Where am I and what happened
Rainbow Dash P.O.V.
“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH” I screamed as I free-fall from the sky when I prayed to Celestia I had my wings which they were there, but my entire body changed too like I had longer/rougher fur, two medium sized orbs on my chest ans a bushy tail with my trade mark rainbow color of course. Also I had clothes on which thank Celestia I did. By the way I was only worrying because Twi told me in the human world being nude was looked down on I was wearing a blue jacket with a white under top that had my cutie mark on it and I was also wearing a skirt with magenta and white strips. So after I recouped myself started to flap my wings so I wouldn’t go splat on the ground and then I lost my s*** because I realized that Discord was wreck havoc on Equestria "Oh sweet Celestia, Discord really going to get it when I get back but how am I it's not like he's going to pop up again and say it was some kind of sick joke" I panicked until I heard an explosion which replaced my panic attack with curiosity so I flew over there to see something amazing I saw two hedgehogs, an echidna, a fox, and a badger fighting a giant army of weird bees and ladybugs and this octopus thing that looked like someone was in it controlling everything. So me being the brave and awesome person I am slammed into the machine piercing through it.
"What the I could've sworn the hedgehog was over there" He said as he looked over towards the blue hedgehog "Yeah he's still over there smash up my robots who-."
"That would be me Egghead" I said as I flew upside down In front of the glass
"You... Uh who are you?" He asked
"Rainbow Dash fastest flier in Equestria" I said proudly
"Wait did you say fastest" He asked he said as if the world was about to end
"Yeah and probably most agile here's proof I can move at Mach 3" I said as the guy groaned and banged his head on his control board
"Dammit it's the female version of Sonic except she's a wolf and she can fly" He moaned
"Who's this Sonic guy you're whining about he sounds fast" I asked
"He can also run at mach 3 and he's been a thorn in my side for years and I don't need another it's time for you to die" He said as he sent a barrage of missiles and lasers at me.
"Whoa" I said as I started to avoid every missile and laser that came my way "No wonder you have been able to take out Sonic for years. You have s***ty aim" I said and after the people behind me destroyed every scrap of metal after them the finally realized someone was already fighting Eggman
"Whoa, she's fast I should race her sometime yeah that would be fun" The blue hedgehog said
"Why even try there's no way she's faster than my Sonikku" The pink hedgehog said trust me there's going to be some b***tery from her later on in the story
"This has been fun and all, but time to knock you butt to next year" I said as I flew into the air probably a mile then started to nosedive into Egghead's Octopus then a mach cone started to form then it eventually started to rainbow colored then I Sonic Rainboomed in to his Octopus sending him packing
"I'll be baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaccccccccccccccccccccccccckkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk!" HE screamed as he was knocked away
"That was awesome" The blue hedgehog said as he sped over to me
"Which part was awesome how I dodged everything or my Sonic Rainboom" I boasted
"Uh both! I'm Sonic the hedgehog" He said smiling
"Names Rainbow Dash say I have one question do know where I am?" I asked him
"The town's name is Hedgehog Vile and the reason it's named that is because the town's founder is the crazy badgers ancestor is the founder of this town so when we found out it didn't have a name she named it after the steaming mad pink hedgehog with a hammer with happens to be her best friend so yeah" he explained
"No I mean which world am I in because before I came here this guy named discord sent me to this world so he can wreck havoc on my world with nothing to stop him" I said which still wasn't the case. So after I told him that he immediately started to explain everything about the world I was in, who his friends where, and Told me about his adventures. "You mean to tell me that you turned into a Werehog and pretty much solved an earth sized jigsaw puzzle, destroyed an alien enslavement camp disguised as an Amusement Park, defeated a time monster with your past self, stopped six powerful creatures called Zeti from sucking the life out of the world, Killed a power hungry Jackal who was using a strange ruby that help him manipulate reality with your, and defeated an Ancient snake who wanted to replace everyone with robots!" I yelled like I was the happiest six year old.
"Yeah I did" He said proudly
"That is so awesome" I yelled
Sonic P.O.V.
Dash is the most Awesome person I've ever met I mean she defeated a pony consumed in jealousy of her older sister, Turned a spirit of disharmony into stone who was later reformed, but then went back to evil and sent her here so he can wreck havoc, knocked out at least a hundred bugs who can shift-shape, helped save a cursed kingdom, defeated a power hungry Minotaur, defeated a pony dictator who was later reformed, Stop a Pony of Shadows that was in reality a rejected pony. Man I can't wait to see what adventures we make!
Amy P.O.V.
