Inspired by my story, "Loving the Nightmare" -- Twilight Sparkle travels to the alternate timelines she saw while chasing Starlight Glimmer. Seeking knowlege, she instead finds lust, passion, possession and desire.
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Awesome-sauce as usual. I might have been a bit more bloodthirsty with regards to the brothers: had Twilight break their jaws to ensure they couldn't talk instead of just knocking them out and gagging them, I think that would have been more in line with the rage she felt, but that's just me and my good ol' bloodlust. Excellent story, though if this is just one world, I hope you're ready for the long haul. You're 40,000 words in and still have four or five worlds to go.
8158640 I had considered it, but that just isn't Twilight's style. Even if it would be a reasonable reaction for most Twilight has always been about redemption and forgiveness.
Is there a chance of Twilight being able to remove the suits, then the Collars?
8158655 Yes, and that will come into play during the intermission chapter.
I hope she can be able to get rid of that suit in time.
8158659 Alright then, that actually sounds awesome, also looking forward to how Alyss reacts to seeing Equestria Primes Chrysalis, and how she differs to her own mother.
8158680 Penalt just answered that above.
8158698 Well when I read there were no comments.
And Aylss will be interesting consider what Twilight's world is like.
8158653 eehhhhh...I think the brothers are way past that at this point, but again, personal
This was an other great chapter. Just want to make things clear Twilight can't use your wings right? I can't wait to see the next chapter. can't wait to see the next chapter.
well it seems twilight has already got quite the harem can't wait to see what may be "acquired" from the other worlds. Here's to hoping it isnt a bad end.
I, personally, didn't want the whole 'enslaved planet' thing - I came for the Rule 34 Nightmare Moon content promised to me, as this was said to be an expansion of "Loving the Nightmare" (a story I really, really enjoyed).
How much longer until the Rule 34 Nightmare Moon content arrives?
That was everything I hope for and more. Thanks you for finishing it. I hope the other worlds also are as interesting as this was.
8158812 To be honest, Nightmare Moon's world will be the...climax of the story and is some distance down the road. However, Twilight will not become as enmeshed in most of the other worlds like she has here. Nightmare Moon's world will also be the one that will have the most effect on Equestria Prime.
8158772 Correct. While suited Twilight is thoroughly grounded. But again, thanks to Alyss Twilight has all the suit command codes.
Twilight has root.
8158706 True. Especially as this takes place pre-Thorax.
8158891 can the suit free her wings? I imagine that being fully grounded was kind of a waste of potential for pegasi slaves, er... ''employees''
I wonder how Twilight's friends will react to her new friends/property. Since Twilight now has a subconscious attraction to her mother, will she unknowingly try to seduce her own mother or will Alyss help with roll playing?
Looking forward to the next arc. Will Alyss join for the Chrysalis arc?
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The meeting between 143 and Trixie is already partly written and has tons of feels. As is the meeting between Velvet and her daughter.
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Yes. Twilight just needs to find the right command in the manual.
8158897 PLEASE don't make that canon to this story.
8159522 Thorax? No. There is no way I'm adding any of that to this story.
8159527 THANK GOD!
Too bad. Well, I can always imagine Chrysalis eventually fails. Much more enjoyable to me, as it were, and I care very little for her. The brothers at the helm is way more fun.
Came for the clop stayed for the characterization.
This was descent, but I think Twilight could have done this better. Like having Alyss have her go mad for thirty seconds or whatever so she could free herself or have her tell FLim and Flam that she's nervous about breaking an alicorn who could go mad. Guess I'm upset that those options weren't considered. I'm also wondering why the Queen didn't demand that the brothers tell her how to free the ponies in the suits. She had more than enough leverage on them and they were not in any position to bargain. And, if they did try to screw her over, well its not something I think they would be willing to risk their lives over.
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As far as the brothers know there is no way to get a suit off a pony, once it bonds with the wearer.
8163935 that's not true. They invented and made the suits, so they do know how to take them off since they created them. If you ask me, you should have Twilights suit taken off. I mean when she gets back home, why would anyone have any reason to trust her now that she looks different?
You should seriously reconsider this and have her suit removed
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I didn't say that Twilight won't be able to get the suits off. I said that as far as the brothers know there is no way to get them off. The brothers have never had reason to find a way to get them off. After all, the original reason for the suits invention was to be a means to contain and control their world's Luna. So they were motivated to make the suits as inescapable as possible.
So again, just because the brothers don't know of a way for the suits to come off doesn't mean it isn't possible.
Are you planning to do alternate endings for these arcs where twilight loses.
8166273 Probably not. I tend to avoid writing "bad endings" as the stories I write tend to spell out what the bad ending would be fairly blatantly.
Very excited to see the fallout and the next arc, keep it up!
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I'm working on the next chapter right now. Should be up in a couple of days.
Firstly if Twilight can get full control of the suit, it will make her stronger than usual, so she should keep it. Secondly, let the Flim brothers stay lock up forever, not being able to free themselves as Queen Chrysalis or Alyss have changed the master command to get their suits off, and because they enslaved a lot of ponies, nopony will free them until they are broken into being better ponies. Finally, who was the first voice control that broke Trixie/143? She must be found and controlled immediately so Trixie/143 and all the other ponies whose minds she altered and damaged can be fixed and all the commands of the suit must be found out. Because even though Alyss and Twilight Velvet know a lot of the commands, they do not know all the commands.
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Obviously it was Sunset.. and probably she somehow cressed brothers
Will the story include the one year later at any point? The cliffhanger for this universe is killing me!
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As events in the story reach that point, Yes.
As of the current chapter we are about 4 months after these events...
If this is an Incredibles reference, I commend your taste in movies! Syndrome would be proud
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it is. I loved that scene as a demonstration of a non-lethal weapon.