This is an alternate telling of the episode "Owl's Well That Ends Well". As much as I love MLP: Friendship Is Magic, we all know that the show is far from perfect. There are many things in the show that I think could have been handled better, and this episode is one of them. We all know what happened. Twilight hired Owlowiscious as a "junior assistant", Spike got jealous, there was a fake mouse covered in ketchup, and the rest is history.
This fanfic is my attempt to write a better version of this episode. For example, I wanted to make Spike much more sympathetic so he doesn't come across as the villain of the episode. I also wanted to emphasize Twilight's mistakes, and for her to actually try to make up for them, because I personally thought the conflict in this episode was just as much her fault as it was Spike's.
However, I mean no disrespect to the people responsible for the show, nor do I claim ownership of My Little Pony. This fanfic is purely for fun, and is simply my opinion.
Hello lazy description that should be in the author's notes. I was going to read it, but now I don't feel the need to.
9807635
Well, sorry. It's my first fanfic, I'm a little new at this.
9807701
I've heard that before. Plenty of new writers though write a better description. Even if it's the first thing they've ever writen.
9807810
Then what would you suggest?
9807895
Just something to say that it's an alternate take on the episode, and just enough info on what changes to get people interested.
9807900
Except I didn't really spoil anything in my description. I just stated what happened in the ACTUAL episode, and I was doing a different version.
I cant help but notice this seems to be almost word for word my rewrite of the episode in spots? Is that coincidence?
Don’t forget that whole dragon thing, because I think that part it kinda weight of time and money.
9808056
I did read your story, and I did take a little bit of inspiration from it, as well as a few others that I read, but I wasn't trying to copy you or anyone else, and I apologize if you think I did.
This was very good, especially for a first fic. There are many authors here who have written much more, but don't have nearly the grammar skills you do. The changes were good, and flowed with the story. Honestly, the episode would've made more sense if it were more along these lines. I don't think the writers (or Faust) gave Spike much credit at the time.
You plan to do an alternate to Ponyville Confidential yes?
9809483
Yes, I do. I was inspired by the fanfic Ponyville Runaways. I think the idea of the CMC running away from home after the Gabby Gums fiasco is a great idea, but I plan to have things go a little differently.
9809391 It's fine, but it's a little bit jarring to have you copy stuff almost word for word from me.
9809524
Really, how?
I love these alternate stories that your doing. They actually show much more depth and emotion then the actual episodes. Do you plan on doing a alternate version of Newbie Dash?
9809559
You never know...
9809526
Well, I may do a little rewrite later, and when I do, I'll try to fix that.
9809569
Mysterious Mare-do-well would also be a good one to do as well.
9809576
I may do some original stories to.
There are never enough spike stories like this
9811113
I posted an idea for an alternate ending to this episode, want the link?
10388089
Sure. I'd like to see it.
10388739
Here you go: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/198187/the-accusation-fic-collection/thread/439742/question-15
In fact, one person was so interested in it that he gave me some ideas on how the story should play out with it featuring also S.A. & the princesses.
10388796
Thank you.
10395959
If you feel like up to writing it out yourself I'd say go ahead. After all you did do a SUPERB job with this story here.
10396338
Thanks a lot.
10402306
You're very welcome, give it a toss if you feel up to it.
Now this was an alternate take I wouldn't have minded seeing as the episode itself. It keeps the core elements of it, as in Spike's worries about Owlowiscious overshadowing him, and Twilight's obliviousness to how he feels, but takes away things like the cringey frame job and the rather annoying 'Who/Hoo' joke. I think you did a good job with this. =)
10599853
Thank you so much. I wanted to keep the "Who/Hoo" joke to an extent, but this time, rather than have Spike keep thinking that Owlowiscious was saying "Who?" instead of "Hoo...", I wanted him to realize his mistake, and grow increasingly annoyed when he keeps making it. I always wanted to emphasize Twilight's guilt in this, because she was as much to blame as Spike. I'm glad you liked it.
Much better than original story. Considering twilight never learned how to pay attention to other people's feelings even when everyone else can see what plain to see.
10838443
Thanks a lot. I'm glad you liked it.
I loved this AU of Owl's Well That Ends Well! Now this is what should've happened than what we got in the TV series!
10975347
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
10975347
Agree.
I will say that I prefer the ending in this compared to the original episode. However, I think that you should have kept in Spike running away, given that is a real thing a lot of kids do, making it more relatable to the intended audience (as long as it was made clear that he overeacted and should not have done that).
As for the writing quality, an issue throughout is that it is far too explicit to be a TV episode. The explicit narration is often annoying as well. A lot of the narration should have been implicit through dialogue or action. Additionally, I'm not sure how a lot of the characters' thoughts could be portrayed for episode format.
Honestly, this IS a lot better than the actual episode! Kudos to you for fixing it!
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You're welcome! Sorry it took so long to respond.
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No problem.