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Anon's first Nightmare Night was shared with an unusual and unexpected stranger.

Written for the One Thousand Word contest by Bicyclette

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The story is pretty impressive. The 1,000 words short story is actually pretty impressive on that too.

I am so very intrigued by this shadow pony now.

Interesting concept, but it's clear you were really feeling the pinch at the end. "The two spent the night walking and talking as the festivities continued around him" is code for "I can't write out the rest of this scene and still be eligible for this contest." What's there is certainly interesting; I'm always up for a novel variation on ponies as we know them. But that variation deserves more space to properly explore it, to say nothing of fewer winks at the camera.

That being said, this is still a fine if cramped bit of fluff. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.

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