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An alternate version of "Ponyville Confidential", but unlike my first two stories, this one actually begins towards the end of the episode, and will also be published in four parts. Inspired by Splash Surfer 216's "Ponyville Runaways", this is a concept that I think would've made a great two-part (or even three-part) story arc for the series. The Cutie Mark Crusaders, feeling no longer welcome in Ponyville after being exposed as Gabby Gums, decide that the only thing left for them is to run away from home. How will their friends, and family react when they realize what's happened? And what will happen with Diamond Tiara?

I mean no disrespect to the people responsible for the show, nor do I claim ownership of My Little Pony. I also DO NOT claim credit for Splash Surfer 216's work. I just loved his idea, and wanted to do my own version. This fanfic is purely for fun, and is simply my opinion.

Note from author: Some of you may remember my botched first attempt at this story, and again, I apologize for that, especially to Splash Surfer 216. I honestly didn't mean for that to happen. The truth is, I jumped the gun when I published it the first time, and didn't realize how much I'd messed up until after I did so. I sincerely hope that this time will be different.

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Think the summary should be the synopsis and the other stuff should be int he author’s note

So far so good, keep it up.

You know I've been sensing lion king vibes in this story, don't you think?

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Well, the protagonist gets blamed for something and runs away in guilt. The main antagonist takes over a business after its good predecessor and makes things worse. Not to mention dislikes it predecessor mentioned in its presents. Some allies come to look for the main character and convince them to come home. Everyone learns the truth of the villain's motives and gets taken out and a new successor take over the business.

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Glad you caught that. That's exactly what I was thinking of with that line of dialogue for Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo.

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How are you doing on part 2

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I've got some parts written. What did you think of the part with Featherweight? I plan to have him play a major role in this.

Hope everyone finds them.

This is good so far. Can't wait for part two.

When will part 2 be finished?

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Not sure yet. I do have some parts written though. Stay tuned.

Ooooooh man, Diamond Tiara's gonna be in so much trouble that I think she's gonna get a huge spanking and also get grounded for a very long time.

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Oh, don't worry. This is pre-"Crusaders Of The Lost Ark" Diamond Tiara. She's gonna get hers.

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Are you almost finished? what part are you at?

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Are not sure yet when the second part will be ready. I have a few parts written, but I still have some ways to go. I originally planned to do this story in 2 parts, but I'm starting to think it might take 3 parts, but we'll see. Stay tuned.

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Getting there. I want to make sure I do the story write. And I think it'll be in three parts instead of two.

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I hope Featherweight tells Twilight and the others the truth, after hearing their guilt.

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Oh, I got something good planned for him. I wanted to bring his involvement to the forefront because he was the one who took all the pictures, including the ones of the CMC, which allowed Diamond Tiara to blackmail them, and now he's starting to feel bad.

The part when The Cutie Mark Crussaders leave Ponyville, the theme of Peter Pan, The Second Star to the Right, plays

is also a reference of Mexican-Comedy tv Series, El Chavo del 8, with this scene, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yUpG-dlG8UI

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That's an interesting take on that scene. Or how about the piano melody from the TV series, "The Incredible Hulk"?

Your writing is most excellent.

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Thanks. I hope you're liking the story.

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Would Featherweight tell Twilight he took the picture of Princess Celestia eating cake?

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You'll see. For all we know, Celestia knew what he was doing, and let him do it!

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Are you almost done yet with part 2 yet?

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Almost. I just have 2 and a half sections left to write I think. I haven't been feeling that good these last few days, and I've been tired, so I lost writing time. But I hope to have part two up by the end of the month.

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Are you gonna tell me what you wrote so far or no spoilers.

Good story, looking forward to more.

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Not yet, but almost. I still have two sections to write yet. I hope to have it done by the end of the month.

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I hope so too, Do you how long I've been trying to get Dino to finish the Dance of the Hours chapter in the Disney Chronicles Fantasia, and that's when he blocked me twice. It's like three years and six months.

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Believe me, I won't take that long. The last sections of part 2 have just been tougher to work out than I thought. I hope to have part 2 finished by the end of the month.

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Monty you need to fix the apples dialogue.

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What do you "fix their dialogue"? If you mean the way I'm writing certain words they speak, I'm doing that to emphasize their accents.

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I'm doing that on purpose. The Apple Family speaks with Southern Accents, and I'm showing that by writing some of their words that way.

This is really getting good! Keep it up!

Keep things up. I'm still enjoying this.

I pretty sure you don't do any. But, I do have one small request for this story: See that our little pink "precious princess" gets what's coming to her.

Other than that, so far so good. Can't wait till part 3.

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Oh, Diamond Tiara will get hers. Just wait.

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I'll be sure to have extra butter-flavored popcorn ready.

Oh boy. I think it's safe to say that Diamond Tiara is royally FUCKED :twilightangry2:

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