Celestial Year 3678
The Equestirus 1, a floating pegasus paradise above the dying war-torn world of Equestria beneath them, is on the verge of collapse. The only hope for it's survival is the ones known as The Celestials, 6 beings of such extreme importance that even the most pure of governments would kill to have just one of them. But no one knows who they are. Sent on a journey by Princess Celestia, Twilight Sparkle must survive in the dying lands around Canterlot and find The Celestials before Equestirus crashes into Ponyville and destroys the world.
Chapters (2)
Dialogue isn't so bad, grammar-meh, but it was the fact that ponies can hold guns that threw me off.
......this is actually pretty okay!
I LIKE IT!
WOOT!
Hey, hey, hey, this I gotta see.
Gonna keep tabs on this story.
Interesting... I wonder how Fluttershy survived this, that's if she did survived... following this...
1246835 it's all good dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png
1246850 yeah i thought about that.....meh...give the story a dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png hole to throw ppl off dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png
1246892 thanks and awesome picture! "Was Good, Mexico!"dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Derpy_Hooves.png
1247010 yes quite.... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
1247045 thanks and nice Apple.mov reference dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
1247072 i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/117/865/indubitably128597039696366331.jpg?1303944067
1247069 going to let you in on a secret...
meht fo yna ro yhsrettulF wonk t'nseod ehs os........... yrots siht ni srehto eht of yna tem t'nsah tghiliwT1247083 Oh, that's a shame... anyway, keeping track on the story.
1247083 This is definitely going to turn out awesome :D and I like what you did with your secret, I feel like that's gonna spice things up
a war that lasted nearly 600 years that's bad.
Very interesting.
Also are the Celestials the mane six, because I don't see any other or OC tag?
Fav and liked as I want to see where this leads to. Very good so far.
1247072WA'S GOOD, NNYYYYUUUUUGGAAAAAAHHHH!!!!
Hmm...most track-worthy indeed.
An interesting premise. *check*
Grammar that could pass the 9th grade *check*
Etc, Etc.....*Check*
Keep up the good work!
1247099 will do! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Sweetie_happy.png
1247259 i hope so too dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
1247332 yes....yes it is dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png
1247450 thanks and i actually ran out of tag space.... and i am not disclosing any info as to who the Celestials are dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Derpy_Hooves.png
1247629 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png it's all good
1247646 thanks and I shall! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
and to fix the major Gun-Firing plot hole......the are larger and able to be fired by a trigger big enough for a hoof or to be shot by unicorn magic....a lot of pegasi use wing-mounted guns or drop single-carry bombs...earth ponies have guns that they can fire using their hooves and are mostly back mounted to reduce kickback and Twilight's 'Machine' is a very large magic projectile turret gun that she can fire using hoof based trigger fire or her magic....just to let y'all know
Though this is in my interests, this doesn't please me enough, in other words: MOAR!
1247846 Fo:E uses the concept of Earth ponies using either battle saddles (custom-built rigs with two side-mounted weapons and a mouth bit for firing) or mouth-held weapons, similar to an adapted version of the P226 without the handgrip and with a modified trigger.
Could you please clear up as to when & where in the timeline that Twilight was in battle and year it is now age too please cause I'm confused.
1248301 moar to come dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
1248315 ik but im trying to come up with similar yet original ways of using ranged weapons and stuff... i don't like to copy ideas to a T dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy.png
1248384 current year is 3678, she was in the battles from 2973 til the wars end (explained later) and her accident occurred in 3145, her age is over 1470 years old (2208 is her birth year) but due to natural circumstances in the world (explained later) and medical advancements (also explained later) the average life span of a pony is 1500+ years. Ik this is a very large gap but hey....its fiction! If it was realistic it might not be as entertaining.
1248384 aging occurs at a rate of one year every one year for the first 16 years than slows down to one year every 287-290 years (also explained later)
Is it bad for someone to love war within stories?
1250043 i don't think so dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy_invert.png
Looks interesting so far. Thumbs up and favourited.
1275242 woohoo thank chu
Two years in between updates? Alright.
4757014 yeah sorry about that ^^
Awesome.
I really like it.
There is not enough Steampunk on this site to satisfy me.