A surely weak and helpless stallion is living on the edge of the Everfree. Twilight and co. attempt to rescue him and herd him under the safety of mares. Said stallion happens to like the sound of herding, but he'll not say it outright. (RGRE)
This is just getting better and better, especially how they are so blinded by him, that they don't seem to acknowledge that he have other things to do Good chapter keep them coming!
8903513 Have you seen how she acts? Girls a total sub if I've ever seen one. All the dudes here are practically whipped and not very masculine so put our boy here with the little white princess of fashion who usually get it on the reg then has to work for it and she's gonna have a waterfall flowing down her tail.
...and none of them would tell Rarity what they were upto if they knew what was good for them.
I lost it completely. I'd fear more Pinkie finding out, to be honest. ... Who am I kidding, she already knows and has Plans. Yest, the capitalization was on purpose
8903513 I mean..if Fluttershy's this kinky, Dash this hungry, and Twilight this crazed to get some new dick, imagine what Rarity might be like. Just super picky because she's tried finding the best of the best. Now there's a new stallion she hasn't tried before. Put the two together and things are going to get hairy. Especially with how Rarity acts when she wants something really really badly. Either just whines for it, or just heavily digs in to get it.
There's also the fact that in this, sexier?, version of Equestria, Pinkie and Applejack are probably already taken care of, Pinkie with party orgies, and Applejack because of Incest and stuff. I think that they mentioned that in earlier chapters, but I'm not too sure. So in that way, they only have to really worry about one other pony finding out about him.
HAH, not tell Rarity, do you really think she’s not going to find out? Then there is AJ, who’s farm is close to the Everfree and I’m surprised she didn’t find him first. Finally... how the heck has Pinkie Pie not found out about him with that weird Pinkie Sense of hers? Either way, this is going to be interesting.
8903749 pinkie sense doesnt include ponies she hasnt met or arent in ponyvile. right? also AJ might just be too busy to investigate. Would be ironic if rartiy was the only reasonable one of them.
I really hope this ends with all of them getting completed rejected. I mean, this is definitely a fun story, and the sex elements are good too, but really, after how pushy and stupid they've been I really don't actually want them to succeed here.
I'm still more surprised that they didn't notice his way of talking, he's still mentioning people but they aren't paying attention somehow. Twilight has already heard him mentioning not being a pony in the first chapter and here he is still talking human terms, I'm surprised not even Fluttershy is catching this with her knowledge of different species.
"You're really not getting it, are you? My cock isn't the only thing that exists in my life, and it would be nice if you girls could realise that at some point. Now clear off before I get rid of you."
I wish I had to tell girls that... Forever alone I am, Forever alone I will be.
Ugh. Not sure who told you this was sexy, but porn addicted teens don't count. The word 'cock' is not sexy to me; never has been, never will be. This had promise with the gender role reversal parts but instead of delving into the social aspects of that kind of culture shock, you just went straight for the clop (and not that well written either). Sorry, but I can't continue reading this.
Can he just stick to Rainbow Dash and just constantly bang her and smack around Twilight and Fluttershy who are basically harrassing and trying to rape him?
Thought I read this before,lack of Zecora tipped me off and I saw you wrote it. Figured I'd try it on that alone honestly.
This is pretty amusing and the comments you're getting are also pretty funny so I'll consider this a double scoop! Thanks and I look forward to the rest of the shenanigans should you choose to keep workin on it.
8939495 I didn't know that you were the sole arbiter in whether or not something is or is not sexy. After all, sexiness is subjective, and the only objective thing about it is that it is subjective. Well, perhaps there's a second objective aspect to sexiness: that there are people who think they can objectively say what is and is not sexy and act like they are the arbiter of truth in the matter in spite of how it is subjective. And as for having the promise of exploring something aside from clop, the description literally says:
Turns out this stallion isn't so weak. He's also never heard of the concept of herding before now, and he likes what he hears...
Not that he'll tell them that straight away, but he's definitely not running. He'd have to be certifiably insane to turn down that much pussy, after all, right?
If you looked at that and thought that it would be anything other than porn, if you thought it would be an insightful social commentary on gender structures and the shock of being totally at odds with one, then you clearly didn't read the description. You claim this had promise, but that promise was not what it billed itself as. If you want something that examines the RGRE world with this lens that you seek, then write it. After all, you wrote The Unity Pact and all of its sequels and side stories, so I'm certain that you have the talent to create the story you were looking for.
