotony of training, in order to get into the Invasion Arc, where Chrysalis stages an attack on Equestria.
I wonder if there is a set of dragon balls on this planet. They could be purple star balls and have a kirin summoned instead of a dragon.
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There are no Dragon Balls on Equis, those are purely Namekian in nature, so it wouldn't make sense. I can take creative liberty, but that would just be put in a plot device for the sake of plot.
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Dang it! So Bage is just going to stay weak then?
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This is just my own opinion, but I say, don't do the timeskip, not unless it's crucial, important, or a necessity to the story.
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Hardly. I just don't plan to include wrathful or SSJ4. His power is just going to go a different direction.
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Well, unless you want another four chapters slogging through friendship lessons, ki training, and Bage doing nothing at all otherwise. If I include too much filler, it'll bog down the story and make it a pain to read, and write in my case. It won't be too big of a time skip, just enough to get Bage and Sunset to a level where they can train properly, and help move the plot along at the same time. You didn’t see what happened in the 7 year time skip to the Buu Arc, cause it wasn't important too the plot. Same deal here.
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honestly i always compared the elements to the dragonballs, my main example is how twilight became a princess. it's shockingly similar to the super saiyan god ritual to me. five ponies pour power into another? almost identical to the SSJG ritual.
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True, the only caveat being they don't grant wishes. If they did the whole show would be kind of pointless.
https://youtu.be/7J3z_FAyUUU?si=p12KBamLTSrXu5ib
I'm really enjoying the dynamic between Bage and Sunset, and her training in ki is a blast to read, great work!
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Well that makes me feel worse about the time skip.
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Ahh, you make a valid and fair point. Okay, I change my mind, go for the timeskip,
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Already in motion.
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Two Raditz isn't that bad for a 12 year old.