Rainbow Dash 's Confession

by FelixDawn

The Confession

Celestia's sun was high in the sky, meaning it was the afternoon.

Twilight Sparkle laid down on the grass reading a book. The purple unicorn, Twilight hear some hoofsteps coming closer to her it was a blue pegasus, Rainbow Dash who watched Twilight reading a book.

"Hey, Twilight!" Rainbow Dash started the conversation.

"Hi, Rainbow... How have you been?"

"I been doing alright. Hey Twilight, can I ask you for some advice?" Rainbow Dash said.

"Of course, what can I help you with?" Twilight Sparkle respond, "So what do you need advice on?" She demanded.

"Well is... about love!" Rainbow Dash said.

"Love?" Twilight asked.

The purple unicorn, Twilight Sparkle remained quiet for a while to think about what Rainbow Dash had just said. Rainbow Dash seemed to be nervous about whatever she had wanted to talk about.

Rainbow Dash started to blush like she was embarrassed about something, Twilight get up and walk where, Rainbow Dash was. Twilight could see that Rainbow was thinking what to say to her.

Rainbow Dash take a big breath, "How do you know if you're in love?" She asked.

"When you're around somepony your can feel your heart beating very rapidly. You feel like you have butterflies in your stomach that won't seem to go away. After awhile, you know that you really care for this pony and you want to spend the rest of your life with that... Why?" Twilight explained.

"The thing is.......... I think that I'm in love with, Applejack but I don't know how to tell her how I feel!" Rainbow Dash in a nervous tone and with a blush on her cheeks.

Twilight Sparkle could feel a smile coming on her face, "Do you love her?" She asked.

"From what you said I officially believe that I loved her. I just don't know how I should tell her. I get very nervous when I'm around her.... especially during a race!" Rainbow Dash said.

"All right, I help you.. Meet me tomorrow morning at the flower shop we get this over with so by the end of tomorrow morning, you have to confessed your feelings okay?" Twilight said.

"Thanks Twilight you're a life savior. What time do you want me to meet you?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"How about six in the morning because I need to make some breakfast to, Spike" Twilight said.

Rainbow Dash gave Twilight a hug and they went their separate ways to get home.

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In the next morning, Twilight Sparkle woke up in the five in the morning a she promise. When she arrived at the flower shop, she went inside to see what flowers is perfect for Applejack.

Rainbow Dash was waiting outside of the flower shop, she walking in a circle along the nerves she have. She then see Twilight coming out of the flower shop holding with her magic the flowers.

"Ready to go?" Twilight asked, Rainbow Dash noticing that she was blushing.

"What if she does not feel the same way?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"With that I can not help you that it is her decision to love you the same way you love her!" Twilight respond.

Rainbow Dash then pick the flowers with her tail. After she take the flowers, Twilight wish her a good luck and left, Rainbow flies to see Applejack.

After about few minutes, she found Applejack bucking apple trees. Rainbow Dash felt his heart bucking more faster and she started to get nervous when she stared at the farm pony beauty.

*Come on, Rainbow Dash you can do this. I mean, its just Applejack, right? What's the worst that can happen? She a pony that you know for long time and it's no big deal if she finds it weird, right?* The blue pegasus, Rainbow Dash thought repeatedly tried to calm herself.

Rainbow Dash land and gulped a she started to walk to his crush with the flowers behind her back. She got closer when Applejack noticed her.

"Oh, hello Rainbow Dash.. What I can do for you?" Said Applejack with a smile.

"Hey, Applejack I need to tell you something!" Rainbow Dash said.

"Ok. What is it sugar?" Applejack asked.

Rainbow Dash felt himself shaking a little but urged himself to keep going, "I... I got this for you!" She said and show the farmer pony the flowers that Twilight buy for her.

"Fer... fer me?" Applejack asked

Rainbow Dash gave her a nod and she gave Applejack the flowers.

Applejack see a red-rose flowers, "Oh thank you sugarcube not pony gave me flowers before!"

Rainbow Dash felt his heartbeat increase and blushed, "Y... you're welcome Applejack," She said, "I... I also want to... say something to you!"

Applejack stop looking to her flowers and gave a warm smile to Rainbow Dash, "Well what is it sugarcube?"

Rainbow Dash felt like she was going to have a heart attack as she going to confess her love for the farmer pony, "Applejack... I uh... for the last years I've talked to you, I.. I felt something in me!" The blue pegasus said nervously.

"I... I really like hanging out with you and talking to you. You... you aren't like any of the other ponies I've met!" Rainbow Dash said.

