Too much "telling not showing", but otherwise warrents a sequel

I have no idea why this story isn't getting more attention. It's so wonderfully written, smut wise and story wise. I've always loved mature fics that can combine porn with story, especially when they're THIS good! Loved this! Hit all the right spots! Astounding! Plenty of sap that opens roads, MORE than enough spunk but not nearly enough at the same time, hehe, and it was absolutely worth the read.

As for that ending: It opens a possibly to see this Twilight actually FINDING love sometime in the future and I love that. She needs it just as much as everyone else needs it, and she's surrounded by love she doesn't believe she can have. I don't know who the lucky stallion or mare would be but they can turn those sad tears into happy tears it doesn't matter who! Make her feel loved!

That or Dash n' Shy actually convince Twilight that they actually DO love her more than she can believe. Development on the horizon?...

All in all, can't wait to see more from you!

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A sequel would definitely tie the ribbon on this nice present here.

"Happy" ending hm...

It was certainly different.

I am surprised you actually had Rainbowdash and Fluttershy caring about Twilight and her feelings.

Especially because they still seemed to care about her after they got what they wanted from her. (Potions and orgasms)

I was expecting this chapter to be about Fluttershys brutal conquest, and Twilight coming to some kind of "hurts so good" realization that left her hating herself, but resigned to doing this forever because she couldnt live without penis.

You write feelings extraordinarily well, they just usually arent pleasent feelings.

Which for me means most of your stories leave me feeling rather hollow, which I imagine is the point.

A recurring theme of ponies letting their lust drive them to hurt each other and themselves. Likely isnt supposed to leave one feeling well disposed towards them.

Which is sort of still what happened here? Except upon realizing that Twilight was hurt they responded by trying to make her feel better. Instead of twisting the knife or with apathy.

Which is throwing me for enough of a loop that I felt the need to write out this whole spiel.

Awesome

I don’t recognize myself in the mirror anymore.

I came here to fap, not feel.
But really, the worst thing about this story is the 'Completed' tag. I hope we get another story in this universe some day, because that was great. I loved the ending too.

Damn that was hot. It got a smidge over the top for me at various times (mostly in the second half), but I'm willing to look past that because a) that's more than compensated by the other (majority) parts and b) it's anthro, so I'm willing to accept more over-the-topness compared to if this was humanized.

And the anthro works here. My #1 biggest issue with anthro is when a fic only actually 'requires' it for only a very small part of the story -- ie the buildup contains very little reference to things like clothes, and maybe it focuses on boobs for like one paragraph before it moves on -- so why not write it as pony instead. This is not one of those fics.

I'm not sure if this is my favorite or second-favorite of your stories. Either way it's amazing!

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If it were your second favorite, what would be your favorite? Which is the other contender?

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How to Serve Your Kingdom

great job on story

Good lord, this is giving me some dark, dark story ideas.

All in all good... but, since you asked:
I think part 3 was a bit 'too much of good thing'.

Having chapters 1 2 4 is plenty of smut and balances out nicely with the sweet stuff.

This was a really sweet absolutely HOT amazing story that both turned me on more then I've ever been and made me tear up at the very sweet ending. What a roller coaster ride of a story, absolutely wonderful amd one I'll definitely be coming back to read again!

This definitely has way more heartfelt discussions and melancholy than one would expect from a story titled Rocket-fueled Futa Gangbang. But I guess I should've anticipated that given that concordion is the author. Do you get off on making your readers cry while they clop perchance?

Loved when Fluttershy gave Twilight that first taste of cum, pushing fingers inside her mouth, playing with her tongue, making her suckle on them. Super hot. And when she grabbed Twilight's hair and hooked her by her cheek.

The moment when Twilight burped the jizz-stench into Rainbow's face was awesome too. Serves her right. Kinda wish there was even more focus on that, and that Twilight felt a pang of justice instead of being so sorry for it. She's just too nice!

I honestly expected Rainbow to last a bit longer, Seemed like they were gonna seriously double team Twilight to the point of total exhaustion, just covering her completely with their thick magical spunk. But the story did end with a very pleasant picture of their future antics which I enjoyed a lot too.

Really hope to see more kinky futa content from you!

Not really sure I'd classify this as a happy ending. I mean they're just using her as a fuck toy and they don't really "love" her. But good story.