I apologize for the cursing, BUT WHAT THE FUCKIN HECK!!!!!!???? GOD DAMMIT!!!!!
DIDN'T I ask nicely in Chapter One NOT to have Noble Team and Ponies have a Terrible First Impression and a Dumb Misunderstanding that cause a unnecessary fighting between Two GOOD GUY Teams ( Noble Team, and the Ponies: Main Six, Spike, their Kids, their Other Friends and Allies, Princesses, Young Six, Etc...).
Well, sadly you somehow ignore me, and this Chapter Greatly Upsets me. 😫 😤 😡
I did kinda let it slide in the Second Chapter. Because, Both Apple Gem and Cloud are just Naive and Arrogant Teenagers. And of course, the Spartan Team did teach them a lesson, and stop the fighting from getting worse.
But with THIS Chapter : Noble Two, Three, and Four ( Kat, Jun, and Emile) are injured, and need Medical Assistance. DESPITE them being Super Soldiers, have High Tech. Armor.
And have already face TOUGHER Enemies that will make the Ponies Shit themselves and be Tramitazed. ( I'm talking about the Covenant themselves with the 8 Alien Species in their Empire, and have their High Tech. Weapons, Vehicles, and Space Ship Armada, Of Course.)
At least Noble One: Carter, Five: Jorge, and Six are okay. But, still.
Sure, Noble Team have just turn into Ponies, and aren't Quite Accustomed to their New Pony Bodies and Magic. And May/May Not have their UNSC/"Borrowed" Covenant Guns, Grenades, and Weapons. ( PLEASE Hope you give them their Guns back.) And the Spartan's themselves are sadly Not Invincible. I mean they all died back in Reach. 😓
But still, while they did "Won" against Luna, HALF of them got K.O'd!!!! 🤦 🤦 🤦
Speaking about Luna. I may Love Both MLP and Halo. BUT, I'm more of a Halo Fan than MLP any day. Plus, I really do HATE the "First Impression Gone Wrong" or "A Misunderstanding that leads to a Fight" Tropes in MLP Stories in here.
It's VERY CLICHE, and will just make the Pony Characters ( Specifically Somepony like Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Luna, or even Celestia for being Paranoid Xenophobic/Racist Jerks) into a little OOC Pure Assholes and Jerks for hurting the Other Franchise Heroes/Anti Heroes, and the Human OC Protagonists or Displaced in Equestria.
It's makes me to REALLY want to go Doom Slayer/Doom Guy from the DOOM Series and Kratos from God Of War Series against Luna. Beat the Crap out of her to NEAR DEATH!!! And RIP her Horn and Wings, and shove both of them into her Two "Inappropriate and Private" Holes!!!
At least Twilight "tried" to apologize to the Spartans. And even Celestia KNOWS their Friendly and Heroic Soldiers. ( Probably due to the Prophecy that "Destined" Noble Team to be the New Heroic Guardians and Protectors to the Main Six and their Children.)
Work on the Grammar a bit and the pacing, even if its just inspired by The Noble Guardians its still some big shoes to match, i suggest try to replicate how he build up to every encounter, makes chapters longer but prevents it to move too fast.
Okay, I'm finally back. I have a idea, so can you maybe please give me a request or a suggestion for your new chapter 3, and probably later on? I don't want to force you, but please consider this.
The little issue is IF Celestia knew Noble Team the whole time. ( Probably due with the Prophecy or something) WHY didn't she stop her Sister and Twilight Earlier, or Teleport Faster to stop the Stupid Fighting from occurring? I think Carter could address this, and maybe criticize a little to Celestia for coming here VERY LATE!!!
But nevertheless, I like to have Celestia Apologize for being Late and Defend Noble Team, and will Scold and give a Major Punishment to the Pony Aggressors ( Luna, Twilight, Applejack, and others).
Okay firstly, Celestia SHOULD HEAVILY SCOLD or even PUNISH Luna for injuring half of the Spartan Team. And that THEY are the "Prophesied" Allies and Friends to save the world from a future threat, and protecting the Main Six and their Children. Having a "Attack First, Ask Questions Later" Mindset is HIGHLY Stupid and Dumb for Luna to do! And will just will make things worse, and have more enemies than having friends and allies.
Luna, you have Failed trying to listen to Both Sides of the Story, and FAILED to be a Peaceful Democrat and DIDN'T use Twilight's Friendship teachings.
