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Mr B


I like Fallout Equestria, Changelings. and nerdy stuff.

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Just under a week before Hearth's Warming, a young mother finds a lone changeling child at the mercy of the elements. Will this nymph become her family's salvation? Or its damnation?


A spirital successsor to Raugos' Integration. (Familiarity not required)

All artwork done by Jowyb

Proofreading by The Fan Without a Face

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 64 )

I like this story! You described everything really clearly. Now I want to know what happens next!

That was a great first chapter, I can’t say to see what happens next.

Excellent first chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.

Very good first chapter. Now I’m wondering just how bad things will go when the father finds out.

Great story! Can’t wait to see more

Whoa,I love it!can't wait to see more chapters!

A good start. Shellac may have found a home... if circumstances let him.

which in turn peaked the changeling’s own attention

I think the word you want is piqued.

Your welcome Shellac.”

You're

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Thanks! I'd prefer if any corrections were sent to me via DMs just to keep it clean here, but thanks!

Interesting chapter, seems like copper might warm up to shell, Lance will make and appearance soon im guessing as well. Not sure why but the chapter didn’t appear on bookshelf

Hope we get a copper pov, would be interesting to get his thoughts.

“It’s a bowl of…sweet stuff I guess. Honey covered oats or clusters of nuts, hazelnut chocolates with some kind of coating, dried strawberry flakes, that kinda stuff. Then you fill the rest of the bowl with milk.”

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This is a wonderful story so far. Love Rainings infectious positivity.

This game sounds awesome! :pinkiehappy:
Raining is a madcolt out there! It seems like Lance has some score to settle,but why? Great work!

“I’ll take a mocha with three shots of expresso, a shot of maple syrup, splash of vanilla and hazelnut, whipped cream, chocolate buttons, steam the milk, double blend it, and add a hint of mint.”

That's almost as bad as Moxxie's drink order

Just read all the chapters up to this point, and I've gotta say, I really like this! I'm not usually one to read stuff that's mainly original characters, but pre reform changelings are my weakness. You've managed to actually get a very good balance of making Shell/Thunder mature and sensible while keeping him feeling like a child. That's not easy.

What the heck happened to screw Lance up this bad, or was he just always a monster? Because all this is just so, so far beyond even the most stretched notions of barely okay that it'd be a miracle if he doesn't have a criminal record by the end of this story.

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Oh, you'll find out, there was a brief mention near the start of chapter 4 after the prologue chapter but more in-depth reasons will come up.

Something I wanna point out is that I don't like shoving information into my reader's face. I like seeing the cogs turn in people's heads.

Oh boy,Lance is out for murder now...:pinkiegasp:

“A Changeling.”

Could you please put the image somewhere else in the public? Discord CDNs now only return files with an expiration date set, so if not archived, all images will shortly be inaccessible.

Very curious now... What happened to Raining's father? Dead? Disappeared? I hope there would be a definitive answer...

“I…I…” She found it hard to breathe and her ability to speak collapsed in on itself, unable to bring up the strength to utter another sentence. Her head pounded in her skull and sweat rolled down her temple. Finally her limbs gave in and she fell to the floor with a thud. The world grew dark as the sound of her own desperate breathing and rapid heart rate drowned out her two friends.

... Literally butchered?

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Crud, okay so the best I can do for now is provide links to each public version of the images. I've tried using the website URLs but they register as invalid for some reason when using the image tool, If you know a better way then please, I'm all ears.

For clarification, the only two places I know where the images are public is Derpi and Deviantart

“I wish I had a friend who’d never leave my side!”

Shellac.

Wish he could be properly adopted.

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Maybe try using this markup: [img]Paste image URL here[/img]

Like this: [img]https://derpicdn.net/img/download/2024/1/3/3274132.png[/img]
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Okay that works! But only for the first three pics, I'll contact the artist and see if we can sort this out but thanks a ton for the workaround! +Rep :rainbowdetermined2:

Really enjoying this story so far!

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Okay, every chapter that has an illustration is now present within the chapters. Enjoy everyone!

Things are really starting to come to a head here, hopefully Lance's bs willl be dealt with soon.

Lance has a truly horrible mindset, it seems. Worst part is he'll probably blame Shellock being a changeling for it when he was just as bad beforehand. Very much hoping to see him get brought down a peg.

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Damn that's some impressive artwork. Who did that?

Happy belated birthday! The chapter was nice. It's good to see where Raining gets some of his personality from. And now we know what drives Lance,but he's taking it too far.

Oh boy...I hope Shellac will be ok. :pinkiesad2:

Hope Gleaming will be alright...

Why am I getting "Lance acts like a giant douche because he's actually a closeted homosexual" vibes?

