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Lotus Moon


VA/Dramatic Reader, YouTuber, & Writer

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Twilight has always been an excellent student. Knew everything about any subject. But there was one she didn't really study on. Motherhood. And that is put to the test when she finds a baby Changeling...and has to hide it from her friends, the Princesses, and everypony else!

Note: The contents of this story happen before Starlight Glimmer started her revenge plan on Twilight as well as before Thorax appeared

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 34 )

Interesting, let's see were this goes. I would suggest slowing it down a tad, we went from Twilight to Twilight's a mom pretty quickly and for some that's jarring. Still, it's interesting and the cover art...

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8109443 I know it seemed a little fast, but since Twilight is hiding him, I thought kinda stepping her right into motherhood was a good idea. I'll be sure to take it slow now.

An interesting idea, but the concept of Twilight keeping it secret doesn't seem right. It is kind of a big thing, and not exactly something she can do so. More so when Spike returns and if Starlight's around. Especially with how last season ended and this one started.

8109478 I planned this story before Starlight went through with her plan of revenge against Twilight. And as bad as it seems for Twilight to keep secrets from her friends, just stay tuned to see what happens

eh, it needs to be about 20% cuter.:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::scootangel::pinkiehappy::yay::twilightsheepish::heart:

It's an interesting concept, here's hoping it turns out as good as I hope it will.

Has potential slow down with the pacing though

Very Interesting ........( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

I don't understand exactly why Twilight would need to keep this a secret other than for the sake of plot conflict and drama. Are the others and Celestia really going to react that badly to Twilight finding and taking in a lost infant. Even if it's supposed to be a racism thing, the events of S6 and beyond would heavily contradict that kind of attitude. A lot of the premise here just doesn't seem to quite make sense.

Well I just found a new story to follow, I agree with a few of the others here, don't rush your pacing, expand scenes give them a bit more detail. Other then that seems good, I would like to see the chapters stay short like this, makes them a nice quick read. :pinkiehappy:

8110536 This happens before Thorax was accepted by other ponies

Creo que va bien solo diré animo joven usted puede...

Creo que va bien solo diré animo joven usted puede...

Going to assume this is pre-season five finale since starlight wasn't even mentioned.

Had to guess it was around that time when twi thinks even former queen cheeselegs wouldn't be so cruel when what we saw in the season 6 finale says otherwise.


This was definitely rushed. Twi jumped to thoughts at a jaring speed and the exposition felt out of place and kinda bland.

However this does seem interesting so I'll follow and see where this goes.

Considering season 6's finale revealed a changling's hunger can never be satisfied yet forming a real bond can cure them of their need to feed I'm curious to see if you'll use that somehow

Comment posted by YourFriendlyDictator deleted May 30th, 2017

well I can see this is going to be fun. next few chapter

Can't wait to see more!:pinkiehappy:

Sorry for my last comment, I accidentally pressed the "post comment" button. Anyways, THIS STORY IS ADORABLE..!!! Please continue..!

A nice story so far, hope to read more of it in the future.

"Fang? Fang, sweetie. It's time to eat." Twilight called, and the giggling increased. The purple aileron started teleporting to any and all locations he could and couldn't be. The map room, the tower, one of the many basements, the kitchen, her room, his room, etc. The last place she stopped at was the dining room. There she found him sitting in his chair, his adorable eyes as big as ever.

Alicorn*

Also cliffhangers -dies-

And enter forth the Sun and the Moon .

Yay! More chapters!

Your chapters are a tad short. I would have fused the last two into one, for my part.

Outside of that, you did a good work. I'm happy to see this story still live.

can't wait for the next chapter

Another changeling adoption story. And I still like them. Unfortunately most of them were never finished.

Very cute story so far. Little short chapter wise, but I still look forward to the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

Can you make the next chapter please?

Nice,been waiting for a year for this

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