Twilight Sparkle, a young gifted Unicorn is given the opportunity of a lifetime, to be the personal student to Princess Celestia. After demonstrating her abilities at her examination, her first day of studies comes to a grinding halt when a predecessor comes back for revenge on her mentor and Princess. After a narrow escape, the young filly, just beginning to learn her powers finds herself in the middle of the everfree forest, alone and vulnerable with no one to help guide her back to the life that was so swiftly pulled out from under her hooves. Her adventure nearly comes to an end when a pack of timber wolves attack her, however she is saved by one of the most unlikely of creatures, a dragon. With no one else to help her, she immediately follows the disgruntled and solitary creature back to his lair, much to his annoyance. However, he comes to find out that the two of them are far more connected than he could have ever guessed...
In this alternate universe, Twilight is a filly and never hatched spike. He grew up as a wild dragon in the Everfree forest, however deep down past the scales and fire, he will come to realize that perhaps he is something more. The first of a series I plan to create where spike is the "Older Brother/Guardian" figure, however, the bond that they share is the same if not stronger than that in the show. I believe this is an original concept, correct me if I'm wrong, but the idea came to me and I have been excited to show this to all of you
This story has been in my mind for over a year now and I am excited to finally be able to publish it, I hope that you all enjoy, as I am proud to present to you "Friends by Fate"
The cover art was done by me, you can check out more of my work at me DevianArt page
http://bronyofgalifrey9.deviantart.com/
Inspiration for this story came from this picture http://xonxt.deviantart.com/art/Role-reversal-475409314 from the tallented xonxt on DeviantArt, go check him out and give him some love
Make sure to leave feeback (I love to know what you all think) and I hope you all enjoy
Rated Teen for mild blood and gore, nothing too horrible, just light battle injuries.
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Hmm... Excellent concept. Why no one has thought of this before, or wrote anything above sub-par with this premise, is beyond me. Apart from a few grammar mistakes I very much enjoyed reading this intro chapter. The flow is nice, the lead up to later events is decent, and overall I like the way you've characterized everyone. I would assume Sunset never went through the portal in this 'verse, and as such her plans flow very well with her personality. I've never seen a version of Celestia that is too OOC for me so I can't really say yea or neigh (strangely appropriate i think), this is because she has never had that great of a characterization and as such she could literally be anyone under her mask of calm. Spike is written in a believable way, he is still tied to Twilight through fate after all, and I can't wait to see more of him. Going back to the grammar mistakes, the only ones I actually noticed were in Twilight's first (maybe second?) piece of dialogue. I can't really gripe about it though, as while I was reading it seemed appropriate, I had to change my ideal as I had forgot that Twilight's a filly, something I feel very few authors actually manage to pull off. If you manage to keep her dialogue similar to how it is here: more or less proper grammar, but with some mistakes, then I might just love this story even more.
Anyways, I feel this deserves(all scores out of 5, no fractions):
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Characterization:
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There's not really much else to grade on right now, and these are just my scores, but keep it up please!!
Looks good so far.
I shall be following this to see what happens next.
6944263 Ditto.
6944273 Cool.
You're super excited and I'm super excited which culminates into uber excitement. I'll be keeper stalker like tabs on this story.
I shall read... mainly out of the hope that Sunset Satan gets thrown to hell.
Though... Author Person, please do make sure to remember that Sunset CANNOT use the EoH in Equestria. The convention that on Humanquestria she could somehow use one Element to gain super demon powers was weak enough as it was... as was the head-scratching question of how the heck she even could so much as speculate what would happen given that the EoH were powerless rocks for a thousand years and had never been to another universe before.
So, do think carefully about such things and don't rely on the poor EqG writing for ANYTHING. Otherwise I shall have to taunt you like a Frenchman.
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but who says they hadn't been to another dimension? Celestia went to other dimensions both before and after Luna's fall, it's not that hard to imagine her taking one or two with her (not to mention she was the element of magic)
*lair
layer is like a cake layer, or a layer of dust.
Lair is where one lurks.
i will be keeping a close eye on this nice chapter this story has my continued attention
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I think that is the best threat/use of Monty Python I have ever seen. Great way to start the day before going into a math test!
Well this is certainly an interesting concept, I shall track it and see what happens next.