Ugh. Not sure who told you this was(1) sexy, but porn (2)addicted teens don't count. The word 'cock' (3)is not sexy to me; never has been, never will be. This had promise with the gender role reversal parts but instead of (4)delving into the social aspects of that kind of culture shock, you just went straight for the (5)clop (and not that well written either). Sorry, but I can't (6)continue reading this.
(1) Opinions are personal, so while I assume that you might feel that your opinion is worth something, your attitude certainly isn't.
(2) Most teenagers are the ones that read pornographic literature and adult comics because that is something they enjoy, and while I agree that the "clop" might not be to your taste, I don't believe anyone asked for your opinion on that matter.
(3) How many pornographic videos have you seen? Because in most of them, the word cock is used. I am not trying to state that because porn videos use the word "cock" then it suddenly becomes valid, it is mainly used because it makes it quite obvious that are either adults or have the maturity of one tend to be the ones that consume that type of video. Would you feel better if the author used the word penis or phallus instead? Because neither of those two sound sexy to me either.
(4) As a man, I would find it completely shocking that all of the value I have for society has been eradicated because I am only there to be treated and dehumanized since the only value I have now is to get other women pregnant and nothing else. I would be considered too "delicate" or "sensitive" to hold a job because I am a man. If such a drastic change of culture doesn't shock someone, is either because they're in a coma/vegetable state or they're dead.
(5) Most of the people who "consume" M rated stories here, outside certain genres, are mainly interested in the sex/clop scenes that are part of the story. And it is more than obvious that this story has sex as a part of the story itself because of the tags the story has to begin with. For someone who has written 949,122 words and counting, how was it that you didn't see the sex tag on this story?
so why is rarity always the kinky one?
This is just getting better and better, especially how they are so blinded by him, that they don't seem to acknowledge that he have other things to do
Good chapter keep them coming!
Why do I think that Pinkie will know and blab away to Rarity. Plus she may not like his attitude.
*slowly bangs head against wall*
The mares in this world are really one track minded . Don't know what no means.
8903522
*punches trees*
8903522
"Sounds" like good idea...
*bang* *bang* *bang* *bang*
8903513
Have you seen how she acts? Girls a total sub if I've ever seen one. All the dudes here are practically whipped and not very masculine so put our boy here with the little white princess of fashion who usually get it on the reg then has to work for it and she's gonna have a waterfall flowing down her tail.
8903569
huh the more you know
I lost it completely. I'd fear more Pinkie finding out, to be honest.
...
Who am I kidding, she already knows and has Plans. Yest, the capitalization was on purpose
8903513
I mean..if Fluttershy's this kinky, Dash this hungry, and Twilight this crazed to get some new dick, imagine what Rarity might be like. Just super picky because she's tried finding the best of the best. Now there's a new stallion she hasn't tried before. Put the two together and things are going to get hairy. Especially with how Rarity acts when she wants something really really badly. Either just whines for it, or just heavily digs in to get it.
There's also the fact that in this, sexier?, version of Equestria, Pinkie and Applejack are probably already taken care of, Pinkie with party orgies, and Applejack because of Incest and stuff. I think that they mentioned that in earlier chapters, but I'm not too sure. So in that way, they only have to really worry about one other pony finding out about him.
8903610
I guess the only way to find out is too wait for the next chapter
Another great chapter.
Loved it
The Monk
ha snicker
calling it now-
rarity shows up next chapter for unrelated reasons.
and jason knows her.
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I wholeheartedly agree.
HAH, not tell Rarity, do you really think she’s not going to find out? Then there is AJ, who’s farm is close to the Everfree and I’m surprised she didn’t find him first. Finally... how the heck has Pinkie Pie not found out about him with that weird Pinkie Sense of hers? Either way, this is going to be interesting.
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pinkie sense doesnt include ponies she hasnt met or arent in ponyvile. right? also AJ might just be too busy to investigate.
Would be ironic if rartiy was the only reasonable one of them.
Oh? So rarity is going to try to hoard him to herself? Interesting.