The blue pegasus, Rainbow Dash take one of Applejack hoofs, "Thanks for the help of, Twilight that I realized that I love you... I want to spend the rest of my life with you... I know it may sound weird, but I really care about you, Applejack what I'm trying to say is that... I love you more than a friend I want to start a life with you as couples!"

Rainbow Dash looked up to see that, Applejack had a shocked expression on her face and her eyes were bulging out of her sockets. Rainbow Dash shake Applejack trying to get her out of her trance, "Applejack hello somepony home?"

The farmer pony broke out of her trance and looked at Rainbow Dash, "Rainbow did y'all really mean what ya just said to me?" She asked with a concerned look.

The blue pegasus gave her a nod, "Yes... Applejack... I do mean it.... I really like being around you, talking with you, and working with you. I like you a lot Applejack!" She take Applejack hoof again.

Applejack took her hoof away for Rainbow's hoofs, "Rainbow... Ah've got t'be honest with ya sugarcube!" She said with a sadness in her voice, "Y'all work hard, ya do mess up from time to time, but ya have a good heart and y'all do so much fer everypony!"

Rainbow Dash felt her heart swell up like a balloon, "Applejack are... you saying that...?"

"Do not dilutions yourself sugarcube!" Said Applejack.

"What you mean?" Asked Rainbow Dash.

"I mean I do not I love you as you love me!" Applejack respond.

"But.. but!" Rainbow Dash tried to said something with a mix of sorrow and fear in his voice expecting the worst case about the rejection. She gulped.

"Rainbow do you expect me to say I love you back?" Applejack rise her voice but not in anger, "You're my best friend not my lover mare and I am not lesbian or bi... you get that sugar?"

Applejack put her hoofs on, Rainbow Dash shoulders, "I'm straight suagar... Rainbow Dash that doesn't mean I don't want to be your friend... I hope you understand!"

"Thanks... for the flowers!" Applejack take the flowers that, Rainbow Dash gave her with her tail and walk to her house.

Rainbow Dash with a sorrow on her heart watched the farm pony leaving, "Applejack...!" She slowly muttered a she felt a tears fall of her eyes.

Rainbow Dash hung her head in sadness as she slowly trotted and before flying away.

Comments

[Inferno demon Dash]

Damn.....this was despressing...but not all around uncommon, it seemed rushed though and you have some errors here and there but all in all, I really enjoyed it, poor Dash....don't you hate it when your heart is broken?

[Symphony]

A nice little sad/romance piece. The grammar errors in it doesn't really disturb the flow or anything like that, but you should get an editor to fix the grammar for you to make it a solid read.

By the way, in the description;

Rainbow Dash is preparing to confess his love to the farm pony she loves and she seeks at advice of her friend, Twilight but is Applejack will reject her love?

This is how it should be to make it better;

Rainbow Dash is preparing to confess her love to the farm pony she loves and she seeks advice from her friend, Twilight. But will Applejack reject her love?

[FireFlash13231]

Y THIS STORY HAS SO MANY DISLIKES?

[DbzOrDie]

Poor Rainbow, getting rejected in a fic with poor grammar

If oooonly this could be rectified in a second chapter with good grammar

Let me know if you'd like me to take this fic, correct the grammar and supply you with the result

[FelixDawn]

793115 Please read the author note

[FelixDawn]

792653 And I not care about it

[FireFlash13231]

793428 oh okay. I just wish I could click the thumbs up moar than once

[Zauber Junge]

All the Dislikes DID ANYPONY READ THE AUTHORS NOTE?
its time like this were I think like 793459

[bookplayer]

793534>>792653
Well, I wasn't going to say anything because I didn't like or dislike, but since you all seem so confused. . .

Every ship fic gets dislikes from people who don't even read them. (In this case they would have figured out that it wasn't a ship fic.) This fic probably also got dislikes from shippers disappointed that AJ was straight. The descriptions were simplistic, like something out of a kids book, and there was little description of what was going on in the characters heads. On top of that there are the character voices. The author uses poor wording for the dialogue so that (when combined with the grammar that we're NOT TALKING ABOUT) it sounds like nothing the characters would ever say.

Like I said, I didn't dislike, but there are some NON-GRAMMAR reasons other people did.

[FireFlash13231]

793877 then buck them. this was good.

[bookplayer]

793932
If that's your opinion then I'm glad you found something you like. That's no reason to be rude to people who disagree. They have some valid points.

[FireFlash13231]

793978 agreed, but still, I don't like it when people thumbs down on a good fic.