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In the comics... but even there she never took the EoH with her. From ALL continuity, the EoH have never been outside Equestria. For a story to state otherwise... well that's a whole additional piece of fanon lore to explain! Because there STILL remains the issue of how Sunset would know about it, and how she would discover that she could use a single Element to gain demon powers... AND how she could then prevent the Element from reverting to its regular function once back in Equestria. It really overcomplicates things and makes the story more about the mechanism than the characters.
6950079 hmmm... You offer a valid point. I'm gonna have to research some more on this subject.
You have my attention.
Interesting. I like the direction it looks like you are taking this in, although I feel like I really need to see the next chapter before I can really say anything for sure. Everyone seems to be in character so far and the concept sounds interesting so I think it should be good, although you could stand to get an editor to take a look at this because you definitely have some mechanical issues to iron out.
so this Sunset never tried to go through the mirror. Her redemption is going to be so much harder.
That's why you use your cunning dragon intellect to seduce the tasty ponies into WANTING to be eaten! Then they don't hurt your ears begging for their lives and stuff! Like fishes drawn into a crocodile's gently smiling jaws... (Alondro's mind interprets things... differently...)
But.. really? Shining Armor AND Celestia get worfed just like that? This starts out on a rather silly note... it's far too easy for this NEW mythical beast to blast Celestia with ice... Heat is practically limitless, cold can only go down a few hundred degrees from room temp. It really wouldn't have a snowball's chance in hell.
A subtler kidnapping plan would have been a better way to start things off. Now Celestia knows who's behind it and has the resources of an entire nation behind her. Sunset's being incredibly sloppy here in her methodology.
How close are you to finishing the next chapter?
6952876 Remember, it doesnt use cold, it uses fear to paralyze its victims, and if the attack was a blitz (which is what happened) Most anyone would be caught off guard enough to be subdued. We've seen Celestia isn't invicinble and she has her weaknesses. So it's not implausible to think that a well timed and efficient strike would be able to subdue her
6954376 Hopefully I should have it done by next weekend, my goal will be to eventually get a chapter out (at the very latest) once a week if extenuating circumstances dont occur, if they do I will let you all know
6952876 Also remember, this is partially fueld by rage and revenge, she might not be thinking this entire scenerio out very clearly
6950079 In this story, Sunset isn't after the Elements Directly, you'll see why she truly wanted to abduct Twilight later on in the story, just bear with me
6946310 Haha, don't worry, those atrocities wont be brought into this story
6954954 Okay thanks!
I like this story from the concept alone. I also really want to know what happens next, so I'm going to sit here and wait for the next chapter.
Huh, I thought that sneauxsnaek seemed familiar.
Off to a good start, here!
How's the next chapter coming along?
7105294 about half done, should be out soon, and the rest soon to come after. I'm sorry it took longer than I had promised, all I can say is thank God for summer vacation, college literally sucked the life out of me during the second semester.
7233511 I'll be graduating from high school this year myself so no sweat.
Liked it but it seriously suffers from the "Wall of Text" Disease.
7233511 Is the next chapter coming along okay?
Will this be updated soon?
7720048 updated :)
Wooow, new chapter, got to reread the story tho
7802347 haha, yeah sorry it took so long. I hope that you enjoy it
update yea
Did you mean interloper?
Other than that, really enjoyed the intensity. Also, PLEASE LET BBBFF LIVE!!!!
Emotion loaded chapter there. I like the way you have written the rescue. I am eager for the next part! Good story.
now it really getting good, as far as I know this story is 1 of a kind. twilight meets a full grown spike, this is going in ny top3 list of different begings story line list. spike saves filly twilight but leaves, it really getting good please update whene you can and I be looking forward to ch 3
7802761 haha thank you! And a merry Christmas to you too
Yay, its back!
Well, now I'm emotionally invested in this story. I hope you're happy, author.
Nice update. Curious about what this, Spike, has been thru, and what that can mean for, Twilight.
My guess is he may or may not have met, Sunset when they were younger. In short, a really bad experience.
Mead more
Tragic?
This is cool! I can't wait for more
I just found this story and so far i gotta say i'm loving it completely. can't wait for more interactions between spike and twilight.
Psst, typo in the short description