This just keeps getting better I can't to see where this goes next.
Oh for the love of Luna.....Don't bring in Rares.
I have a feeling that Pinkie Pie is going to show up one chapter and give Jason like a shitton of LSD. Then she's going to fuck his brains out.
I've been hoping each day that the new chapter would come. I wasn't disappointed <3
I really hope this ends with all of them getting completed rejected. I mean, this is definitely a fun story, and the sex elements are good too, but really, after how pushy and stupid they've been I really don't actually want them to succeed here.
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i imagine she proberly going berserk right about now she knows there someone new in town but she cant find him and it be driving her nuts
Wow, I love this story. Can't wait for next update.
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Agreed! These three are more than enough.
I'm still more surprised that they didn't notice his way of talking, he's still mentioning people but they aren't paying attention somehow.
Twilight has already heard him mentioning not being a pony in the first chapter and here he is still talking human terms, I'm surprised not even Fluttershy is catching this with her knowledge of different species.
Its funny. If they offered to help him he might actually talk to them more.
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Their minds clearly are on the D...not rationality.
I wish I had to tell girls that...
Forever alone I am,
Forever alone I will be.
Sounds fun
Kinky.
Ugh. Not sure who told you this was sexy, but porn addicted teens don't count. The word 'cock' is not sexy to me; never has been, never will be. This had promise with the gender role reversal parts but instead of delving into the social aspects of that kind of culture shock, you just went straight for the clop (and not that well written either). Sorry, but I can't continue reading this.
Can he just stick to Rainbow Dash and just constantly bang her and smack around Twilight and Fluttershy who are basically harrassing and trying to rape him?
Thought I read this before,lack of Zecora tipped me off and I saw you wrote it. Figured I'd try it on that alone honestly.
This is pretty amusing and the comments you're getting are also pretty funny so I'll consider this a double scoop! Thanks and I look forward to the rest of the shenanigans should you choose to keep workin on it.
8939495
I didn't know that you were the sole arbiter in whether or not something is or is not sexy. After all, sexiness is subjective, and the only objective thing about it is that it is subjective. Well, perhaps there's a second objective aspect to sexiness: that there are people who think they can objectively say what is and is not sexy and act like they are the arbiter of truth in the matter in spite of how it is subjective. And as for having the promise of exploring something aside from clop, the description literally says:
If you looked at that and thought that it would be anything other than porn, if you thought it would be an insightful social commentary on gender structures and the shock of being totally at odds with one, then you clearly didn't read the description. You claim this had promise, but that promise was not what it billed itself as. If you want something that examines the RGRE world with this lens that you seek, then write it. After all, you wrote The Unity Pact and all of its sequels and side stories, so I'm certain that you have the talent to create the story you were looking for.
Oh great, now they're in a pact...
8939495
no one asked you to read this.
(1) Opinions are personal, so while I assume that you might feel that your opinion is worth something, your attitude certainly isn't.
(2) Most teenagers are the ones that read pornographic literature and adult comics because that is something they enjoy, and while I agree that the "clop" might not be to your taste, I don't believe anyone asked for your opinion on that matter.
(3) How many pornographic videos have you seen? Because in most of them, the word cock is used. I am not trying to state that because porn videos use the word "cock" then it suddenly becomes valid, it is mainly used because it makes it quite obvious that are either adults or have the maturity of one tend to be the ones that consume that type of video. Would you feel better if the author used the word penis or phallus instead? Because neither of those two sound sexy to me either.
(4) As a man, I would find it completely shocking that all of the value I have for society has been eradicated because I am only there to be treated and dehumanized since the only value I have now is to get other women pregnant and nothing else. I would be considered too "delicate" or "sensitive" to hold a job because I am a man. If such a drastic change of culture doesn't shock someone, is either because they're in a coma/vegetable state or they're dead.
(5) Most of the people who "consume" M rated stories here, outside certain genres, are mainly interested in the sex/clop scenes that are part of the story. And it is more than obvious that this story has sex as a part of the story itself because of the tags the story has to begin with. For someone who has written 949,122 words and counting, how was it that you didn't see the sex tag on this story?
(6) Oh no. . .anyways.
First mention of Rarity. None of them have mentioned Pinkie Pie or Applejack yet…