[FelixDawn]

793877 Romance for Rainbow Dash feelings what better category you think so be in the fic?

"......................" characters speech

Not all the fic will follow others fic style for the characters speech and a kid book what you talking about? XD

Disappointed that AJ was straight XD

[bookplayer]

793988
Sorry, but this fic had some serious problems. If the author was interested in fixing those problems, and not getting as many thumbs down, he should talk to dbzordie up there who offered to help. Otherwise, you should get used to a lot of thumbs down on his fics.

794000
I'm so glad you asked! I wasn't going to go into it unless you asked, because I know how you feel about unsolicited advice.

Now, I completely agree with you that romance is fine. I think a sad tag might have been a good addition if you wanted to avoid disappointed shippers.

For character's speech, the best example I can find is "I mean I do not I love you as you love me". This example is interesting because it's one of the few sentences in the story that almost is grammatically correct. . . and it's Applejack. Applejack is almost never grammatically correct, and it's way too formal for her. It really sounds like something Rarity would say. AJ would say "I mean I don't love you like you love me." (if you don't want to mess with the accent) or, even better, "I mean to say I don't feel 'bout ya' like you feel 'bout me."

A good fic lets you hear what the characters are saying in your head. That's impossible if you use words or sentences that the characters wouldn't. You shouldn't try to write like other authors, but you should try to write like the show.

By "like a kids book" I mean that there's a lot more discription and emotion that you could go into. "Thanks... for the flowers!" Applejack take the flowers that, Rainbow Dash gave her with her tail and walk to her house. Grammar aside, there's much more information you could give that would tell me how AJ is saying that. Happily? Sadly? Sympathetically? I can't even tell you how I would write it because I don't know how you meant it.

And if a reader can't tell how you meant it, that's a reader you failed.

[FelixDawn]

794077 I do not care about being popular in the first place and I not good writing Applejack accent so everyone should use their imagination in her accent.

And for your reply FireFlash13231, I fix the damn fic but everyone just going to keep do in the same think so I will not waste my time on those things.

[bookplayer]

794127
Well some of your commenters seemed to care about you being popular, and I responded to them.

[FelixDawn]

794157 And?

I am a respectful person and I respect them different from other

[bookplayer]

794274
And. . . you responded to me responding to them. Then I responded to you, and you responded to me and here we are. I don't really care if you wanted to be popular or not. You can fix whatever you want to.

But if someone asks why you get dislikes, and I can see why you get dislikes, I will tell them. If you then ask what I'm talking about, I will tell you. I will answer any question you ask that I know the answer to, free of charge! I'm awesome like that.

And I STILL haven't disliked you.

[FelixDawn]

794301

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[ihatecupcakes]

i think you should make a sequal where rainbow dash meets a new pony or something and it actually works out welll but then applejack gets jealous or something? but like whatever just a suggestion

[ToriBoshi42]

794301 Sir, You hold all that is respectible in this fandom in your hoofs... use it wizely

[Proofy]

The grammar is not that bad at all. I can read it, so I think it's fine. I actually enjoyed this story, it really had the atmosphere of a sad story. Keep it up good sir!

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[Elric of Melnipony]

I'm curious... what's your native language?

[Fallen Prime]

4773970 Spanish. I know that for a fact.

[The Boss]

...and then, Rainbow Dash became a raging alcoholic, she was arrested for public indecency and hanged herself in prison! The End!

[SuperKamek]

I think I can safely say this is an enjoyably bad story. Yeah, go ahead and dislike this comment for saying something so preposterous! But hear me out...

I can find a miniscule amount of stories that were able to keep me laughing all the way through on how bad it was. Seriously! This thing can be classified as The Room of MLP.

This is by no means a good story, and if you're not into satirizing stuff, I don't recommend it. But, when you think about it, it is bearable. And if you like a good laugh, then by god, read this story. You'll get your laugh.

[Jack Kellar]

5627409 But would Wiseau-senpai notice Felix-chan?

[SuperKamek]

5644115
If he's lucky, my friend... Also, read this:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/247788/monster-hunter-mlp-ultimate

Be sure to like it as well! It helps me out a lot!

[Spinner of Tales]

Well, let's see here... you had an idea, and you put it to paper. Er, well, you put it to computer... Yeah, that's it.

So, there were some errors. Doesn't make it a bad story. In fact, even with the errors, you still managed to tell a pretty decent story about somebody not returning romantic love toward somebody else. I understood the characters' emotions, and that's integral to a story like this, when you're dealing with romance and feelings and love and sadness and sorrow.

The only gripe I have is that I couldn't help but read the story in a Roman Bellic-esque accent. Barring that, I'd say it's an above-average read.

[plskilmeTails]

atleast theres always fluttershy
:^)

[WannaFlugelHorn]

I can edit this for you. Get back to me.