• Member Since 28th Aug, 2015
  • offline last seen January 31st

shadowstar618


Just another brony, trying (hoping, really) to be a good author/reviewer.

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Link, hero of Hyrule, slayer of demons and...best big brother in Hyrule? What's next?

Join Link and Luna as they journey through Hyrule, Termina, and, possibly more! This tale of the Hero and his little sister has been passed down through generations, and now you can read all about it! Just be warned...ponies and monsters very rarely mix well.


This is inspired by Tatsurou's PWNY-verse.


Hey, guys, this is my first actual story that I decided to keep up, so constructive criticizm is welcome.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 45 )

Hmmm...a different start. I wonder, are we just doing Ocarina of Time or more than just that game? I'll give ya an upvote.

Also, I have a question over this:

Link reached a hand out to pet the little horse. "Is it a boy or a girl?"

Saria frowned a bit at that, "I don't really know. I suppose we'll have to find out in a bit. Look! She's waking up!"

Wait, shouldn't Saria say 'It's waking up!' instead?

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Oops, yeah:twilightoops: in case you can't tell, I'm kinda new to this.

7957664 Its cool. I was just trying to help. Also, is this just Ocarina of Time, or more than that?

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Well, I'm planning onstarting off a bit before Ocerina of Time, then head over to Majora's Mask, then I might do something with Twilight Princess.. After that, who knows?

7957670 Sounds good to me. I'll track ya for now.

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Thanks, man...woman...whatever you want me to call you. I just hope I can be half as good as Tatsurou at this:twilightblush:

7957676 Look at my user name pal.

Eh, its childish enough.

"Yes, we have four, in fact. Farore, Din, Nayru, and Hylia."
"No, I don't think we'd be allowed to meet them."

Oh, link, if only you knew. :trollestia:



OMAKE:


Luna glared at the evil moon hovering over Termina. "I dun like it. "

Her horn lit up and she closed her eyes.

"GO AWAY BAD MOON" she yelled, inadvertently blowing Link onto his back with the Royal Canterlot Voice.

The moon shuddered and shook, and began to rise.

Elsewhere, a young boy with a mask released a string of words a young boy really shouldn't know.

Will this story be as long as some of Tatsurou's stories?

Thank God Link's not mute it would be awkward to read if he was

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My justification: the Kokiri are literally centuries old. Link has been raised around them, and Luna has been de-aged, or maybe I should make this an alternate universe... eh. Whichever one works.

7976659 Glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

always like this type of crossover

What the-this didn't update in my tracking! That's odd...

Oh well, so Navi isn't gonna talk much huh? Make sense since this version Link doesn't speak in high pitch karate grunts.

Legend of Zelda and Luna?! I have got to read this!

I love that Luna called Mido Blueblood. That was hilarious!

And now she called Mido Trixie...
Yeah, you've definitely nailed this home as being de-aged.

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I...wow...thanks, man...I feel honored. You were really who inspired me to write this, and now I feel bummed that I haven't continued it yet...

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On it! Probably. If I can figure it out...

8152532 *In Darth Vader voice* Join me.

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*in weird, cartoon voice
Golly, I sure wish I could figure out how to add my story to a group!
*notmal voice
I'm sorry for being the ignorant, school-aged kid I am

8152561 Eh, it's alright. I may have made the group, but even I don't know everything. Just simply go to the link provided (In case you missed it or I didn't add it), click 'Join Group', and add your story to whichever category works best. (Most likely 'Side Characters' works)

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I think I did it? I mean, this is the only real story I ever wrote so

8152653 You did it! It's available for all to see! And, if you want, you can view the other PWNY-Verse inspired stories there... just as a suggestion if you ever get bored.

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Yeah, I know. I've checked out the group before. However, I'll probably be a bit busy in the Oversaturated universe when I'm not writing on my iPad, cuz the damn thing cuts out at 10:30, and my phone doesn't allow me to see the entire left side of my story while in editor mode, and I don't have a computer. Do you see my problem here? Plus my parents won't let me use my iPad like, ever.

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Yeah, sorry about that. I needed to rant and my friends are all asleep. Sorry you had to be the subject of my natural weirdness

8152703 Don't worry, we're all weird in our own way.

love this story.... its going into my favs

Sheithing the sword on his back and picking up Lina again, Link turned back to his nemesis that was the maze.

whut?

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Crap. This is why I need a proofreader.

7957670 ...well then..guess majoras mask they will be able to take their sweet time.If Luna realizes she has moon controlling powers...(maybe not do that at first since time travel is needed to deal with the farm aliens.)

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Haha, I'll do my best! The problem with my writing style is that I can only write when I'm in the mood, and I haven't been in a while, though I may be soon.

Luna nodded, picking up the nuts that the planet dropped.

Luna must be much stronger than she looks. :trixieshiftright:

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Yes Luna is incredibly strong, enough to pick up planet seeds

This is why I need a proofreader:facehoof:

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Question: since the Kokiri are pretty much immortal, or at least long-lived, If they ever ventured to Equestria, mainly the Everfree.. I wonder how long it would take for them to map it out?

Also found a typo:

Along with Luna bringing up some interesting questions, Link noticed that, along with the appearence of Luna, his dreams have Ben less troubled. The young pony always seemed to be there guarding his dreams, but he dismissed that as a coincidence, or perhaps Luna was just so positive that Link couldn't help but be happier in her presence.

Just thought you'd like to know.:pinkiesmile::twilightsheepish:

I don't know if you're ever going to get back to this but if you are you might want to consider rewriting this chapter to Mark a few short time skips not everyone has to be at riding ponies that are so young they can't talk yet but but this chapter feels a bit rushed these are lengthening scenes have more confusion at Luna or a larger periods of time between scenes would probably help then again I'm not an author

There's a way to solve the Kokiri Forest puzzle and all it took for me to solve it was to play with headphones on.

Wished this was completed

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