Princess Luna plans to visit her sisters student in Ponyville, but ends up talking to her number one assistant instead.
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Awesome!
Not bad, not bad at all
Daw. This story is very sweet.
And with no freaky clopping I might add.
great story but not to offend you but i din't understand the story
726754 Simple and short story about lonely godess.
got it thanks
Need to separate dif characters' dialogs into dif paragraphs, difficult to read.
If you translate Luna's lines to middle english, and mention somewhere that this is the night before Nightmare Night, this story would fit perfectly into canon.
Very nice, glad to have read it.
Gaah! My grammars! They burn!!!
But no. Good story.
That was very nice! And even though the dialogue wasn't separated, at least you managed to let us know who was talking to who. So at least he story could still be enjoyed!
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You're right! We so need a Luna emoticon. Specifically one of her smiling.
simple good short story dont ruin it be drudging it on for more then another chapter or 2
Short, sweet, to the point, not overly extended.
Nice.
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dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
Yea, we need Luna emoticons.
Nice story, but it seems to be naught but a setup. I DEMAND MOAR. It reads well and is cute and all, but moar is required for proper critique.
Still is interesting to see Spike and Luna interact. You don't really see that too often. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
>431 veiws, mfw
I actually wrote this last year in a google docs party when somepony said "lets see who can write the best Lunafic in under 1000 words before the day is out". Nopony actually bothered to judge the fics, but I saved this one, and apparently people enjoyed it.
I don't think I'm going to continue off of this relationship, at least not for a while. Though I am glad people enjoyed it.
I may however edit this fic; extending it a little, putting in dialogue markers, and perhaps including small traces of ye olde english.
Seeing as I am editing ponyfic for my roommate it would be good practice.
For the moment though imma go write other stuff. Thanks for the feedback.
"Spike felt a familiar pressure building in his throat. Surely enough the warm bubble soon burped itself out in the form of a letter."
Juuuust as I was eating lunch. Nice.
'The ground rushed out from beneath his feet' Yep. Sorry but it was hard to follow.