NOPONY CAN KNOW

Twilight stumbles upon another secret room of Pinkie Pie's, but this one isn't for party planning.

In fact, it's for something completely terrifying.

Chapters (1)

Comments ( 9 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 9
- Newest First
- Oldest First

A Hollow Shell

A Hollow Shell #1 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Oooh. Well done. I haven't gotten chills like that in a while...maybe it was the ambiance? Nice touch.

It felt a little rushed, and it may have been more satisfying if it was explained a tad more. Where did the demon come from, why does it looks like Pinkie? I find that when my pacing's too fast, adding details helps. This is VERY well done, though!

Good for you! Have a like.

PonyThunder

PonyThunder #2 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 1 · 1 ·

Well, it was all Twilight's dream, so basically it's all just 'cause.

But yeah, I wrote this in one shot. I'm trying to get better with details though. But it's just never quite enough

Crescent Minor

Crescent Minor #3 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 3 · ·

7102841 Really? I read it as the whole thing was staged by Pinkie. True to form, she took her attempt at dark humor ridiculously far, and performed a whole Faustian (classical Faust, not Fausticorn) skit just to play a joke on Twilight.

PonyThunder

PonyThunder #4 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7103017

Up to interpretation I guess. That never occurred to me, but I suppose it does fit rather well as an all-encompassing gag instead of just at the very end.

Tik-Tok-deerpony

Tik-Tok-deerpony #5 · Apr 7th, 2016 · 2 · ·

nice. its not often I read a dark themed story, but this was pretty good

PonyThunder

PonyThunder #6 · Apr 7th, 2016 · · ·

7104159

The clone happened to be Pinkie Pie, but it wasn't her. She could summon copies of anybody she has a picture of.

Of course, this was supposed to all be Twilight's dream, but it could be interpreted as literal depending on how you look at it.

DMakkam

DMakkam #7 · Jul 29th, 2016 · 2 · ·

That as nice. The bit of Pinkie having a secret that keeps her alive then Twilight discovers it had me nostalgic about Pretty in Pink, but this feels so much more eerie as to what can the reader can speculate what going on with this ending.

Jane_Shadow