This story is a sequel to Sonic The Hedgehog x My Little Pony: Tell Your Tale
Magic has finally returned to Equestria thanks to Sunny Starscout and her new friends! The pegasi can fly and the unicorns can use levitation again… and the earth ponies have activated their own special magic for the very first time in history. It’s a whole new world! Which is exhilarating… but, well, also a little scary and strange. And now that Sunny is an Alicorn with powers, there’s a lot to figure out. In the middle of all of this, the past begins to haunt Sonic as he, Tails and Knuckles search for a way to return home, reactivate the Chaos Emeralds and find the ones they're missing, as well as stop Dr. Eggman's plans to take over the magical land of Equestria.
Great start and how boy, things just got more interesting and sonic start is great and looks like his friend are waiting on Zipp to get Zipp’s microphone and looks like his friends and on and off Allies are in that world and looks like things got interesting, awesome start
Awesome chapter of make your mark, and wow , sonic really took it hard and boy was Maretime bay day was something and looks like egghead made his move by using two metal sonics and attack him twice and in the process, sonic reunited with Kunckles and Tails, and help stabilize the magic and sonic told the truth to his friends and looks like he and Pipp are getting closer and looks like Opaline and Misty are planning their next move and now egghead had robotic version of the mane 5 with sonic quill to power them, this is getting more interesting and exciting! Awesome job! Keep up the great work
I like the idea but your chapters are way to long, maybe shrink it down a little and put them in separate chapters so readers can have some breathing room. I found it a bit annoying that you kept breaking the fourth wall and blamed the writers not to mention multiple plot points that are hard to keep track of. However that is the beauty of fanfiction, change it to your liking. My last complaint is that you keep using past tense while some words should be present tense. Sorry if I was nitpicking but other than that you story was a fun read. It was just a bit much.
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Well, I did told before that the chapter won't be divided at all.
I understand the problem with this one specifically, because It's a 45 minute special. The next chapters would be half long, that is 15000 words long more or less. Yeah, it's still a lot, I know, but at least for me It's easier to write it off all together. With things like the comics and TYT I would completely understand since they're way shorter, but the main series has more going on, so it's why I prefer to do them this long. Sorry if it bothers you, tho :/
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No worries. I was just trying to give you some constructive criticism.
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No worries! Criticism is always appreciated!
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Your welcome and please don’t shy away from changing things you don’t like.
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Well if you want my advice, label your next chapter one episode at a time, like I'm doing like labeling them like this. Chapter 2-1: Izzy Does It, it helps label them down since I bet the chapter 3 will be a long while until it comes out next.
Dude 35000+ words is way too much for a single chapter. There’s a point where a chapter needs to be split into multiple parts and this goes way past that.
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If it's a special, you gotta put them together, it's save the lingo. And beside, there are others who did maybe 40, 50k words tops, so this is not surpring, I did 25k words on my, so we can complete a special, but the episodes are half that, so don't worry about it.
Awesome job, keep up the good work 😎👍
Is Tails and Knuckles gonna be in TYT?
Ooh this is so exciting, I’m getting goosebumps!
My god this was long, but worth it. I can’t wait for more.
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That does not make me wrong.
Why can't Neo Metal Sonic have free will? Wasn't it portrayed (in the Sonic IDW Comics) that despite having some semblance of free will, he still serves the Eggman Empire regardless?
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Comics aren't canon at all. To not make the story that long: I just nerfed Neo so he doesn't kill Sonic, because we know he could if he wanted.
There are multiple instances in the story; it's distracting but it doesn't detract
...he didn't think, you mean.
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Well the comics are sort of Canon because in the series Twilight appears to the Gen 5 characters, Twilight appears just like how Discord appeared in the comics. Discord from the Friendship is Magic Timeline.
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I was talking about Sonic IDW comics, not MLP
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Ahh okay hehehe. By the way, Sonic and Pipp's relationship is cute here but I don't think Amy Rose is going to be too happy once she finds out, And Amy has already broken down when that thing with Eggman and Sonic getting teleported to this world happened. Ohh Boy, Eggman pissed off Amy....? He was not having a good day :o
Ooh by the way, Is Amy Rose going to make an appearance too? :D
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If she did then it would not end well for Pipp.
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Whack-a-Pony.
