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I hope it DOESN'T end as hostile in the beginning like Noble Guardians. And I just want to having Noble Team, the Main Six and their Kids as Friends.
Although the Ponies will be horrified, tramitazed, and pity Noble Team and Humanity in general on having that HUGE War for 28 Years, and facing the multiple Alien Species and Genocidal Monsters: The Covenant. Not to mention that they DIED once!!!
Update pls!
*After reading this Chapter*
I apologize for the cursing, BUT WHAT THE FUCKIN HECK!!!!!!???? GOD DAMMIT!!!!!
DIDN'T I ask nicely in Chapter One NOT to have Noble Team and Ponies have a Terrible First Impression and a Dumb Misunderstanding that cause a unnecessary fighting between Two GOOD GUY Teams ( Noble Team, and the Ponies: Main Six, Spike, their Kids, their Other Friends and Allies, Princesses, Young Six, Etc...).
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Well, sadly you somehow ignore me, and this Chapter Greatly Upsets me. 😫 😤 😡
I did kinda let it slide in the Second Chapter. Because, Both Apple Gem and Cloud are just Naive and Arrogant Teenagers. And of course, the Spartan Team did teach them a lesson, and stop the fighting from getting worse.
But with THIS Chapter : Noble Two, Three, and Four ( Kat, Jun, and Emile) are injured, and need Medical Assistance. DESPITE them being Super Soldiers, have High Tech. Armor.
And have already face TOUGHER Enemies that will make the Ponies Shit themselves and be Tramitazed. ( I'm talking about the Covenant themselves with the 8 Alien Species in their Empire, and have their High Tech. Weapons, Vehicles, and Space Ship Armada, Of Course.)
At least Noble One: Carter, Five: Jorge, and Six are okay. But, still.
Sure, Noble Team have just turn into Ponies, and aren't Quite Accustomed to their New Pony Bodies and Magic. And May/May Not have their UNSC/"Borrowed" Covenant Guns, Grenades, and Weapons. ( PLEASE Hope you give them their Guns back.) And the Spartan's themselves are sadly Not Invincible. I mean they all died back in Reach. 😓
But still, while they did "Won" against Luna, HALF of them got K.O'd!!!! 🤦 🤦 🤦
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Speaking about Luna. I may Love Both MLP and Halo. BUT, I'm more of a Halo Fan than MLP any day. Plus, I really do HATE the "First Impression Gone Wrong" or "A Misunderstanding that leads to a Fight" Tropes in MLP Stories in here.
It's VERY CLICHE, and will just make the Pony Characters ( Specifically Somepony like Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Luna, or even Celestia for being Paranoid Xenophobic/Racist Jerks) into a little OOC Pure Assholes and Jerks for hurting the Other Franchise Heroes/Anti Heroes, and the Human OC Protagonists or Displaced in Equestria.
It's makes me to REALLY want to go Doom Slayer/Doom Guy from the DOOM Series and Kratos from God Of War Series against Luna. Beat the Crap out of her to NEAR DEATH!!! And RIP her Horn and Wings, and shove both of them into her Two "Inappropriate and Private" Holes!!!
At least Twilight "tried" to apologize to the Spartans. And even Celestia KNOWS their Friendly and Heroic Soldiers. ( Probably due to the Prophecy that "Destined" Noble Team to be the New Heroic Guardians and Protectors to the Main Six and their Children.)
Work on the Grammar a bit and the pacing, even if its just inspired by The Noble Guardians its still some big shoes to match, i suggest try to replicate how he build up to every encounter, makes chapters longer but prevents it to move too fast.
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Okay, I'm finally back. I have a idea, so can you maybe please give me a request or a suggestion for your new chapter 3, and probably later on? I don't want to force you, but please consider this.
The little issue is IF Celestia knew Noble Team the whole time. ( Probably due with the Prophecy or something) WHY didn't she stop her Sister and Twilight Earlier, or Teleport Faster to stop the Stupid Fighting from occurring? I think Carter could address this, and maybe criticize a little to Celestia for coming here VERY LATE!!!
But nevertheless, I like to have Celestia Apologize for being Late and Defend Noble Team, and will Scold and give a Major Punishment to the Pony Aggressors ( Luna, Twilight, Applejack, and others).
Okay firstly, Celestia SHOULD HEAVILY SCOLD or even PUNISH Luna for injuring half of the Spartan Team. And that THEY are the "Prophesied" Allies and Friends to save the world from a future threat, and protecting the Main Six and their Children. Having a "Attack First, Ask Questions Later" Mindset is HIGHLY Stupid and Dumb for Luna to do! And will just will make things worse, and have more enemies than having friends and allies.