Also, Celestia should be a little angry at Twilight to didn't use her Peaceful and Friendship Solutions, or didn't stop the fight faster. And Celestia should Warned Applejack and various others NOT to Aggressive or Harsh to the Spartans. The Spartans are God Damn Heroes, and were supposed to be the "Protesters" to the Main Six and their Children.
So, NO more Stupid Hostility to Noble Team, and give a Massive Apology. Plus, Celestia and Carter should warned Luna, and the Main Six that the Spartans were HOLDING BACK the whole time!!!! Noble Team could have EASILY Kill Luna, Twilight, and other Ponies like previous Dead Covenant Solders ( IF they went Full Lethal) 😈
P.S. Can Noble Team get their Weapons back? Both the UNSC, and "Borrowed" Covenant Weapons, and some Vehicles?
Plus, I want Luna, Twilight, Applejack, Apple Gem, and Cloud to have HUGE GUILT and should be ashamed of themselves. And give a Big Apology to Noble Team. And maybe Emile still Hates Luna for injuring him and his Teammates, and throw some Curse Words that will make Luna CRY!
Of course, Carter, Jorge, and maybe Kat, Jun, and Six tell him to stop it, and not make the situation worse. Even though they DON'T like Luna for what she did, and have a Big Distrust to the Ponies. They shouldn't make it worse.
But, maybe one of them should warned that if Master Chief ( John 117) was here. Or even the UNSC themselves and maybe ONI. The Ponies will LOSE a very Short War HARD, by Humanity's Superior Might and the Badass Spartans!!!!!!!!!
The Ponies should be GRATEFUL Noble Team were being Non Lethal, or NOT be in the UNSC's, ONI's, and the entirely of Humanity's Bad Side. Unlike the Nasty and Evil Covenant of course. 😒
Luna why are you so fucking stupid and why can't twilight just use her magic and get inside and slam some sense into your thick skull and why did she even call for you? Why not sunbutt? I don't know because I haven't been told and yet I got a feeling anyone would been a better pick Edit: still reading
*After reading this Chapter*
I apologize for the cursing, BUT WHAT THE FUCKIN HECK!!!!!!???? GOD DAMMIT!!!!!
DIDN'T I ask nicely in Chapter One NOT to have Noble Team and Ponies have a Terrible First Impression and a Dumb Misunderstanding that cause a unnecessary fighting between Two GOOD GUY Teams ( Noble Team, and the Ponies: Main Six, Spike, their Kids, their Other Friends and Allies, Princesses, Young Six, Etc...).
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Well, sadly you somehow ignore me, and this Chapter Greatly Upsets me. 😫 😤 😡
I did kinda let it slide in the Second Chapter. Because, Both Apple Gem and Cloud are just Naive and Arrogant Teenagers. And of course, the Spartan Team did teach them a lesson, and stop the fighting from getting worse.
But with THIS Chapter : Noble Two, Three, and Four ( Kat, Jun, and Emile) are injured, and need Medical Assistance. DESPITE them being Super Soldiers, have High Tech. Armor.
And have already face TOUGHER Enemies that will make the Ponies Shit themselves and be Tramitazed. ( I'm talking about the Covenant themselves with the 8 Alien Species in their Empire, and have their High Tech. Weapons, Vehicles, and Space Ship Armada, Of Course.)
At least Noble One: Carter, Five: Jorge, and Six are okay. But, still.
Sure, Noble Team have just turn into Ponies, and aren't Quite Accustomed to their New Pony Bodies and Magic. And May/May Not have their UNSC/"Borrowed" Covenant Guns, Grenades, and Weapons. ( PLEASE Hope you give them their Guns back.) And the Spartan's themselves are sadly Not Invincible. I mean they all died back in Reach. 😓
But still, while they did "Won" against Luna, HALF of them got K.O'd!!!! 🤦 🤦 🤦
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Speaking about Luna. I may Love Both MLP and Halo. BUT, I'm more of a Halo Fan than MLP any day. Plus, I really do HATE the "First Impression Gone Wrong" or "A Misunderstanding that leads to a Fight" Tropes in MLP Stories in here.
