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Zephyr Breeze has been in love with Rainbow Dash for a long time now everybody thinks he's just a slacker but the truth is he's just enjoying his life to the fullest. Since his dying and his days are numbered and now his final days are about to come and his one last wish is just at least one date with Rainbow.
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Oh man that's so sad now I feel bad for Zephyr 😢
Pretty good story, it does need a few edits. But I enjoyed it nonetheless.
I wish I can give more likes.
If you'd like I can help you edit or point out what needs editing
You have no idea how hard it was to hold back tears.
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that will be great
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Kk, I'll get to editing as soon as possible
I actually like how it ended realistically, with his sad passing away. This was good. Yes, it could use some more details when they move locations- and it felt really quick. Short stories are... well... short ... but explain as much as you would like, this could benefit from more details. I like the story nonetheless
Story was... alright. It needs work, but overall it was relatively alright.