Luna, you have Failed trying to listen to Both Sides of the Story, and FAILED to be a Peaceful Democrat and DIDN'T use Twilight's Friendship teachings.
Also, Celestia should be a little angry at Twilight to didn't use her Peaceful and Friendship Solutions, or didn't stop the fight faster. And Celestia should Warned Applejack and various others NOT to Aggressive or Harsh to the Spartans. The Spartans are God Damn Heroes, and were supposed to be the "Protesters" to the Main Six and their Children.
So, NO more Stupid Hostility to Noble Team, and give a Massive Apology. Plus, Celestia and Carter should warned Luna, and the Main Six that the Spartans were HOLDING BACK the whole time!!!! Noble Team could have EASILY Kill Luna, Twilight, and other Ponies like previous Dead Covenant Solders ( IF they went Full Lethal) 😈
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P.S. Can Noble Team get their Weapons back? Both the UNSC, and "Borrowed" Covenant Weapons, and some Vehicles?
Plus, I want Luna, Twilight, Applejack, Apple Gem, and Cloud to have HUGE GUILT and should be ashamed of themselves. And give a Big Apology to Noble Team. And maybe Emile still Hates Luna for injuring him and his Teammates, and throw some Curse Words that will make Luna CRY!
Of course, Carter, Jorge, and maybe Kat, Jun, and Six tell him to stop it, and not make the situation worse. Even though they DON'T like Luna for what she did, and have a Big Distrust to the Ponies. They shouldn't make it worse.
But, maybe one of them should warned that if Master Chief ( John 117) was here. Or even the UNSC themselves and maybe ONI. The Ponies will LOSE a very Short War HARD, by Humanity's Superior Might and the Badass Spartans!!!!!!!!!
The Ponies should be GRATEFUL Noble Team were being Non Lethal, or NOT be in the UNSC's, ONI's, and the entirely of Humanity's Bad Side. Unlike the Nasty and Evil Covenant of course. 😒
Ah yes, cause Emile HATES doctors
Where can I read that story?
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/39110/the-noble-guardians
eh, you lost me on this last chapter. They just agree to be spartans for a foreign country and species because a prophecy said so. On top of that Celestia doesn't retaliate in any form about Luna's injuries. There is also no real thought out psychology behind each character's reaction or motives, i.e. they all sound and act the same with a few obvious exceptions (Noble). It's a good story but it could definitely be better with a bit more details and logic. You also have a lot of grammatical errors that need to be corrected.
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But seriously, Celestia just comes up and tells them to fight for her country, (offering nothing!) and they just say ok? On top of which they are going to be made up of suicide missions with no intel, and they are happy about it. Any military personnel in the world, will tell you that no one likes little to no intel. They want as much as possible, so as to ensure mission success and decrease casualty rate to the absolute minimum. Noble saying yes to Celestia is the most unreal thing here, and this is a mlp / halo crossover.
It makes them sound like the lack independence and are weak willed, like a welcome mate she can wipe her hooves on whenever and however she wants.
That's my take on it at least.
Ok, no grammar problem that i could see, the major thing now is textwall, try cutting some of your paragraphs otherwise its very straining to the reader.
Meh.
Oh boy, here we go...
ok miss spoiled
literally almost everytime this just has to happen, it's like rainbow kicking the HIE genre for the hundredth time in a row because their clearly not ponies or normal
Luna why are you so fucking stupid and why can't twilight just use her magic and get inside and slam some sense into your thick skull and why did she even call for you? Why not sunbutt? I don't know because I haven't been told and yet I got a feeling anyone would been a better pick
Edit: still reading
If a spartan can live reentry and still fight the Covenant then they don't need anything, they all are wearing good armor, the ones with shields
AJ you have literally no right to make them tell the truth more so since one of them is technically a ruler and is a alicorn
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You are right about that. Noble One should reconsider about Celestia's measly deal. I mean, I may like Halo Characters and MLP Characters to be Friends and work together. BUT, firstly. The Ponies and especially Luna ATTACKED first. And SOMEHOW hurt Kat, Jun, and Emile. Which is BULLSHIT!!!!! Sorry for cursing, but it's STILL BULLSHIT!!!!
And Noble Team still work for the UNSC and Humanity itself. So why should they help the ALIEN/FOREIGN Kingdom of the Ponies that ATTACKED them first. Hired them all because a "Very Questionable" Prophecy. With Little to No Intel on WHO/WHAT are the Enemy that are against the Main Six and their Kids???
