Just think a year and some change ago things were business as usual, now though I can barely remember what it was like to not have fight everyday just to survive. Its been a long year and a hard winter hopefully I can get a break sometime soon.
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Sergeant is the rank, Sargent is a name.
...mysteriously?
wouldn't've or wouldn't have
must've or must have
If you pass me google docs links in a PM a day or two before you put these up I can do some editing for you.
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I might take you up on that.
An idea maybe for then next chapter? Hank does nothing. Nothing. Just sits in the shade somewhere drinking what he has left of the good stuff. But nobody will leave him alone. Not the frogs. Not the manticores. Not Zecora. And not the pones.
Not what I expected to be updated but most definitely welcome.
....... https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=7cmdIeQ7Fbc
Please continue
9299430
Thats kinda what I was leaning toward but it just seemed kinda boring, I didn't know if anyone would like that.
Hi, haven't even read the chaper and I already love it.
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Up to you really. Dont even have to be long. 1,000 words about Hank not giving a damn and wanting a nap. Could be easier to do compaired to 12-18k that you have been doing.
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Yeah I could do a little in between chapter.
Not sure why you call it a 'shitty chapter' it was not that bad...
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The flow is off and I feel like the characters seem a little shallow, that's what I'm basing it off mostly.
I've really enjoyed your story, it's really good, and written well. Please continue.
YES
YEEEEEEEEEES HELL YEA
HANK IS BACK READY TO KILL
FOCKING FINALLY
Mate you dont know how happy i am right now and trust me the chapter is awesome
Keep doin what you do and gave a good one
(Also i learned the skill of patience so i won't pester you all the time)
Have to say this was a good chapter! I been looking forward to seeing this for so long! By far one of my top 5 HIE stories! I look forward to the next! Thank you for it!
So.... about the ammunition. Do you plan on
having Hank run low on ammo in future
chapters? Its not like he can simply kill a few Z's and loot their corpse for bullets.
An idea for the next chapter is Hank gets a bit "arrogant" on hunting down the shucks, goes to their new nest, and getting himself in deep shit in the process. While busy picking off shucks emerging from their nest, Hank gets pinned down by a shuck attacking him outside his FoV. Then one of Hank's friends (Luna, Zecora or AJ) comes to save him (I'm not sure if ponies can hold guns and that maybe this is a cheesy idea).
A possible background to this is trigger happy attack is that the shucks harmed Hank's friends. The the most scummy thing the timberwolves could do is landing a few scratches on Fluttershy. Oh boy would Hank be pissed!
BEAutiful chapter. Death, destruction, blood, gore. Wunderbar!
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Yeah hes gonna run low in a long while, Hank is pretty paranoid so he always saved bullets and scrounged for them before getting zapped into pony land. He also has a reloading station to set up. But he will run out eventually. Also hes going to realize this fact and start using melee more.
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What do you mean by reloading stations?
Also, what about makeshift ammunition? Flint bullets powered by overcharged magic crystals maybe?
930173 theres tools and presses you can reload spent casings with
I love this story. The best ones are the ones with flawed characters. That being said, Hank really, REALLY needs to heal emotionally. If he is this bad off, it won't be long before he snaps and loses all sense of reality. He's damn close already.
I hit the end noooooooo...
This guy is practically the poster child for PTSD and survivor's guilt @_@
It's reminding me of my dad, in all the wrong ways.
I want to thank the 500 people who made it through this story. It’s serioulsy fucking great. I like the characters and some of their development even if the other are kind of there as antagonists. It shows a lot about how the world here functions. I will be happily awaiting a new chapter of this wonderful masterpiece.
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It was a joke, you moron.
I don't know what your talking about calling this chapter not good enough. I know I personally reread the sugarcube corner scene at least 4 times with how interesting it was. The only thing that's bothered me is how RD and Twi haven't realised that Hank is a good person but with both of them being stubborn and protective of their friends I can see them ignoring facts and treating him like an animal based on how they feel about him. I guess the bothered feeling is good with them being the antagonists in this situation to the protagonist ignoring reason or logic because they feel he's a danger
Holy shit I need to slow down I read this whole story in less then 3 DAYS god I need some help.
When do you think you'll upload another chapter?
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When Lucifer gets back to me on if he wants my soul or not.
9447953
Aaaaaah, understandable
We get it he’s dummy thick!
I'm not sure why I've decided to read through this and stick with it so far, nor why I'm going to bother continuing, but damn if I don't give a point of view more effective than "MOAR". Not even sure why I'm picking a four year old chapter to poke at. Guess I'm just here to ramble too long about fanfics on the internet again. So anyway...
Just gonna quote the last chapter real quick...
aaaand in this chapter we have...
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Constantly angry, suffering from Hollywood PTSD ("OH HERE COME THE FLASHBACKS" and the flashbacks happen, "HERE COMES ANOTHER ANGER ATTACK IT WON'T BE MY LAST WHERE I BLINDLY LASH OUT AT PEOPLE I KNOW BECAUSE I'M TRAUMATIZED, THIS IS DEFINITELY HOW PTSD WORKS"), always on the verge of wading in blood, compulsively must challenge and threaten anyone who has a bad thing to just say about him, his whole "if this is a trap I'm killing you first" to someone that was decent to him, and now "THIS BOILING HATRED INSIDE ME" plus eye twitching... that's all edgy, bud. It's just short of wearing black and red and going GRIMDARK. Why is falling into a depression of all things edgelord material to him, or you for that matter?
But everything I just pointed out is fine. I'm not opposed to edge. I can appreciate edgy characters as long as there's a point to the edge - motivations, a character goal, not just backstory.
Hank does NOT have a point.
Until recently he just kinda passively had things happen to or around him.
If Hank stumbles into situations it's fine, but what is he actively doing usually? Nothing, really, as far as I've read.
He has never actively gone out saying "oh boy, I'm gonna go hunt stuff to protect ponies" or anything like that. He usually just does things because he feels like it - no big reason, and as a consequence other stuff happens to him that makes him react: Hank goes on a walk... uh oh, timberwolves for the millionth time, Hank howls with laughter while ripping them apart with his arsenal, all but cums his undersized jeans when he crushes one's head with his bare hands). His motivation now is hard to understand. The Shucks have been a problem for ages that he just kinda dealt with. What changed? It looked more like he got so wrapped up in the feeling of crushing skulls being oh-so-good (there's that edge he doesn't have again) that he decided to take a day trip into enemy territory, but then "oh no, I'm protecting ponies by going on a search and destroy mission" is suddenly his mindset. Is he a brutal but practical psychopath, or is he cynical but caring survivor? What drives our hero?
As he is now, he's a pizza cutter. Nothing but edge without a point. With pheromone sweat. And insecurity over his ass which is so specific that I can't help but ask: is that whole thing from personal experience? If not then I'm really at a loss about why you've picked this of all traits.
And let me just end off with this: I don't hate this story despite writing basically a novel in your comments. I don't even hate Hank. I've read worse characters than Hank. If anything I'm just kinda bored with him, and I don't want to be.
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Yeah this story might not be for you amigo lol
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Don't know if you can complain about him not actively doing something when hes decided to actively hunt down the shuks and is going on a killing spree lol. Like, he is literally in the process of actively doing shit and growing as a character. Not really the chapter to be making that complaint.