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Young, Clueless, a dragon with hunger for a hoard of knowledge but my hoard is to be spread with friends, families and more.
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It was a pretty interesting fic I'm serious
I wonder if you would make one with spirit.
It seems alright fiction to me.
Rain looks hot.
Is this Rain the same Rain from the Spirit animated films?? IIRC, Spirit's mate is a mare named Rain, and they have at least one foal. This just tagged my memories a little bit. Just wondering.
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Same Rain, but i felt like their name could be title to deities and such. Spirit is briefly mentioned
This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!
I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!
Notes:
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A bonfire only limited the number of times a day.Huh?- An interesting mix of making Rain's herd both anthro and also wild(ish) animals.
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a small feather to adjourn her headAdorn?- The public undressing (and casual groping) scene is nice, and a really good touch to get things started heating up.
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Kisses and hugs were greatly exchanged with an eagerWhere's the rest of the sentence?-
objects(without magic)Needs a space.- A beautiful little story, though the beauty is marred in places by grammar issues and the occasional awkward phrase. Still very sweet and serene, though.
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Not since the flock had regained its numberFlock? Wouldn't 'herd' be better? They're not birds...-
She gave a small nipple at the base of her breasts before pulling out only to have the nipple between her teeth. Small nipples cause Rain to gaspnibbles? (also, tense confusion)- The details of Rain's song are beautiful ... but they also interrupt and distract from the actual clop somewhat.
- Maybe it's a little too blissful?
Scores:
Provocativeness: 85
Progression: 65
Payoff: 80
Pacing: 85
Personality: 45
Prose: 49
Total: 409
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.