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Oh, Luke...
Vert be like:
I wouldn't mind getting a crack at what's under Fleur's tail.
Why yes, Luke. That might happen.
tap dat!
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lel i see what ya did there
Fleur goes full siren on Luke, Luke thinks he's about to be eaten or something... and then he opens his eyes to find Siren!Fleur coiled all about him, crooning softly, gently nuzzling him, nudging him with her nose, occasionally giving him little tiny licky-licks with forked tongue... Gah, the cute, I can't take it...!
Veux Luke? Translates as Will Luke?
YAY, new chapter *begins reading noa*
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This will more than likely happen at some point
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Was supposed to be "want Luke".
The translation was always going to be a little sketchy as I can't speak French, but I've tried to make it so when it is put through google translate (which is terrible, but probably the most used) it will say what it is supposed to mean in this story. It probably isn't correct, but there's not much else I can do about it.
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Sounds like we're in for a Siren!Fleurabetes attack!
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My French is rusty and of a different dialect, but you're often using either an unconjugated or a weirdly conjugated form. (Imagine, instead of saying "I am happy", you said "to be happy".) Auto-translating French is a pain that way. No, I don't remember enough to give you a grammatically correct version. Just a heads-up.
Yeah... I can easily imagine the look of horror on his face once he realized he was talking to his boss. Poor guy just kept sticking his foot in his mouth.
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Would it be better to try to use the imperative form of particular verbs when Fleur's siren is speaking in these cases?
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I'm really not sure what the most correct answer here is. My French was a dialect of Quebecois conversational (it's not going to match Parisian), so any advice I could give would be wrong (I don't even know when one uses half of the tenses). I did find an online conjugator, so as long as you know what you're doing (or can find someone to bug who does), that would at least keep things consistent.
My French isn't that good, but instead of Veux Luke. maybe it should be "Je Veux Luke" or "Trouver Luke" they translate better and fit the Sirens wanted action better.
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I imagine Luke freaking out when it does happen--but when he finds that the Siren doesn't want to eat him he might be fascinated, reaching up to softly pet her cheeks and dragon/serpent-like muzzle (she gently engourages him to pet, caress, explore the rest of her body, too...), but also very frightened, treating her very delicately, like "What is this creature, she's fascinating, but she's still a dangerous creature and might yet eat me", sort of walking on eggshells around her until at last he realizes, "Hey she's not going to hurt me," and so he starts to be himself around the Siren.
Being as old as she is, I would imagine she (a separate entity from Fleur) might find everything he does, no matter how stupid, to be highly amusing. Soon, hushed whispers spread throughout J'adore, of the "Siren Tamer"; the one who could always make Fleur and her Siren smile and - often - make them laugh so hard they nearly choke!
Never have they been so happy... but any who seek to harm Luke ought to be very wary, as this Siren is possessive ("This human is mine!") and her rage, when brought to bear, is great and terrible indeed...
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There's probably going to some humorous mistranslations indeed.
Well, its time to wonder.
Did Celestia jus though that Luke would know of Fleur because apparently its common knowledge in Canterlot, or she just pulling a prank on him? YOU make the call!
And depending of her excuse, Luke will have his revenge.
So... The Dazzlings' issue wasn't so much being sirens, but that they didn't try to make peace with the Sisters? Or Starswirl being a douche, I suppose.
Although they seemed to feed on strife, why is Fleur different?
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They don't have to feed on strife, just simple attention will do. That's my interpretation, anyway.
I absolutely love this so far. But thing is, after THIS chapter I absolutely need another. Pretty much the most interesting story I've read in this month thus far.
InB4 Lyra's fanon human obsession is siren-based as well.
I hope she picked up that dress after sloughing it off...
...she didn't, did she? That dress probably cost more than most ponies' yearly salary, and Fluer just left on the deck gathering dust. Photo Finish is totally going to murder a siren.
EDIT: Interesting side note: according to Google translate, "drop dead gorgeous" is "Gnadenlos schön" in German. Gnadenlos, directly translated, is apparently "merciless." So German women are mercilessly beautiful?
Are we sure Fleur isn't German?
Really liking this story and Fleur.
So Fleur doesnt actually give a rats ass about Luke and it's just the other entity in her head?
What's the point then?
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My bad. She actually teleports the dress away, but I've just realised upon re-reading that it's not at all apparent in the story. So... yeah... Sorry about that.
I'll try fix it when I get a chance.
Also, how's the TLaP progress coming along? We need more Etherea, man...
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Thanks!
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You seem... triggered. Changed your upvote to a downvote, eh? Hey—I've been there myself with a couple of fics on this site, I know how frustrating it can be when a story isn't heading in the direction you'd like it to. I guess I should take a crack at explaining.
First of all—where did you get the idea Fleur doesn't care about him? Were you perhaps expecting her to just fall at his feet? Because that's not what I was going for here. It may seem like she's kinda meh on Luke at the moment, but this is only the beginning. You have to remember, she's lived a long assed time. It's gonna take something more than just an initial acquaintance to get her to take any notice.
As the for the siren, yeah, she's a hell of a lot quicker on the uptake. Rest assured that Fleur's interest in Luke will become more balanced as the story progresses.
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You just want her to get high on salt again so she can accidentally flash her cooch at
Alexyou.Not that I blame you... Etherea's fuckin' smexy.
The Siren - the immortal creature of lust that pulls power from negative emotions - wants Luke.
....
SHITSHITSHITSHITSHIT
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Seems the siren has an interest in Luke.
If you aren't that confident with using French, just use Google Translation. Just don't switch the languages, because it comes out different if you translate back to English which is normal with the app.
more?
Snippets of internal dialogue from a passenger in the mind that come in another is language is dope as balls. Sweet.
There's a "the the" between "face", and "pegasus".
Reading our hero Luke's mental meltdown as he thought of just who, and what, this creature was that he felt such an attraction to was priceless. I laughed my ass off. And I love the way you have written her dialogue, and the accent you gave her. I barely faked my way through a Photo Finish story trying to make her sound German (or in my case, Austrian). I can't imagine where to start when it comes to a French accent. Looking forward to seeing where this story is heading.
An?
I'm already liking this heh spoiler plus the fact of having Fleur as a siren? Definitely quite new for me.
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This is the first fic that I've read that calls their large eyes anime eyes.
She might not let you fuck her fun hole, but if you're lucky, she might let you fuck her crotch tits.
I love the imagery and the metaphors (similes?) that you used here.
You forgot an "L" there.
Should be "floundered".
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Interesting that you called siren Fleur having a forked tongue and licking him with some amount of frequency. Like 6 chapters (multiple months and years) early.