Twilight goes through the Equestria Girls portal again for the fifth time now but something goes wrong. A warm hole combines the human world with MLP with Zootopia and they all end up in the Zootopia universe. Now they gotta find a way back.... or do the?
Full chara list:
Twilight Sparkle
Rainbow dah
Applejack
Rarity
Pinkie pie
Fluttershy
EQG Twilight
EQG Rainbow
EQG Apple
EQG Rarity
EQG Pinkie
EQG Fluter
Judy Hopps
Nick Wild
Chief Bogo
Clawhauser
Mys. Otterton
Harry Styles
Niall Horn
Liam Pain
Zayn Malik
Lewis Tomilson
myself (Lindsey)
Chapters (5)
It's not bad but it's not good too.
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Yeah. Far too short.
You know a story is horrible when it has zero upvotes. Usually even the worst have one from trolls and shitposters.
9609446 You may have jinxed it since it has an upvote now.
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no it was me because it the comment made me sad ;--;
Ancient what?
Who's Flash Century? Last I hear, Twilight's crush was Flash Sentry.
The time hath come? What year of our lord is it? I'm expecting banners and knights to jump up and sing about doing routines and chorus scenes with footwork im-pecc-able.
Jeez, Princess Celestia. What's up your sun printed butt?
I didn't know Princess Celestia watched the show. How else would she know it's called Equestria Girls? And is that really Sun Butt? The character in this story who is called Princess Celestia doesn't talk anything like the one in the actual show.
Did Pinkie get brain damage before going to Canterlot? Why is she drooling? The mirror's not actually a cupcake in disguise is it? And of course it's shiny like glass. What else can you make a mirror out of?
I never would have known that if it was worded any other way. That's sarcasm by the way.
Sounds like a serial killer in the making.
Cutting wit there. That's more sarcasm.
You cannot begin to understand how funny that image is. All of Fluttershy's friends running to a the portal crying all of a sudden? How emotionally unbalanced are these people?
I see this story has used the less common 'not naturally,' instead of the generally accepted 'unnaturally.' A fine example of how unintentionally funny this story can be.
Boys? What boys? Who are these people? How did we get here?
Don't let us figure out anything about this guy. None of us are smart enough to pick up context clues, apparently.
Zayn? That's so not his real name. And what is he lying about? How would he let them down?
Yeah, Harry Styles is a tough name. I've known plenty of people named Harry Styles who were held back by their own name. If only they were Nick Carter, or Justin Timberlake. They would have really gotten girls with names like that.
Make ends meat? What kind? Beef? Chicken? Salami? But seriously, this is One-fucking-Direction you're talking about! They don't need to make ends meet! Ends are met for them!
Dear god! Why has #MeToo not nailed this fucking guy!?
No! Not the hairs! Damn that windy hold!
You'd think they would have reconciled when Judy helped Nick get over his drug problem. Or she would have distanced herself from him if Nick kept persisting his habit. I guess people don't act like people in the universe this story takes place in.
They don't talk like people either, I guess.
Not a pony version. Cat version.
What just happened? Who said they were Twilight and made the wold correct them?
The real Twilight? But, they're both real. They just have different forms.
I can't imagine these animal forms for them. But, that's just me.
There's that emotional imbalance again. Nobody asked if they looked great, or if they were loved.
I still can't picture them as these animals. And why are they crying?
A big, bad cheetah? Not a wolf? And what's a howler monkey of the third kind? And what's a biological kind? Is this bible biology?
Their big guns, as opposed to their standard issue normal size guns? And if Nick is an addict, why is he still allowed to have a gun?
Didn't they already solve the savage problem in the actual movie?
I'm guessing their clothings got lostings in the wormholings.
Twilight got over that pretty quick. Must be easy, being so imbalanced.
That's not Judy Hopps. Judy doesn't say howdy. That's just a thing that's named Judy who lives in Zootopia. We don't even know if she's still a rabbit in this chapter. It looks like Judy and Nick are as emotionally skewed as everyone else, since they seem to be taking this strange arrival so well.
Just jump to conclusions. Don't bother trying to find a way home or anything.
Naked strangers fall out of a blast open that comes from nowhere, and the first idea is to give them a place to stay. I think that's the funniest thing since the HuMane 6 ran crying through the portal at Canterlot High.
Whose house is this? Judy couldn't afford this on a cop's salary. And Nick probably spent all of his money on drugs. And why does it have all these guest rooms? And what the hell is a get-together room? I've heard of living rooms, parlours and dens, but not get-together rooms. And who is Nuck and where did he come from?
I'm sure Twilight do say. She do say well. And what's with Judy groping Twilight. Nobody just grabs a stranger's hip. Not even with compassion. And especially not with compashion.
I'd think somepony as good at math as Twilight would know exactly how many people are there. In fact, Twilight is so smart that she would know that they would all fit in the house, because there are enough rooms for each of them. Including two extra for Judy and Nuck! And why is Twilight crying again?
That's definitely not Rarity. She calls nobody 'babies.'
Now I really know that isn't Rarity! Rarity has a blue magic aura! Why in the hell does Rarity have magic anyway? Or a horn? Female sheep don't have horns at all. And what kind of horror stories was Judy reading in church? I can't imagine Noah getting all of the animals onto the ark like that.
Fuck me...I don't know if this is supposed to be heartwarming, dramatic or scary. Whatever it's supposed to be, it's funny!
Happinass?! I'd think she was crying with scarednass!
And now they want to have sex with the big ball of animals!? What the fuck!?
In summary:
The characters are out of character. The plot is complete nonsense. The author is clearly an emotionless robot. Thumbs down. And down again.
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omg thanks for the critice????? this story kinda old K just finished it up real quick because Im sick of it. so its not that great but thanks anyhow buddy <3
idk why you say zayn isn't his real name bcause it is I look it up on bing.com and thats what it says :(
acshally i draw them as their animal forms way back in feb 2018 check it out :)
https://www.deviantart.com/xskettigo-catloverx/art/acrosss-the-Universem-732840208
9609675 I was referring to the story.
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ye I no I liked it myself caus ethe disslikes made me sad
I'm convinced this is a trollfic.
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:(
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I mean, come on? Either English is not your first language (and if it is, you need a translator), or you need an editor.
Bloody hell...I just read that from beginning to end...That was...
Well, there are no words I can think to describe it. So, I showed this to my dad to help me think of some. Here's an excerpt of his review after reading this.
"This bog's got a place like tits on a bull."
There's more, but I think that more than makes our opinions clear.
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LOL!
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Like I told you, there is no swear word in US English that can describe this.
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Shit?
9723288
Just because it's censored doesn't make 'shit' bad enough. 'Bog' is the truly foul (and appropriate) pejorative to use here.
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I've got a good bog near where I live.
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Welllll...bog means something a little different in Irish slang. To the Irish, taking a bog means taking that huge, nasty, toxic shit that comes after a night of drinking, which paints your bathroom a new coat, and has it declared a biohazard. In short: a hangover shit.
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Oh. As a British person, I would not have known that.
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Now you know the foul depths of my dad's review.
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I will never hear the word 'bog' in the same way again.
Don't date emos who smoke drugs.
That is a good life lesson.
I'm sorry you couldn't finish this, but that was a surprise ending!
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That's the scary thing.
....wha?