Hmmm… I wonder if the Unity Crystals are also unknowingly using the chaos Emeralds power as well as their own. Cause that white flash was more like Chaos Control than normal magic. It would explain why the emeralds are taking a long time to recharge and partly why magic is being unpredictable since Chaos is unpredictable itself. But we may never know.
Next chapter?!
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October 26th
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Are any more of Sonic's friends going to arrive in Equestria, or is it just Tails and Knuckles?
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I do will say... despite more characters coming eventually, the main focus will be Team Sonic (Sonic, Tails and Knuckles)
I like Sparky
Awesome first episode of Chapter 2, and wow, the group having their day while Knuckles kept Izzy company while Hitch and Zipp clean up Izzy’s mess and Tails testing Sonic’s new ability and realize that he has no limits to this new power, which even shock sonic when he heard that and looks like him and Pipp’s moments continues to grow even more and Izzy found her inspiration and helped Pipp with her creative block. And wow was Opaline strict with Misty, but I’m surprise that Eggman stands up with Misty and help her stay confident, never thought I see that side of robotnik, and the group enjoy the rest of Sunny’s birthday, awesome job, I’m looking forward to episode 2 of chapter 2
Awesome job 😎 👍
This is going places, I can tell
Heh the adventure continues.
Awesome chapter, and wow, Hitch was so stubborn for not listening to his friends about earth pony magic, that stallion really needs to not over think these things. And talk about wild, and Knuckles now being Deputy, now that’s a surprise and greet way for him, sonic finding a song for Pipp, that’s sweet of him, and Kunckles was the only one that can see through things over hitch stubbornness, and man he and Izzy babysit Sparky, and I think Izzy now have a crush on Knuckles, and looks like Metal Sonic now meet metal Izzy, and even as a robot, metal Izzy acts like the original, no surprise there, I wonder if the others did as well, anyway, now the earth pony magic is now under control and looks like Knuckles has powers now too, I wonder when Tails will unlock his, anyway, awesome job, keep up the great work
Amy is gonna kill Pipp
Awesome job, Knuckles has powers and I can't wait for Tails's too!!!😎😀😀😀
Well, I guess Eggman’s whole framing plan has been compromised. I mean, I hate that cliche so I’m glad it is, but still, the only way I’d work is if the heroes are complete morons and don’t tell everyone about the robotic copies.
Also Izzy trashing her imposter is just a joy to read. She always was the scariest of the team. Also it seems Knuckles might have a girlfriend later on.
Aw, now that was sweet.
when sonic talks like this i immediately think of fleetway sonic's eyes in the background.
Okay, that was an interesting and great chapter, and looks like Metal Izzy and Hitch are trying to frame the real deals when they made their move in Maretime Bay, and Knuckles and Tails are there to clear their names, while Zipp tried to find a way out of family portrait day while dragging Pipp into it, they hit a few bumps and looks like Misty did trapped them while looking for an Ocean Lily flower, and Sunny and Sonic did their best to stall Haven, and wow can Haven sing, so that's where Pipp gets it, and after a few arguements and thinking, Zipp and Pipp make amends and sing their childhood songs and Kunckles and Tails defeated Metal Izzy and Hitch, and then Metal Sonic came in and save his team, now the group know what they are dealing with but I get the feeling they will show their metal faces again, and Sonic sang to Pipp, which is catchy and great, and their feelings grow each time, awesome job, keep up the great work.
That was beautiful, how Sonic sing his song for Little Pipp. Great Job😍👍😎
Looks like Sunny now knows Metal Sonic plans to target her with Sonic, but I have a feeling that Team Sonic will keep her safe from Metal and showed Eggman that his metal doubles putting blame on the mane 5 isn’t gonna work after Metal Izzy & Metal Hitch messed up.
But the big highlight of this was Pipp understanding that Sonics song was for her and it helped her know Sonic has feelings for her and wait til he is ready to officially date. And I would not be surprised if that ended up inspiring Pipp to make a Song for Sonic.
That was a really sweet chapter, my dude. Also...
I sense Knuckles x Izzy on the horizon~
A message for Sonic and Pipp:
Oh boy Amy is so going loose her temper when she finds Sonic and has Pipp’s head on a platter.
So, Tails is 23. That at least answers one possible question later down the line.
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Dead Meat!
Awesome job, keep up the good work!!🤩🤩😎👍