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Brazen Frenzy


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I like how your writing realistically portrays the strengths and weaknesses of characters through dialogue. Like, they sometimes speak eloquently and sometimes make mistakes, and it makes sense in context why that character is acting that way. It makes the interactions feel more alive.

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You've got a great start so far. Good luck going forward!
As a reader, I'm noticing how nice and normal the human characters have been so far. Because of the Halo universe, I am anticipating a very large tonal shift when the war begins. Twilight's position as an outsider is what makes the story interesting to me. At some level, I suppose I am hoping that she cannot truly integrate into the human communities she is among. I'm reading to see how her unique culture and psychology strain (and perhaps even break) in an alien environment. My heart is bloodthirsty for her hatred, tragedy, and desperation.
This is just information. If you write something you like, I'm sure I'll like it too.

Thanks for adding my story to your favorites!

You're a sweetheart! Thank you for giving my sojourn and headcanon to the sister's history a read. Always happy to see a fav (and upvoting, you'd be surprised how many forget that part too)

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Yeah the story was pretty good. I could tell there were moments where the movie scripts put you in a difficult spot narrative-wise but I thought your work-arounds were pretty creative. I was curious what your personal theory was for why Sunset wasn't magically stronger than Twilight in Friendship Games. The one in the story makes sense to me, in terms of Sunset deliberately holding back, but you mentioned in the author's note that you had a different theory. For my curiosity, what was that theory?

Also want to say that I'd totally read your sequel if/when you post it.

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