Lord of the Balrogs

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A month has passed since Tirek's defeat for Twilight and the Elements of Harmony, but one call changes everything. An invitation made by Lord of the Underworld, king over Tartarus (and last of the Balrogs). Will he be a friend or an enemy of Equestria?

(Displaced without the multiverse stuff, the character does not faithfully represent the LOTR lore, only the MLP chronology will be maintained)

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Dinokid11

Dinokid11 #1 · Sep 30th, 2018 · 3 · · Chapter 1 ·

Great work keep it up

theoldhunter

theoldhunter #2 · Sep 30th, 2018 · 5 · · Chapter 1 ·

It feels a bit choppy to read but other wise you have my interests

Jhonn

Jhonn #3 · Sep 30th, 2018 · 2 · · Chapter 1 ·

Nice :3

MagicLover2128

MagicLover2128 #4 · Sep 30th, 2018 · 3 · · Chapter 2 ·

Man, that voice choice is epic!!!

That’s is the perfect voice for the Balrog.

The1templar

The1templar #5 · Oct 1st, 2018 · 2 · · Chapter 1 ·

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Agreed

The1templar

The1templar #6 · Oct 1st, 2018 · 2 · · Chapter 2 ·

We really don’t need the pictures of the characters. Also this chapter was quite blocky and didn’t really flow well.

The Lurking Creep

The Lurking Creep #7 · Oct 2nd, 2018 · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

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This story needs an editor.

pony-yo

pony-yo #8 · Oct 2nd, 2018 · 2 · · Chapter 1 ·

you need to magnify the image in the word link but all round good job

Mr Good Guy

Mr Good Guy #9 · Oct 9th, 2018 · 5 · · Chapter 1 ·

This is an interesting story, but the grammar and wording needs some serious work, you should get a proofreader, at least....

The A I

The A I #10 · Nov 2nd, 2018 · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

oooh, looks interesting.

Nuhri1995

Nuhri1995 #11 · Nov 10th, 2018 · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·

The idea is awesome, but what other people have commented about this story is still true - the links on the characters names are all pointless as anyone even considering themselves half-bronies know what the main characters look like, and not only the grammar, but the structuring of sentences and misuse of paragraphs are all too much for me.

If this is your first/among your first stories and English isn't your first language, then it's forgivable, though it's still too hard on my eyes and mind. Hard pass from me.

Chris Russell