I don't know what she's doing talking to my Sonic, but I have to dispose of her with out anyone finding out like with Sally getting "killed" by Eggman when it was really me and well Blaze solved herself and I still have to do something about Rouge. Well anyway I need to get her away from Sonic
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...Where's Hamster when you need him..
i'm scared
9221108
idk. I haven't seen him around lately.
I think you might want to get a grammar checker. Those things are helpful.
Try Grammarly.
SonSal all the way!
just looking at the front, i can see this is going to be a... unique read. i try not to hate on stories as people just point out my own stories, but i do make some suggestions. 1. FIX YOUR SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION. I'm writing this on my xbox, but the punctuation is still better. ill make more suggestions when i actually read the story
2. keep the chapter names short and simple. 3. work on your pacing. Also, some of your depictions of characters are off.
i would suggest reading "WHO AM I?" its another story on fimfiction that i think could give you some great examples
...Sigh. This. This right here. This is why. This is why I write what I write. Everything that I despise. This hemorrhoid on the face of fanfiction and everything like it is what I write in defiance of.
I honestly don't understand why people have to shoot down the dreams of a budding, fledgling Hemingway.
9221108
Probably off being a dick to someone else.
9221313
You're lying through your teeth.
9221317
Sure, he can be blunt with his comments but sometimes he can be accurate.
9221305
if done correctly, it could be great.
9221108
dont unleash that asshole on this kid
9221279
i really dont care about sonic pairings. but rainbow seems a great match
9221354
I know. I'm doing it. But a good 90% of it is like this. Why Sonic crossovers have the reputation they do.
9221376 .... ill concede the point. but constructive criticism is better than hating. your just adding to the bad reputation of them.
9221363
I'm sorry.
9221385
for what? its just my opinion.
9221363
Forced pairings is never good, they would be better as competitive friends than forced lovers.
9221413
i agree that forced pairing arent good. and i totally see them as competitors. but under the right circumstances, they could be great.
9221421
Not really, there have been a number of girls Sonic could of married, but he prefers running, never to stay in one place, always going wherever his feet takes him, to be free. He wouldn't like marriage as it would force him to stay in one place.
Oh this is gonna be one of THOSE fics...
Past or present tense. Pick one and stick with it.
How does she know what God is? Also God should be capitalized.
Wut.
This line needs rewritten entirely. You shouldn’t be putting slash marks in a description like that, also this is still the first sentence. You definitely need a period or 3.
First, why is she concerned about clothes at all? She didn’t need them as a pony, and since she has no idea where she is, why does she care? Second, Sally is often nude, so this doesn’t make sense at all. Third, God should be capital.
If you’re going to sensor the word, don’t use it at all. Also, you really should show how she knows that Discord is wreaking havoc.
You sure do have a thing for run on sentences. Here I’ll help you with the dialog.
“Oh sweet Celestia! Discord is really going to get it when I get back! Wait, how am I going to get back?! it's not like he's going to pop up out of nowhere and say this was all some sick joke!” Not the best it could be, but it’s certainly a start to help you out.
I couldn’t get any further. You should consider rereading what you wrote to see if the story flows as well when written as it does in your head. I assume it doesn’t, but it’s nothing a bit of rewriting and an editor won’t fix.
9221425
...i concede the point. never thought of that.
9221445
When it comes to pairing, you have to check both characters, their personality, and their lives. In a AU sort of way, it would work, but that's as far as you would go.
9221313
Usually because the story deserves it. The author may not be doing it on purpose. But the story doesn't show it.
Grammer and punctuation are usually the best bets they need to stop, and do their homework again before doing more.
9221363
Ah, so you never read the comics?
9221465
the sonic comics? i have like 4 of them. ive never read the pony comics
Sonic the hedgehog once upon a time, came in my ass and delivered the goods. There, Rainbow Hedgehog painted my butthole with her essence, because she was delicious semen. Then I became lord farquaad and EEEEEEEEEEEEREEEEEEEEEE
There Pinkie Pie came outside and turnt down for hwat because I was a naughty boy soy.
"You all know that I know that you know that we all know that I know that YOUR A FUCKING WHORE".
Then Rainbow Slut fuked THAT HOE SONIC.
The End
See I did it too, happy now.
i.imgur.com/tvWyiUU.jpg
9221313
I understood that reference. Bravo.
Why are all these shitty sonic crossovers showing up?
Welp.
9221108
Mourning an embarrassing loss to the browns.
9221317
>a sonic fan
' Nuff said.
Now the fic here...yikes. But this is the sonic fandom, so everyone here shouldn't be surprised.
Ugh, oh boy...
Why is there shitty stories?