Inspired by my story, "Loving the Nightmare" -- Twilight Sparkle travels to the alternate timelines she saw while chasing Starlight Glimmer. Seeking knowlege, she instead finds lust, passion, possession and desire.
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Squee! You got my Saushka just right~ I love it!
I understand. I applaud your dedication to your helper. I will eagerly await your next chapter & hope that everything turns out to your favor.
This is a great chapter, and glad Twilight getting help, can't wait for Twilight to visit those other worlds, and wodner how Trixie would react to seeinga broken version of herself.
I taking it was Sunset in that world that broke her?
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Adorable OC Changeling.
I'm looking forward to how it goes from here. keep on Good author.
didn't expect Velvet's backstory.
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Trixie and 143 will meet.
If anyone was curious to the looks of Shaushka http://imgur.com/GwNXe6k
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^^ Thanks!
Getting mixed messages from this interlude chapter. You gave Velvet a weird BDSM changeling mentor for some reason, implying she is going to get into the sexy-times and submission fetish in the story, but then everything involving Twilight so far is taken seriously as a rape/mind control recovery thing.
So Twilight was still going to be tricked by the Chnageling and Chrysalis, while the other ponies that are working for her weren't looking, I suppose Twilight will have to deal with her the next time she meets her. So, can Twilight use her wings now? Ti seems that she can move then and spread them. I can't wait to see what will the next world be like.
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Twilight hasn't had a need to use them as yet, but yes, she can use her wings now that she has full control of her own suit now. There will be only one, I swear, one more interlude chapter before Twilight heads out again. I'm leaning heavily toward the world ruled by Chrysalis for the next world visited.
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Well, you are well set out to follow the reverse order of how she first visited them, so if your where to follow that order it would he Discord, then Tirek, Nightmare Moon, Chrysalis, and finally Sombra. I thing they all sound fun do but I think it's better to leave it up to you to decide. I just hope you will do the Discord one for the story.
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Sweet. Love me some Changeling domination. Cocoons and mind control for everyone!
5 Chapter interlude arc confirmed!
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Great, now I'm doomed to write that many
But in all seriousness, there are a few things I do want to get done in the interlude. One's done now. The others are, present a reasonable method for Twilight getting out of the suit. Have 143 and Trixie meet, or at least have Trixie learn about 143's existence and have Twilight be at least moderately back in control of her responses.
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I don't see why getting the suit off is more than just a "give me a few days in the lab" kind of issue. It's a device she has full access to, another pony for testing, and admin control over.
The recovery period may be interesting, though we'll see if she's truly over her conditioning when the changelings get their holey hooves all over her.
143 I hope can be "over there" for a while. She seems like superfluous baggage in terms of narrative. Not interesting to read about, anyway.
this is going to be interesting, but, i'm kinda terrified if you go to sombra and tirek, discord will be very interesting, and pervy :3
Gotta say, love the story. I think you're a superb writer and what you create is always of some damn fine quality. I must say though, that this chapter has a few of the tropes I've always hated in this fandom, and it really kills it for me.
1) TELLING US HOW THE SUIT HUGS THE CURVES AND LEAVES SO LITTLE TO THE IMAGINATION.
Ponies are naked. Like, 95% of the time. You don't get leaving less to the imagination than that.
2) EVERYONE HAS THE SAME DAMN FETISH.
Literally everyone. Even Twi's parents. The whole point of a fetish is that it isn't that common, these stories could be an interesting exploration of someone trying to keep a whole life hidden from public view, but instead they are always, ALWAYS, set in some weird alternate dimension where it's fucking everywhere. It's not a fetish if it's common and people are doing it in the streets.
3) VELVET BEING ATTRACTED TO HER DAUGHTER. AT ALL.
This is the one that triggers the ol' gag reflex. Seriously? Just like that, we're gonna hop on the ol' incest train? Because there weren't enough sexual themes here to break the suspension of disbelief already? Hey, I'm all for sexy times, but when everyone in the universe is fuckin' hot and ready to trot, that's when it becomes obvious you're not writing a story. You're writing porn. And that's a damn shame, because it's so well-written that I felt like we were in a real, respectable story, but this chapter kind of breaks it for me. The sex in the other chapters made sense because we were in this smaller, contained world basically ruled by a couple of rapists. But now? When we're back in normal Equestria and I have to read about Velvet actually having to fight feelings for her own daughter just to shoehorn in more sex?
I'm sorry, I just had to get this rant off my chest. It's just that these tropes are already fucking EVERYWHERE in this fandom, especially in clop-fics, and this chapter is where it stops being a good story with some sexy times in it and just becomes a porno with a little bit of story on the side. I just HATE Velvet's character so much here. She doesn't feel like a character to me, like Twi does or Luna does, she feels more like one of those cardboard cutouts in blonde wigs that are brought in for the specific purpose of eye candy in some stupid Hollywood blockbuster. Maybe I'm biased, because I just hate incest in general, but that moment when Twi walks in and Velvet gets all hot between the legs had me rolling my eyes so hard.
Okay, sorry, rant over now. Fantastic story, love your writing style, can't wait to see more!
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No worries about the rant. Read and internalized.
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This rant exploded into a blog on my page. I'm...I'm not proud.