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Starswirl the Beardless


Don't let your dreams be memes

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Sunset Shimmer’s life was not always leather jackets and high school misadventures. The fiery girl was once the most powerful young unicorn her age, and sat at the right hoof of the enigmatic ruler of all ponykind. But when the ambitious pony bites off more than she can chew, the princess is forced to put her hoof down. Now Sunset is off on an airship adventure across Equestria, with new responsibilities and a fancy new title to worry about. Follow along as Sunset discovers the answers to the biggest questions of her life. Why was she chosen over all others to be Celestia’s student? What sort of plans does the princess have for her future? And what could drive a pony like Sunset to abandon her home, her people, and the only real friend she ever had? The tale begins with a dream, or rather, a nightmare…

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 13 )

I think your writing style is great- very descriptive and details flow together well. I would love to read more of this story. The strange dream and references to the Mare in the Moon have me wondering what mystery is unfolding. I also like how you managed to include characterization for Sunset in the descriptions. One thing I might suggest going forward is to make sure that longer sections aren't repeating themselves- there is a risk with your kind of writing to repeat yourself unnecessarily. Again I think this chapter is great and eagerly await more.

I'm really enjoying this story and looking forward to reading more chapters!

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I know this is pretty late in coming, but thank you for your comment. I was worried that the prologue would scare people away, but I'm glad to see that at least some people liked it. I've been trying to keep your advice and others' in my mind as I've gone along, and I'll try to make sure I don't slip up. If you're still following the story, thank you for your continued interest. If not, then thanks for giving me a chance anyway.

Why does Sunset look like Rarity in the cover art?

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Sunset and Rarity have very similar hairstyles, so their silhouettes look somewhat similar. The key difference is that Rarity has very noticeable curls in her mane and tail, whereas Sunset has much smoother, wavy hair.

This story is excellent. The situations Sunset has to face are interesting and work well to put her character into perspective. There is a solid balance of long and short term plot elements. The dialogue is smooth and consistent with the characters' personality. My compliments to the author.

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Thank you for your praise. I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed my work.

Nice view.

Though dream element of plot is kinda rough - like "i need a more motives for sunset s behavior - lets make her have a nightmares about past mistake of celestia"

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