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Just some leftover detritus of a fandom that long ago reached its peak and burned out. Still, better late than never.

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Thank you very much! I hope it doesn't disappoint.


It's decent, but I am wondering if the M rating feels somewhat needless.

Yeah, I've been wondering about that myself for a while now. The plan was to feature more adult material a bit later down the road, but this long-form tale was never meant to be overly sexual or obscene, in keeping somewhat with the tone of the show and the context of blossoming romance. I'm thinking I might just alter the adult scenes to be more teen friendly and change the rating, but I haven't decided yet.

One way or another, thanks so much for the input!


If you're keeping the M rating, might as well get some mileage out of it in at least one chapter.


Not saying you need to go full-on smut, but make the growing passion between the two characters visble and apparent.

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I... am sensing RariJack shipping and a date in the future.

Good story. I hope you keep it up. Made me laugh and cry happy tears.

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I do hope to continue this story as well.

This physically hurts to read, knowing what I know. Amazing writing, by the way ❤

Thank you very much! Sorry for the pain...but hopefully it's worth it by the end.

Your story is amazing! I can’t wait to see where this goes! This chapter was just...omg wow!

Thank you so, so much! All of these comments make every second of this undertaking worthwhile, and push me to keep going. I'm relatively close to finishing Chapter 9, and I hope it lives up to expectations.

Again, thank you!

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Wow, second time now that I've posted Author's Notes as a comment and then deleted them. You can really tell that I went to college...

OMG I am obsessed with your story. Every time a new chapter is posted, I go back and read it all from the beginning 😳. I can’t wait to see where you take this!

Thanks so much! I'm really glad people have been enjoying it. For what it's worth, writing the next chapter is actually progressing rather smoothly, so there shouldn't be too many days left before another update.

Out of curiosity, what about the story have you been enjoying so far? Any suggestions, questions, concerns or criticisms? I'm always up for improving whatever I can.

For me, I enjoy how you told the story from where the feelings of friendship are just beginning to change and they have yet to put a name to it. You get the feelings and thoughts of everyone in a way that is unique to their character, even the antagonist (trying to avoid spoilers). You write really well, and I am able to feel what the characters are feeling. Awesome job!

Well, thank you very much!
Two of my primary goals with any story is to make sure that the characters are accurately portrayed, and that the emotions and sentiments therein can be shared by the audience. It's good to know that I appear to be achieving those goals.

I shall continue to do my best, and I hope it's worth the wait.

Gah! You had me on the edge of my seat with this chapter. I love the power struggle Trixie had towards the end. I am really enjoying this story, and I can't wait to see where it goes. :)

Thanks a lot!
It's my first time in a while writing an action sequence. Never too sure how those will flow until after everything is finished, let alone how they'll be received.

The next chapter is taking a bit longer than anticipated (as usual), but I hope it's worth the wait.

Is the thing in between the Friendship and the (Love) an uppercase i, a lowercase l, or the Roman Numeral for one?

Roman numeral for one, just in case by some unimaginable chance I actually follow through with the other stories planned for this series.

This story is amazing. As I read, I can practically see it playing out as if it were a canon movie. I feel you have captured the characters marvellously! Sooooooo looking forward to the rest of this story 😁😁😁

I look forward to these nowadays. So incredibly well written and fleshed out. Another great chapter!

Thank you very much!
I won't lie—I despise this chapter for how much time it took (tons of rewrites, mental blocks, and just not getting things to sound or flow correctly). But while I hate not being able to consistently churn out content, it makes it all worthwhile to know that there are people who still enjoy this story.

Thank you so much for your patience. I hope it continues to be worth the wait.

Amazing. Your description of feelings and inner conflict is great.
And Rarity’s apologie scene :rainbowlaugh: Made me laugh and facepalm by how ridiculous it is but at the same time, it’s realist because it is so Rarity. Good job.

Your writing continues to amaze and astound me. The internal conflict, and Rarity’s apology was gold. At this point I’m beginning to think you actually wrote for Hasbro😜
Extremely well done, and if the constant rewrites result in this level of storytelling, every chapter is worth the wait. I will definitely be hanging around until the end!

I really am enjoying your story! Looking forward to reading more. Keep up the great work!! :twilightsmile:

Nice to see another entry! Was getting concerned there, what with not seeing any activity for a spell. I suppose that's expected with such delightfully woven stories. I can sense the effort and consideration that goes into every sentence. Anyway, glad to see that the story goes on.

Thank you so, so much!
Sadly, between the daily grinds of reality and not finding the proper wording for even days on end, I'm just not able to reach the same level of output that I'd like to anymore. I certainly don't blame anyone for jumping ship after this long, but know that I truly do appreciate sticking around to see where this goes.
The conclusion to Chapter 16 is almost ready, and we're roughly at the halfway point of this story. Hopefully, it all turns out okay, but thanks again to everyone for the patience and continued feedback, regardless!

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