I mean look what Xblaster also said that I totally agree and support with:
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Exactly!!!!
And Xblaster said this:
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Why DIDN'T Celestia show up first, and Luna came and screwed it all up!
And this:
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Celestia SHOULD Scold Apple jack for NOT believing her WORD to trust Noble Team. Due to a Stupid and possibly UNAVOIDABLE Misunderstanding that SHOULDN'T DAMN happened!!!!!!
And finally Xblaster said this that I rightfully agree:
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Can't the Ponies and the Human Spartan's/ODST's/or UNSC Soldier Characters from Halo or any other Franchise be Friends without the F****** Xenophobic/Racist Insults and Misunderstanding Bullshit! To have a GOOD First Contact and Impression??!! And this time, the Ponies don't have a DAMN excuse! Since the Six Spartans themselves got turn into Ponies as well. But, STILL got attacked???!!!
The Ponies are supposed to like "Friendship Is Magic, and Harmony" stuff. God Dammit!!!!!
Also? WHY THE HECK would Noble Team let Celestia show their Memories of the Fall of Reach??? I mean, isn't that Classified Information of the UNSC/ONI and Humanity as a whole??? And Invasion of Personal Privacy? And should they be pissed at Celestia for ALREADY seeing their Memories for some reason or another. With NO Permission and being Rude to see them anyway??
Plus, it will TRAMITAZED the Main Six and their Kids of seeing Real War. With Death, Destruction, the Evil War Atrocities and attempted Genocide/Xenocide to Humanity by the Covenant's Alien Species.
Heck, should Noble Team be "happy" to show their OWN DEATHS to the Ponies and give them Heavily Case of PTSD? I don't think so!!!
I know it might make the Ponies of the Main Six, their Kids, and especially Luna will feel total regret, guilt, and feel sorry for Noble Team. And will FINALLY Trust them and maybe hug them for sympathy. But, to make them see Noble Team get Kidnapped or Volunteered as kids to the Spartan 2-3 Programs. See True War and see Noble Team Kill the Covenant, while the Covenant themselves SLAUGHTER innocent Human Soldiers, Citizens, and even CHILDREN/BABIES!!!!!!!
See High Tech. Guns, Weapons, Vehicles, and Giant Space Ships from both UNSC and the Covenant will tramitazed the Ponies of all of the High Tech. Weapon's destructive power and kill counts. And the Covenant Glassing the Planet will definitely give them PTSD! And seeing the Spartans own sad Deaths is terrible enough.
I just think the Ponies, and even Luna would scared Shitless of the Spartan's True Strength, Speed, Power, Agility, Durability with Armor, Shields, using High Tech. Guns/Weaponry/Vehicles, and Total Brutality as Super Soldiers. Along with seeing True War, Death, Destruction, and Evilness of the Covenant themselves that will make ALL of the MLP Villains look like spoiled children.
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Because why not? That’s the real question
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Don't want to come off as rude.
But, I think you didn't read my Comment or even this other Commenter that I agree with:
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It will ALL explain WHY it's a Terrible Idea!!!
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Nebraska
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Is that your Home State? Why do you revealed that, and what's the purpose?!
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Nope it just doesn’t exist
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WHAT are you talking about? Isn't this it: upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/thumb/4/44/Nebraska_in_United_States.svg/1200px-Nebraska_in_United_States.svg.png
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T-T
-_-
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What? Why did you say 'Nebraska' firstly? Then, pretend it doesn't exist for some reason? Then type out that face expression?
Are you being Random for some reason? Or trying to change the subject with random things???!!!!
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As entertaining as it is to watch this confusion unfold. I will take my leave. I called myself chaotic for a reason.
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Oh! Love Discord then? Then you didn't want to talk about the Main Criticism of the Halo Noble Team getting the "Short End of the Stick" in this Fanfic? Or showing their Traumatizing War Memories and their Deaths to the Naive, and Child Innocent-Like Ponies is a TERRIBLE Idea!!!???
Edit: Why someone dislike me?
I'm making Good Points, and I'm not the only one.
Both Xblaster, and OBSIDI4N_DR4GON didn't like what's happening as well!
Have you seen my comments? And no hard feelings, I was emotional for what happened to Noble Team back then.
Hmm, completely forgot I was tracking this. I guess it's re read time because I have no idea what the plot of this story is lol
So good I can't wait for more chapters.
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Working on them, thanks for the support!
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No problem