Anon's first Nightmare Night was shared with an unusual and unexpected stranger.
Written for the One Thousand Word contest by Bicyclette
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Anon's first Nightmare Night was shared with an unusual and unexpected stranger.
Written for the One Thousand Word contest by Bicyclette
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The story is pretty impressive. The 1,000 words short story is actually pretty impressive on that too.
I am so very intrigued by this shadow pony now.
Interesting concept, but it's clear you were really feeling the pinch at the end. "The two spent the night walking and talking as the festivities continued around him" is code for "I can't write out the rest of this scene and still be eligible for this contest." What's there is certainly interesting; I'm always up for a novel variation on ponies as we know them. But that variation deserves more space to properly explore it, to say nothing of fewer winks at the camera.
That being said, this is still a fine if cramped bit of fluff. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
it is very analogous, so convenient for the visiting human from modern-day North America!
ahaha, yeah, i would jump too if some rando commented on a thought i was saying to myself!
well, that is an interesting OC pony species! and explains why she seems like an incorporeal voice that could sneak up on him
ehehe that is fun!
this better be in the Experimental category, grumble
aww, that does explain the completely unexplained bat ponies pulling her chariot in "Luna Eclipsed"! also, heh, will always find it funny that ponies ride in chariots pulled by other ponies
well, that just raises further questions!
hehe, fun note to end on! and idk, maybe? but ponies are naked all the time, so i don't think Ombretta thought anything of it!
this does feel more like just the introductory scene of an OC than a story actually about the OC. and since the story ends here, we are left with no payoff for the many intriguing questions raised by the existence of this shadow mare. the last line is a funny one to end on, but kind of makes all the exposition beforehoof not really lead to anything in the end.
but still, thanks for writing!