After celebrating a party for Sackboy and his friends from Bunkum with the Mane 6 (along with Spike and Starlight) from the events of “Journey Home to CraftWorld & Equestria”, The Mane 6 and Sackboy are now preparing for a big party in Canterlot.
However, a looming threat of an army by the Storm King arrives to threaten Equestria with the dastardly Vex making his way to takeover CraftWorld with his Topsy Turver. It’s up to Sackboy and the Mane 6 (with Spike, Clive, and Newton) to go on a “Big Adventure” to save their homelands. During their journey, they’ll meet up with new faces who will help them on their quest!
Chapters (9)
Since LittleBigPlanet 3 is the only game alive with the servers (RIP PS3 Servers), I'm surprised that you haven't completed the rest of the story of your LittleBigPony series, knowing to understand that your personal life can be busy. But with your Mario story along with Rabbids, I hope this gets completed since I wanted to commented on why does LBP x MLP crossover existed.
Oh yeah! It's nice to see you revisit your scrapped SABA story mixed to this chapter! Vex and Tempest teaming it has to be my favorite part here.
Please continue this! I absolutely love it, not to mention the interactions with Vex!
Why did you change the opening song from They Got the Beat to that one that's up there (Equestria)? Just wondering.
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I heard that the Equestria song version of the Movie was supposed to appear in the final product, but was replaced with that pop music beat because it’s Hasbro being Hasbro. Plus being honest, the Equestria Song version fits perfectly here because it fits with the orchestra and theming. Heard that a few fans didn’t like the “Ponies got the Beat” since it’s their opinion btw.
Are you going to fix any grammar mistakes you might have made in previous chapters when you continue this story? Just wondering, because if so, I can help with pointing them out to you, if you'd like.
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Depends if I missed a few. Plus, this one when it comes to chapters, I have take a good look of the gameplay and cutscenes to cooperate on the story. But yes, you can point out the errors and maybe addional parts that can be worthy.
Pay attention to the details
Every gem even-spaced
Make the colors perfect
Spike: Takin' one or two to taste
Rarity also gives him a basket of gems to keep him occupied. No one should argue during this festival.
Also, what about other ponies from the series showing up throughout the song? I felt that they should be at least mentioned in the story.
“Ponies of Equestria, we come on behalf of the fearsome, the powerful, the most ferocious, the almighty… Grubber!”
Should be:
“Ponies of Equestria and beings of Carnivallia, Bunkum, and Craftworld, we come on behalf of the fearsome, the powerful, the most ferocious, the almighty… Storm King!”
You should also mention the banner of the Storm King that unfurls.
If there are any grammar mistakes from text that originates from Sackboy: A Big Adventure, look up the cutscenes with captions. You'll be able to fix those mistakes by coordinating between them and this story.
Topsy Tuvor?
Topsy Turver
Oh man, can't wait for the Vex fight in the next chapter!
As Vex enters Loom -> As Vex enters Canterlot
Also, when does Princess Celestia ever say Yeah (instead of Yes)?
And what did Vex load an Obsidian Orb into? (If not his vacuum, then a gun made from his free hand, I can only presume)
"Uh, that would be the Staff of Sacanas, Your Excellency, and it will...", said Tempest.
Why does her quote stop there?
"So that would be a yes on your locking down the four Pegacornicuseses, or whatever you call them?" The Storm King grinned and licked his scaly lips with his serpentine tongue
Why is that quote shown twice here? (Albeit with a different description of what the Storm King does when saying that quote, but still)
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The quote at the bottom was a little mistake. Had to rewrite it as I rewatched that part. For the top, I got tired/sleepy when reworking it and I kind of forgot to get that refixed but was busy on the following two chapters.
Next chapter?