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Moondancer's change of attitude was sudden, she could've been a little more nervous, but this is great otherwise!
Bruh I'm fuckin' shook.
She went from nervous to seductive in under half a second.
Okay. I know this is a clop but something doesn't make sense. First,
A few sentences later,
then finally,
He has been in Equestria for two years, and Moondancer reconciled with Twilight three years ago, at which time she became nicer and friendlier. How could Brain ever known her as a grouch if he wasn't even in Equestria at the time? Also, they fell in love way too quickly. Moondancer I might can see, but Brain? If they fell for each other after sex, it's still to quick but believable.
Love this storie
I like the premise but needs some work on Grammer and story progression. Don't be afraid to use descriptive words to tell whats going on.
Cute little story. I liked it.
One minor issue though.
No one under the age of 70 uses the word bosoms. Every time I came across Bosoms, I kept picturing my grand father.
The Monk
And neither of them got to the book sale.
*they make it to the bookstore* "POSTPONED!!"