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It's more a combination of stuff, having to learn around a pack of griffon exchange students probably didn't help.
(I'll admit you have to look between the lines to find it but Griffons have a "If you're a pushover, you're gonna get pushed over" mentality.)

I hope Gleaming will be ok . And Shellac and Raining can find somewhere safe to hide

Seriously wondering what Lance's problem is. It can't be Shellock in particular because he was like this well before he came into picture. Either way, I do hope he is made to stop this behavior one way or another.

“Well, tomorrow we’ll probably put this little fella through questioning and after an investigation of the family. He’ll most likely be sent to Canterlot Dungeons with the rest of the bugs.”

Its obvious that Shellock's a kid and they still want to lock him in a dungeon? Do they just have the exact same procedure for every changeling? What even is the plan here? Just lock them all up forever for existing? Do they get fed or are they made to starve essentially?

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I believe those questions were answered by Copper back in chapter 2, imagine you're the person in charge of handling the situation. You have this race of creatures with no centralised government, that made their first opening act to attack the capital and so until further developments are made and public trust increases you can't let them roam around for public safety reasons.

As bonkers as it is, keeping them where you know they won't cause any harm until an alternative can be found is probably the best decision. But of course "until further development" could mean any length of time, so for all Shellac knows, he could be an old man by the time that happens.

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As for Lance, you'll see...

Bullies are dumb.

Oh my god this little hellspawn Lance, you wrote them to be so hateable, I can't wait to see what happens next!

The officer took a deep breath and his tone dropped. His smile and any semblance of kindness along with it. “Kid? By going in there we stressed out somepony who might’ve just lost their significant other. Unless you bring me hard proof that there's a changeling inside that building, we’re not going back inside, okay? And if you keep pushing this, then we’ll have to report you to your parents.”

'Might've' just lost
Why the uncertainty?..
Is he not dead, just in a coma with very little hope of waking up?

I want to have words with whoever taught lance to be this way. Well done on writing this character to be so unlikeable.

Oof, that confrontation between Copper and Lance was hard to stomach. As satisfying as it would've been to see Copper put Lance in his place there and then, it was probably for the best that he lost. A royal guard assaulting a child would've been a bad look for his whole family, regardless of the initial provocation.

Glad that Shellac and Raining finally got to dish out a bit of comeuppance, though I'm not sure if that's enough to settle things. Lance is a whole twisted bundle of issues that's gonna take a whole village to unravel and set straight, and that's if he even lets them.

I'm also worried about Mirror taking on the responsibility of bringing Lance to jail. Don't know how she's going to convince the guards that Lance is the one who needs to be locked up, and I wouldn't put it past him to wake up on the way and reassert his dominance over her... :rainbowderp:

Seems that Lance is finally beaten, both physically and especially verbally. I'm surprised by how strong he is though. He's got some good genes. Either way, if Shellock is going to the dungeons, then there's no way Lance isn't getting to some juvenile center since Copper is bound to wake up at any time to snitch on him. Either way, that kid needs to be kept away from those two and some therapy.

I wonder how Shellock and co. plan on getting out of this though. I can see either some trick coming up or a private audience with a high ranking individual.

“The truth, Thunder, is that I don’t think the changelings ever intended to kill our father.”

Makes sense. Changelings need ponies for their love. Going all murder hobo is counter-intuitive to their goals.

“Lance saw our dadfather…”

dadfather?

“Her benefits should’ve prevented the need for this! Why is she working so late?”

Maybe its a distraction mechanism? Either that or she's missing out on those benefits.

“Besides, for a pony you do an awful lot of changeling things. Disguising, scheming, foalnapping, assault and now attempted murder. Honestly if he wasn’t dead you might’ve impressed my Overseer.”

Owned. So hard. He really did become what he hated. I love that line.

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Thanks a bunch! Real stoked my story has managed to captivate you so much, just one thing.

Where did you see "dadfather" ? That's an error I need to find and 10k is a lot of words.

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Love the story man!

Infected by his enthusiasm, Mirror got to her hooves also albeit with a grimace. “I’m going to warn you Shellac, Lance saw our dadfather… kill so many changelings that day before he…well let’s just say Lance is no stranger to your skillset. And he’s looking for any excuse to hurt you as much as possible.”

It was in this paragraph.

It has been quite a journey reading this story. I’m glad I started reading it. Good work.

Gleaming sighed as Nut Cracker put the form away and left the room, turning back to them with his content grin. “Well it's nice to see a happy conclusion to this tale. I’ll be taking my leave but don’t forget Thunder, I’ll be watching your career with great interest.”

This is the second time I've seen The Phantom Menace quoted in a story on this site (this specific line to be more specific)

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Still one more chapter to go, but thanks a ton!

What a ride! It's been a while since I've read a fic as good as this one.
So sad it's ending soon, wish for a sequel

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