Luna learns the joys that can be found in life and all it's little things.
Page generated in 0.033 seconds
Total duration
732 users online
777,915 hits today, 2,151,698 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
loved it. it was very sweet.
it's fine, but i was wondering if you would like to know a better wording? 'Luna walked three legged to the changing table' -- it's subtle, but it allows a much smoother flow. just read it to yourself and how it feels.
-you're- i think right?
Luna's or however that punctuation works...
loved the story tho, and sorry for the edits, i edit for 2 others so i get in a habit. (can't wait for next chapter of 'the herd')
7615945 Thanks for pointing those out. I haven't looked at the story in a long time, and it's funny to see how my writing was back then.
7616063 lol harmony pie was saying the same thing couple days ago. if i write, i usually like rewording things to sound smoother. from reading 'herd life' you certainly have gotten better.
Nice bit of cute fluff that I some how missed. Very much enjoyed it.
I'm feeling a Prince of Egypt vibe with the lullaby
This was some nice cute Luna fluff
Im pretty sure he knows what she meant