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Flotsam


Just some leftover detritus of a fandom that long ago reached its peak and burned out. Still, better late than never.

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  • 57 weeks
    About the Author / Sweeping Edits Pt.2

    With Chapter 13 of [EG:BFF I] now out, thus completing Act 2, it's once again time for another round of sweeping edits to help tighten/clean up the story so far, and to chronicle my current self's thinking so as to explain to my future self where their decisions in life may have went terribly, terribly wrong. I'll be going through both Acts this time, with Act 1 being skimmed for small errors and Act 2 undergoing tweaks, expansions and rewrites where appropriate.

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  • 70 weeks
    EG:BFF I - One Thousand(ish) Views - Whoo!

    It is a sad truth that, no matter how much MLP may preach lessons that can make us better people, reality is not quite as positive an experience.

    In reality, I am the antithesis of MLP.
    I am a bitter, cynical misanthropist who gave up on so much of what they once believed in. Passions, hopes, aspirations—all of the things that made me an aspiring artist—they all withered away long ago.

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  • 74 weeks
    Revisions and Reminiscence - Chapters 6, 7, and 8

    Before my future self complains, I could make many viable excuses for why this took a while to complete. I could talk about how busy life's gotten, especially during this pandemic, or how I've been noodling with other important projects that hopefully bear fruit later on. But here's the real excuse for why this took so long:

    Screw you, I'll get to it when I get to it.

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  • 77 weeks
    Revisions and Reminiscence - Chapters 4 and 5

    Almost 15,000 words in before the main characters actually speak to each other in the present. I'd call this story a slow boil, but you could probably heat up noodles with a damn flashlight faster than conflicts do with my own writing!

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  • 79 weeks
    Revisions and Reminiscence - Chapter 3

    If I didn't know any better, I'd hazard that Chapter 3 of EG:BFF was written as a rebuke to how Chapter 2 was composed, as if to say "Look, fool, here's how you do flashbacks properly: you make the time periods distinct, and you make sure to clearly identify which period is taking place at the current moment!"
    Just a shame that my past self is too busy scarfing down candy to pay attention...

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Aug
17th
2020

About the Author / Sweeping Edits Pt.2 · 6:07am Aug 17th, 2020

With Chapter 13 of [EG:BFF I] now out, thus completing Act 2, it's once again time for another round of sweeping edits to help tighten/clean up the story so far, and to chronicle my current self's thinking so as to explain to my future self where their decisions in life may have went terribly, terribly wrong. I'll be going through both Acts this time, with Act 1 being skimmed for small errors and Act 2 undergoing tweaks, expansions and rewrites where appropriate.

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I just thought I'd introduce yourself. Darth Wrex, Sith Lord. What do I call you, my friend?

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Hey, how's it going? How can I help you?

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I cannot begin to thank you enough for such an insightful and detailed critique! It is very much appreciated!

Not a problem at all! Just remember to take both sides of critique (positive and negative) to heart. Recognizing and capitalizing on one's strengths is just as valid a means for growth.

I'd started this week doing a major/minor overhaul of the story, with a focus on the very points you've mentioned. I look back on my earlier chapters and, well...:facehoof: Much like Twilight herself, I don't think I'll ever be completely satisfied. :twilightsmile:

I noticed you were working on that update. Very exciting! Perhaps I'll hold off on reading the whole thing until afterward, so I can approach it all as fresh as possible. And I'd be happy to further critique as needed. Also, nothing wrong with being like Twilight - her perseverance is always admirable.

If you can give me until I get all the chapters edited/updated, I'll be happy to do so. I'm about half-way finished, so it shouldn't take much longer. And it was, indeed, a pleasure speaking with you, and I look forwards to doing so again!

Take all the time you need. I look forward to your impressions, and speaking further on our writings as well!

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I cannot begin to thank you enough for such an insightful and detailed critique! It is very much appreciated!

As far as constructive criticism goes, I'd say the only real issues I've noticed at the moment are ones relating to sentence structure. A missing comma, the lack of certain contractions, reiterating words or sentiments that could be better summarized with a pronoun or a slight change in wording. Minor stuff like that, which again I'm sure has gotten better with experience.

I'd started this week doing a major/minor overhaul of the story, with a focus on the very points you've mentioned. I look back on my earlier chapters and, well...:facehoof: Much like Twilight herself, I don't think I'll ever be completely satisfied. :twilightsmile:

I'd be happy to comment more once I've read up to the current chapter, as well as elaborate on anything I've said further, if you wish.

Should you wish to do so, I would be quite pleased.

Incidentally, from one aspiring writer to another, I'd also appreciate opinions/comments on my story (as well as possible ideas). One way or another, though, thank you for reaching out. It was a pleasure to speak with you.

If you can give me until I get all the chapters edited/updated, I'll be happy to do so. I'm about half-way finished, so it shouldn't take much longer. And it was, indeed, a pleasure speaking with you, and I look forwards to doing so again!

~Masterius

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