Five 'heros' from the land of Haneton (pronounced Han-A-Ton, the locals are adamant about this) are rather unceremoniously dumped onto different parts of the world called Equis. None of them are all too happy about this. Their response? Much calmer than you would expect, this kind of thing happens a lot to them. Now, they are going to do all they can to meet up. Probably. Some of them can barley stand each other.
This story is my very first! I literally only made this account today! You wouldn't believe how long I've been lurking here....
Anyway! This story crosses the world of MLP with the characters from the latest game of D&D me and my freinds played (with permission, of course). Almost entirely homebrew as well! The characters are all pretty bad people by nature apart from, like, two (you'll see which when the story begins).
Any feedback is appreciated and I hope you enjoy!
I like this story so far, you're actually really good at writing.
’here’, not ‘hear’. ‘hear’ is for when you perceive a sound, ‘here’ is where you are, do you here me?
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incase it is not fully clear to anyone reading, the last here was a joking purposeful misspelling.
Don't you mean heroes?
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Thank you for pointing that out! I don't know why I get those two confused when I'm typing. It really annoys me sometimes.
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Thank You!
Critical Role
Season One https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL7atuZxmT954bCkC062rKwXTvJtcqFB8i
Season Two https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL7atuZxmT955Cw-fFS-_3IQvaCpQgDzWA
Remember: ‘here’ for places, and ‘hear’ for sounds... you’ll get there eventually!
Great story! Hope you wouldn’t mind this being added to a group
should help with getting recognition
I'll be the first to say, you are starting off frighteningly strong here. Anyone that starts this when you have 20+ chapters won't want to set it down if you keep it up like this. Just make sure you use [ hr ] instead of those lines of -, alright?
You... you used the wrong 'to' here.
Wow this is a great start with a good introduction of all the players I hope you continue this past the five current chapters
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Also questions is spelled wrong in the quote which means it is spelled wrong in that part of the story
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So it is! Didn't even notice.
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OI! IT'S BEEN A BLOODY YEAR SINCE YOU UPDATED! WHEN'S THE NEXT CHAPTER!?!?!