It's VERY CLICHE, and will just make the Pony Characters ( Specifically Somepony like Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Luna, or even Celestia for being Paranoid Xenophobic/Racist Jerks) into a little OOC Pure Assholes and Jerks for hurting the Other Franchise Heroes/Anti Heroes, and the Human OC Protagonists or Displaced in Equestria.
It's makes me to REALLY want to go Doom Slayer/Doom Guy from the DOOM Series and Kratos from God Of War Series against Luna. Beat the Crap out of her to NEAR DEATH!!! And RIP her Horn and Wings, and shove both of them into her Two "Inappropriate and Private" Holes!!!
At least Twilight "tried" to apologize to the Spartans. And even Celestia KNOWS their Friendly and Heroic Soldiers. ( Probably due to the Prophecy that "Destined" Noble Team to be the New Heroic Guardians and Protectors to the Main Six and their Children.)
Work on the Grammar a bit and the pacing, even if its just inspired by The Noble Guardians its still some big shoes to match, i suggest try to replicate how he build up to every encounter, makes chapters longer but prevents it to move too fast.
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Okay, I'm finally back. I have a idea, so can you maybe please give me a request or a suggestion for your new chapter 3, and probably later on? I don't want to force you, but please consider this.
The little issue is IF Celestia knew Noble Team the whole time. ( Probably due with the Prophecy or something) WHY didn't she stop her Sister and Twilight Earlier, or Teleport Faster to stop the Stupid Fighting from occurring? I think Carter could address this, and maybe criticize a little to Celestia for coming here VERY LATE!!!
But nevertheless, I like to have Celestia Apologize for being Late and Defend Noble Team, and will Scold and give a Major Punishment to the Pony Aggressors ( Luna, Twilight, Applejack, and others).
Okay firstly, Celestia SHOULD HEAVILY SCOLD or even PUNISH Luna for injuring half of the Spartan Team. And that THEY are the "Prophesied" Allies and Friends to save the world from a future threat, and protecting the Main Six and their Children. Having a "Attack First, Ask Questions Later" Mindset is HIGHLY Stupid and Dumb for Luna to do! And will just will make things worse, and have more enemies than having friends and allies.
Luna, you have Failed trying to listen to Both Sides of the Story, and FAILED to be a Peaceful Democrat and DIDN'T use Twilight's Friendship teachings.
Also, Celestia should be a little angry at Twilight to didn't use her Peaceful and Friendship Solutions, or didn't stop the fight faster. And Celestia should Warned Applejack and various others NOT to Aggressive or Harsh to the Spartans. The Spartans are God Damn Heroes, and were supposed to be the "Protesters" to the Main Six and their Children.
So, NO more Stupid Hostility to Noble Team, and give a Massive Apology. Plus, Celestia and Carter should warned Luna, and the Main Six that the Spartans were HOLDING BACK the whole time!!!! Noble Team could have EASILY Kill Luna, Twilight, and other Ponies like previous Dead Covenant Solders ( IF they went Full Lethal) 😈
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P.S. Can Noble Team get their Weapons back? Both the UNSC, and "Borrowed" Covenant Weapons, and some Vehicles?
Plus, I want Luna, Twilight, Applejack, Apple Gem, and Cloud to have HUGE GUILT and should be ashamed of themselves. And give a Big Apology to Noble Team. And maybe Emile still Hates Luna for injuring him and his Teammates, and throw some Curse Words that will make Luna CRY!
Of course, Carter, Jorge, and maybe Kat, Jun, and Six tell him to stop it, and not make the situation worse. Even though they DON'T like Luna for what she did, and have a Big Distrust to the Ponies. They shouldn't make it worse.
But, maybe one of them should warned that if Master Chief ( John 117) was here. Or even the UNSC themselves and maybe ONI. The Ponies will LOSE a very Short War HARD, by Humanity's Superior Might and the Badass Spartans!!!!!!!!!
The Ponies should be GRATEFUL Noble Team were being Non Lethal, or NOT be in the UNSC's, ONI's, and the entirely of Humanity's Bad Side. Unlike the Nasty and Evil Covenant of course. 😒
Luna why are you so fucking stupid and why can't twilight just use her magic and get inside and slam some sense into your thick skull and why did she even call for you? Why not sunbutt? I don't know because I haven't been told and yet I got a feeling anyone would been a better pick
Edit: still reading
If a spartan can live reentry and still fight the Covenant then they don't need anything, they all are wearing good armor, the ones with shields