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Blackdust


New to writing, but really wanna try and get things out. Oh, and if you follow me, I'll follow you back. Something I got in the habit of doing back on Twitter.

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The Adventures of Azruan and Waveform.

Thanks to PinkieDP for letting me use Waveform in this story! And also to glittersparkle413 for letting me use his to try and maintain a balance between the story that gave me the idea for this one...

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 12 )

Love it! You represented WaveForm perfectly!

7102307 Woot! Now I just need to figure out his thought pattern!

7114305 Sweet. It will be described in the next chapter. WIP right now for anypony else reading this comment, but with PinkieDP's help I'll hopefully have it up by the end of the week!

Excellent chapter! Really loved how you wrote the beginning. But I found just 2 tiny mistakes:

It got so bad that he went a week without sleep or leaving his small apartment in Sound. A small village on the border of the Frozen Wastes and Equestria.

You should a comma after Sound.

And you should use commas after your last quotation mark when you write something like "he said." Unless you have something like exclamation points and question marks.

7116046 Ok! Thank you! I couldn't remember that little tidbit from my English (more like history) classes...:ajsleepy:

7116046 Fixed the comma in the quotation you mentioned!

this looks like it has potential, now the question is whats next? whats azure's backstory, who are his friends and foes? the reader might not know but the writer does.

Looks pretty good.like paladium said. I like how much potential Azure's backstory has.

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