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I really would like to be a tree.


Winning a race together during the Hearth's and Hooves Day, Rainbow Dash and Applejack receive a prize; riding a cruise ship.

But an unexpected event happens- it is about somepony yelling, "The boat is sinking!"

Entry for the fourth AppleDash contest: AppleDash: With A Little Twist of Lemon

With the categories: "A Life Changing Event" and "A Special Event".

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 19 )

*reads title, then reads story desc.

Impossible, Apple-Dash has too many supporters to sink. The ship is completely safe. :pinkiecrazy:

I love this already and I want to see this continue. Honestly from what I can tell your grammar and spelling is fine good story and plot development. I personally love this ship. This story should do fine if you keep it at a good pace and don't rush things. Looking forward to reading more.

P.s. I wouldn't mind being a proof reader for you if you need one.


Eeyup. This ship is safe with me, don't y'all worry. :trollestia: I'm one of those supporters. :pinkiecrazy:

Hiya flutters.
First this is doing really well. I personally haven't spotted any grammatical or spelling mistakes.

I am really enjoying the pace of this story and it has a nice feel about the characters. What I mean by this is that none of the characters seem to be out of their own characterisation or personality.

I'm enjoying the fact that they have not rushed anything and are keeping with the friend theme (for now). It will be interesting to see how you tackle the concept of moving further into a relationship. But if it's anything like the last few chapters it should be fine.

I am really looking forward to reading more chapters in the future and from what I've seen I think you have a fair shot at the contest.

-Blizz :ajsmug::rainbowkiss:


Howdy, Blizz! I... am sorry. I posted this without letting you see it first. :fluttercry: I'm on a rush because tomorrow is the deadline of passing the entries. :raritydespair:

Thank you for what you've said! Because of you, I feel like typing a sentence in a second! I just hope I can make it in time. Thank you again! :pinkiehappy:

Hey Flutters
Go, go, type please I want to see this beat all the compitition :rainbowdetermined2:
Good luck flutters and remember to have fun writing.:yay: Even if I don't proof read it I can still give advice for the next chapter.


:pinkiesad2: Thank you.... Thank you so much! :applecry: I don't know what to say.... :raritydespair: You're the best! :pinkiesad2:

You don't need to say anything flutters just write. :pinkiesad2:


I come online to see two new chapters and it's completed. I'm soo looking forward to reading this :pinkiesad2:
Congrats on getting it in on time :twilightblush:

Flutters. Words cannot express how great this is. You literally had me in the edge of my seat with that last cliff hanger.:pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy:

I am impressed, very impressed. :yay:

Grammar was good I spotted a few bits I had to read twice but it was really good. :ajsmug:

Your spelling is impeccable and accurate. :pinkiesad2:

No one seemed too out of character.:twilightsheepish:

I've read a fair few of appledash fanfiction but this takes pinkie pie's cake.:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:
I really hope you win and I do honestly believe you have a shot.:rainbowdetermined2:

Furthermore if this didn't have a deadline for a competition I then wish it could have been continued into such topics such as how their friends would react and how their lives would change.:rainbowkiss::ajsmug::yay::pinkiegasp::twilightblush::raritywink::moustache:

Maybe a fic for another day.:rainbowwild:

All in all 9 out of ten:pinkiegasp:
And test only reason I did not give ten is because only one fanfiction series has ever got 10...
Fallout Equestria hehe:facehoof:

Have a great weekend flutters and once again good luck may Celestia and Luna bless your story.:trollestia:



Hey there, Blizz!

I'm also glad I made it. :rainbowkiss: During a practice in our school, I was holding my tab and typing everything. Good thing, my teacher didn't show any violent reaction 'bout it. :pinkiecrazy:



:pinkiegasp: Really?! OMG, I think I'm blushing. :twilightblush:

Welp. I was worrying about the last chapters, because I really rushed it for the deadline..... :pinkiesick: I have great plans for it, but I kinda needed to sacrifice pleasure... :raritycry: I fear that they might be out of character.... :fluttercry:

Gosh, you really think this is good?! :pinkiehappy:

Oh, and I heard about Fallout: Equestria, though, I haven't read it.... :twilightoops:

But then, thankfully you approved of my grammar, because English is not really my primary language, though, I study about it in school. :twilightblush:

Again, for the nth time..... Thanks a LOT! :yay:

Thank you Flutters you are a good friend.
Yes I do think it's that good I may not be the element of honesty but I certainly don't lie. :applejackunsure:

It's all right flutters. If you check out Crazed Rambling on you tube he has done a really good audio book of fallout equestria.:pinkiehappy: It took me a while to get through it and I felt like I would not have been able to read all :pinkiegasp:

English is my primary language so I can spot grammar mistakes quite well :twilightsmile:(does help that my mother is an English teacher:twilightsmile: ) there were a few hiccups at the end there but they don't seem major.:yay:

They were not out of character at the end but they were touching a few OOC elements there.:pinkiegasp: However I have read a few of the competition and I must say you have some to be worried about but the rest should be fine. The only major competitor you have is 'Flapjacks' :pinkiegasp:

I.wish you the best and I hope you win. :yay:


why do I get this feeling inside when I read this?



What might be that feeling? :unsuresweetie::trixieshiftright:

Oh, and thanks for adding the story into your favorites. :twilightsmile: it means a lot to your only tree friend. :yay:

That was adorable.

Stupid cruise ship! You ruined the moment!

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