***Newly edited and with a new ending***
In the northern city of Snowhoof, Ice Crystal was born blind. After living the first years of her life without one of the senses most take for granted, she was blessed with that sense at age 5.
But while it seemed a pure blessing, the curse of loss and misery soon came to consume her life, and now threatens to pull her into a plot that would bring her very unique talent down onto all of Equestria.
***Thank you to Ormag_Necros for the cover art!***
Chapters (16)
The plot thickens. I await more kind author.
aww this story is awesome watching it
Lovely and heartwarming, certainly can't wait for more!
MOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR
massive amouts of daaaaaaaw
also, very well written, i will be following this.
I'm glad you all like it
thank you for the kind words.
That little filly is so cute! I could just hug her and squeeze her!
*squee*
Eh heh *cough* hmm...
BEER! FOOTBALL! REST-OF-THE-WORLD-FOOTBALL! BOOBS! MORE BEER!
I appreciate stories where the main character has to overcome a strong obstacle. And blindness is a big one.
Congratulations on making such a believably cheerful character!
Squeeeeeeeee!
Ice Crystal is an adorable filly, full of energy and love. And you've made her sweet without making her saccharine. Extremely well-done!
If there's a fire on one side of the room and snow on the other, then Cryssy would definitely feel the changes in temperature, especially as the wolf broke into the room. Further, she would hear as the wolf broke into the room.
Cryssy has other senses than batty-vision!
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oh crud, you're right I did mess that up
sorry bout that folks, it's been a long day lol. Thank you for pointing that out Chip.
great story though.
^ my closest guess to what ice crystal looks like
I want fanartz!
I can't wait to read more.
Hm. You've gained my interest. Let's see if you keep it.
I have no idea what the hell is going on.
I apologize.
First part-future
Second part-picks up right where chapter 3 left off, but from Cryssy's parent's POV
Third part-steps forward into Cryssy's adolescence.
Last part-back to where the beginning was.
I guess I did a poor job of making that more apparent. I will do some revisions in an attempt to fix the issue.
Well it appears that this story
*glasses*
Just got 20% cooler
Anyway, loving it. The flash forward did throw be for a tiny bit of a loop, maybe just say *flashforward* above it or something.
*spoilers*
I love the idea of ice as a unicorns power. My favorite of the elements. I can't wait for more.
I like you use of the flash forwards and flash backs but sometimes its a little hard to differentiate especially at last part... not sure where its going but i'm eager to wait and see... keep it up!
I have one very minor additional comment:
There was a little outcropping of trees, with an opening right where the moon was resting. It provided a wonderful view of the moon, and the light reflected beautifully off of the rippling tide of the lake.
Is this supposed to be from Cryssy's point of view? If so, then how does her magic-sonar reach the moon, and how could she see the light reflecting from the lake?
Miss Penstroke huh?
MOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR
.....Is the teacher retarded? It's been canonically established that SHE CAN'T READ. Why does she think it wise to publically humiliate a filly through something that is obvious to anyone with a functioning brain stem she had no part in?
.....Is the teacher retarded? It's been canonically established that SHE CAN'T READ. Why does she think it wise to publically humiliate a filly through something that is obvious to anyone with a functioning brain stem she had no part in?
39689 damn. The comment has been doubled.
The only issue was not capitalizing the first word in every speaker's sentences.
I also hated this line- "ya, I'd love to."
I don't like the use of 'ya'. It just really bugs me. Try, 'Yeah' or something along the lines of that.
If you could fix those errors, that would be great! Keep it up
Thanks for the comments guys
For PegaSister: fixed your 'yeah' issue, I'll try to keep away from that word in the future
Chip: Thank you for pointing that out, I fixed that segment so it made more sense
And La Barata: We've all had this teacher before, the one that will create her own world if she thinks you did something wrong
Thank you all again for the comments
Ooh the plot thickens...
I can only think of one pony to do that in front of a obviously spent unicorn....
Really sad chapter... but well written, waiting eagerly for more!
Ha! I think I have an idea of who that was
I may be wrong, though.
hmm, this is getting intense!
Cryssy's home city really needs a good hunter or two. Giant wolves, giant birds run all over the place!
Usually just skip stories with OCs, really glad I didn't this time.
oh damn... the plot thickens...
really like this, Keep it up!
can't wait to see what happens next. Gah, if only i could invent something that would take the story directly from someone's thoughts and write it out, save me some stress with writer's block and then we could have insta-stories. then again, the works is half the fun... bah, that's never stopped mad science before, TO THE LABS! *runs off*
spike: "Uh, twi, he's doin that thing again"
Twilight.
"I'll go get the traquilizer darts"
42003 I'm glad I didn't disappoint
And thank you to everyone for the comments, I'm glad the story is so well recieved
Hmm, still a tiny hole in the flashbacks, but we can fill most of that in mentally.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
(Of all the stories that i am reading, this is the one I check first every day, just want you to know how much we appreciate your story, CamoBadger)
Out of all the pony fanfictions I've read so far, this has been my personal favorite! Keep up the exellent work.
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I'm glad you're enjoying it so much.
Thank you so much vulpixel
And don't worry, that hole will be filled as we go
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Thank you Aponymous
After reading through all of it, this is now my new favorite OC story
The whole concept of a blind protagonist is really creative, but even more so is her way of overcoming that disability. I'm stil curious to what's up with those birds, but that's what the tracking function is for 
Considering Ice Crystal came from a town that apparently was constantly covered in snow I'm going to go out on a limb here and guess that the concept of Winter Wrap Up is going to be foreign to her. It will be interesting to read how she will react to this and if she'll try to help with the Winter Wrap Up.
I'm incredibly happy about how well received this story has been, and I'm glad so many people seem to enjoy it. Thank you all so much for the help and support of the story
I've been doing some thinking, and if anyone would like to give making a cover-image for this story a try, that would be awesome! I would make one, but my drawing ability is limited to stick figures and coloring with crayons.
I hope you all continue to Ice Crystal's story, and thank you again for the support
I wonder how shes going to react to all the singing... can't wait for more!
MOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR!
Now it seems that the pace is picking up. The break in the conflict was nice, but now it seems to be over.
At first I was
And then I was
But by the end I was
well, it seems this is about to get... interesting
I thought they were giant ice-bird thingies. Nice twist.
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Wow, this is going to be even better than I thought!
knew it!
DUNN DUNN DUNN
Oh, man. I did NOT see that coming. It does leave me with a lot of questions, though, I'm not sure if you wanna elaborate on it now or if it'll all be answered as the fic goes on. It's just that we haven't seen a lot from Cryssy's time running from the griffons, so I wonder how she knows who Gilda is, how she knows Gilda is the griffon king's daughter and not least how she knows about the griffon king's plan. Again, this might all be resolved eventually, I'm just kinda at loss at the moment.
'Twas a good chapter, though. Shit looks about ready to get real