I gotta say I loved this one. Dash being feisty is always pretty hot. I'd read another one similar to this. Good read!

Hey... That's pretty good, do more of that

Do a sequel.

This story I like it !
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I agree. Do it.

Your tenses are inconsistent - some paragraphs seem to be in present tense, when everything else is in the past.

Otherwise a pretty nifty read, though.

Good ole Zootopia XD

Giggity!

A lot of commas I noticed being placed wrong, but other than that, it was fantastic.

Whelp, this is sort of awkward.
Right after I release this sort of fan fic, the show introduces a similar ship for Dash. I'm honestly laughing my @$$ off at the timing.

A few tense changes and gramatical errors but I'd be reallly wrong if I said I didn't utterly enjoy this story! ^^
Although less intense tha other clop fics I read, the setting was perfect and the situation seemed as though you were writing from experience.
In short, I loved it.

"Cherry boy" is the appropriate term. I think 'cheery boy' would be a typo.

He was wearing a leather jacket, so the cold never bothered him.

SpaceBalls reference?

His school focus had, left him in experienced with this, and most aspects of love.

That first comma was unnecessary. "Inexperienced" is one word.

His, mare friend waiting on the other side, and much more prepared for what was to come.

Another unneeded first comma.

“Light switch is to the right of the door.” Rainbow whispered in the abysis.

Did you mean "abyss"?

He’d, never done stuff like this to a regular girl.

No! Bad comma! Sit! Roll over!

Well, Captain Kirk would be proud, he thought to himself.

"Walked up to the queen, said with a smirk 'his name's Chewie, I'm Captain Kirk.'"
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Dig it, could like a series with the comings and goings of ponies on earth