Alexander, or more commonly know as Anonymous now finds himself trapped in Equestria after committing his life to serve his waifu, Tempest Shadow. Only to find she isn’t very thrilled to see him pestering her. Neither are the other ponies in Equestria, well besides Fluttershy who is more a roommate who obsesses over him.
The life story of Anonymous after getting trapped in Equestria while he tries to win Tempest’s heart while dealing with his best friend and roommate Fluttershy who is obsessed with him. Also the occasional visit to the CMC’s to find his purpose. Of course this is gonna be random!
Chapters (5)
Deleting comments is a great way to get people to not read your story. If you cant handle valid criticism dont post stories on this site.
You mentioned that twice in the description.
How does he know hes trapped when hes only been in Equestria for about 5 seconds?
amok means to run about with or as if with a frenzied desire to kill, It does not fit at all in this sentence.
But why does he have to live here? How does he even know he is stuck? It would have made more sense for him to have a conversation with Twilight about it instead of just assuming. Also Fluttershy is very OOC She is supposed to be shy and timid, Not weirdly obsessed with someone an alien she met about 5 minuets ago. Also why exactly did Twilight need to give Fluttershy permission for Anon to stay in her cottage and why does Twilight seem totally unconcerned with the fact an Alien has just wandered into her castle.
The pacing of this story is ridiculously fast and there are a lot of fairly minor grammar errors. It may be worth getting a proof reader,
Also I agree with moustacheguy deleting comments is never a good idea. Either just ignore them or address their issues.
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You are wrong on one point, I'm afraid. Fluttershy gets excited when she meets new creature. Season 1 Episode 1, she freaked out over Spike.
Angel devil, what an overation of imagination
There are various misspellings and grammar issues, but I'm not entirely sure if this is a Spiderses type thing (shitpost stream of conscious that works by being unedited or minimally edited), or sincere writing attempt.
If latter then I can give feed back if you want.
If the former, then I'll shut up and enjoy the ride.
....You know. A lot of fanfics never address how bad Pinkie is for the bottom line of Sugar Cube Corner.
In a lot of fanfics, she is TERRIBLE for the SCC's profit margin.
Ok, we're goin' Spiderses.
Is "hear" supposed to be hood?
Anon got a jacket with a meme printed on it?