In war, soldiers are forced to do things they don't like, and things they don't agree with. Captain Celery Stalk of the Equestrian Army was one of those soldiers; forced to turn on his own neighbors and childhood friends for the good of the kingdom and the future of Equestria.
Written for the Fallout: Equestria Group's 500 member writing contest under the prompt "Before the Bombs".
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Like I said, you got the idea stuck in my head so I had to get it out
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Sticking ideas into Camos head=stories the day after=more for me to read about his world...
Let me find a funnel and start working
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Eh, I just wish I could have made it longer, because I feel like the plot is rushed now. Curse my inability to write short stories.
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Who stops you for writing a longer version? So long that you present something that can stand alone, is under 5K and fit one of the themes are you good to go. One-shots are no longer needed, and if you want to add a second chapter or more does the competition not stop you if you clearly label that it is only chapter one that is in the competition.
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Stop tempting me! I already have ATR to write
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I am just saying that it is possible this way, that you can explore ohh so much of your world by this little side project, only updating it where ever you want, not even needing to putting it in a schedule because it is a sidestory and to show off more of the world.
But... I am not tempting anyone
Not at all talking about how many places you could show, untold stories that could be told and such
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Maybe I could expand it after the contest ends...
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Very nicely done!
Oh look, they're all gonna dieee--Ee! Snuggles!
I have a sudden urge to listen to "We Didn't Start The Fire".
...
For something that was written in a day, this is a pretty darn good read. Yeah... this is a tragedy story.
Why the heck am I smiling?
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Thanks
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That's a good song, I haven't listened to it in quite a long while. And thank you!
Good story, Camo.
Should be "bear".
... Don´t know what to say. It was tragic, sure, but I never really felt the story really move out of the place, but that could maybe also be me that expected a bigger change from the 3K stories last time to this almost 5K one
" On either side of him a unicorn soldier stood in complete stillness," Should be an instead of a
"massive scale balefire spells in response to the zebra missiles.." You have a period to many here
And a thing that I both see in your normal chapters and here, your first line in a new segment shifts place all the time. Rather often do you use a different amount of spaces when you make them, but have you thought on using the "tab" key instead?
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Thanks Doomande for the nitpicks.
And I do use the 'tab' key when I do my spacing, but uploading it from my PC onto Google-Docs and then transferring it onto FiMFic the spacing before paragraphs gets borked really badly.
Very good! Do you plan to write a sequel of some sort?
I thought I had already commented! Silly me.
This is a beautiful idea. Love without borders is a really powerful thought. Makes me thankful for my wife.
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At the moment, I don't. Others have been trying to get me to expand it when I'm done with my other story, but I don't know if that will actually happen. Sorry if this is disappointing. Glad you enjoyed it though
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it.
And sorry to both of you for taking so long to respond, I probably got your comments on a weekend I was out of town and spaced out replying when I got home.
Congratulations with feature and the first place in the Fo:E 500 member writing contest.
Very well done, sad yet satisfying.
If it were to get an extension, I'd suggest Celery and his zebra friend try to find other cover. The Stable may be getting filled up, but theoretically there should be other fallout shelter worthy structures that are built to withstand the bombs. IE: Military Bases, Ministry Buildings may have mini-Stables or even the sewer system would work if New Oatleans isn't hit by the zebra's radiation bombs.
I ship this pair so much... so... freaking... much...